White blood

LV 11

OJASYA

it's my first story and first chapter too. I have already prepared the world building and character to an extent. I just have to go through that and continue writing. Hope you give it a try. Feel free to suggest -Author

LV 2

Daniel_Lane_4048

Amazing World Buildings, Great Characters, and fantastic humor quality however, the dialogue could use a little improvement. Other than that this story is great and I look forward to keep reading it.

LV 1

Master_Of_gu

The novels have become frivolous, boring, and perverted because of the author. He needs to read my comment just to benefit: the handsome hero with a friendly and kind family, a beautiful and warm mother, a beautiful or domineering sister, a likable and shy little brother, and a strong-hearted father, of course always the hero's family people They are good and enforce the law and love people of course they are angels, you will not find the hero's family of sadistic villains, thieves and murderers. And all the girls in the world of course only who have a dazzling beauty need his help, and those poor little girls feel the responsibility to help and save them, the hero whose biggest concern when he gets super power is to save humanity and the world. Something disgusting and vulgar all the novels have become a deviant character. The reader hates such novels because they have nothing to do with human truth, because they depict angels of peace and love. We wish the authors to change this trivial pattern and show us the true human instincts. Selfishness, anger, murder, theft, arrogance, pride, fraud, deception, impersonal, self-interested, does not care about anyone, does not interfere in the affairs of others, does not help people, this is how the novel will become interesting You will not be able to predict the actions of the characters The events will become unexpected And enthusiastic, and it will bring a new revolution in the field of novels because such a character does not exist. There is one novel that I know is Revenend insanity. I guarantee you the success of your novel even if you are a beginner. Don't make the hero crazy, don't make him stupid, make him only care about his interests

LV 1

leoreview1

Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact leorichard2021*@*outlook.com (please ignore both * when sending email). A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.