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This one is Dropped. Check out the new one.

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Author: _EMI_

4.4 (23 ratings)

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It was my first attempt at writing a fanfic, and let's face it. It sucks.

So it's dropped.

But don't be disappointed. I am releasing a new facfic. A Naruto world fanfic. Make sure to check it out.

It will be released on 25th April.

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_EMI_

Hey guys. I shamelessly gave myself 5 stars in all the aspects, even the writing quality, even though after writing the chapters, I don't even re-read them, let alone editing them. Well, I did edit the last chapter "Birth: Part-2" but sometimes the blunders are so major that it starts to affect the story. One explanation is at the end of the review. Anyway until now, I didn't think anyone was reading the story and I was only writing it because I have some free time and I actually like to read and for that, power stones are required. So stay tuned for more as writing quality will improve now. Example of a blunder (Ha ha.- don't laugh at me.): The chapter "That Name" I forgot to explain the year difference thing. Well, because of the chakra shenanigans, the 2 months difference is considered normal. But, I won't explain it now. That's right. Tell you what - You guys guess. If you guess correctly, one additional chapter.

6yr 6

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Passerby_Venne

I have only read 1 chapter and I can say this, I like this author. Finally someone asking the rights questions. I've always found this annoying. Mc is reborn and can think like like a grown up while being a fetus. The brain has a spurt of neuron growth while being a fetus, and the brain continues to develop until maturity at the age of 23-25(males). And since the complex system of neurons and their chemical and electric interaction with each other is what basically makes up our thinking and being, it's impossible to be reborn and start thinking while inside the mother. At best, the child will develop memories of past life as growing up and when the brain reaches final stages of maturity, should the person be the same as they were in the prior world, or close to. Since they have new experiences their personality will change slightly, since our persona is made by our experiences in life. Another thing that makes me tick in "reborn" novels is that as soon as they are born, they open their eyes and see everything. FALSE! Babies have underdeveloped eyes, they don't start seeing properly until the age of 1. Which is also why they stop being so dependent on their parents and start exploring their environment at that age since they can now see where they are. Usually I pretend that mc is in a magical world eith different biological development, but now I can be happy that the author atleast acknowledge the fact that something is odd about that.

5yr 5

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jesusguero25

Its good. It just doesn't update(or update at all for that matter)fast enough. So yeah...............................................................................................................................................................

6yr 4

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