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A man who traveled through time found himself waking up in a random body of a young man that died in the war. By accident, his revival brought him an unexpected gain of a traits to make powerful servants who can work for him 24/7. However, he didn't know that the whole continent was ablaze in a heated war of kingdoms. How can a civilized man conquer this boorish land?
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The story is decent hehe. I have enjoyed my time reading it. If I think about it, this can still be improved but it was still great nonetheless. The narrations and descriptions were all on point and I am enthralled to read. Kudos! You did a great job! [img=recommend]
Writing Quality: The writing is good, and it didn't affect my reading at all. But the author needs to edit the grammatical errors. I advise the author to download or go to Grammarly.com and do simple editing. It'll only take 15 to 20 minutes for each chapter. Once you do that, the whole novel will appear like polished iron. Stability of Updates: No idea. But there is no update for more than a month. Story development: It's good so far. This looked more like a Kingdom Building at first and is going well. Character Design: There is a lack of character description in this book. Simply mentioning Burly man won't do good. It's better to add more descriptions like how his eyes look, his face, skin tone, hair color, and so on. World Background: Pretty good so far. As long as the author clears these simple mistakes, this book will turn into a good one.
It may come a bit harsh, but constructive criticism is what's going to make us write better. The premise of the story overall is good. But what's really confusing in chapters 1,2, and the beginning of 3 is that I finally understood what was happening. I noticed that the author narrates in 1st POV when it's for the man who transmigrates, and 3rd POV for the rest of the characters, but just a small suggestion, for non-native English speakers, this may sound confusing, so you should try to polish a bit your beginning. I re-read the beginning a few times before being able to grasp the concept. Keep it up author! I know you can do it!
The story itself is intriguing and will be able to capture your attention. The story development is good, and I am looking forward to more. The character design is is also well written and their dialogs are not forced. The world background is good, but I would like to see more of it. The writing quality is alright, but the author makes some mistakes like punctuation and grammatical errors. Other than that, this book is a really good read and will be worth your time.
I love it, the characters and the plot won't dissapoint you at all, there's something that will make you wanna continue reading. The author surely did put a lot of effort writing such a wonderful story. I'll definitely will be keeping this in my library.
What a great story. Its very unique and I love where its going so far. There are minor grammar mistakes here and there and I honestly think the first part of the chapter didn't need to be in first person, third person would have been better. I love the story though despite minor mistakes and I hope it goes far.
A unique and with an interesting plot so far. The way you describe the battlefield was detailed and vivid. I really enjoyed your work and am cheering for you, so please keep up the good work 😊
This is extraordinary. The plot of the story made me flutter. Even a crow was confused by that person. This story is good, wrapped in easy-to-understand words. Chapter one will tell about a fallen warrior, struck by lightning amid corpses. It already lets you know that this story is interesting to read.
That was such great writing. Also, the plot seems really interesting. It often gives a lot of thrill to the audience which is amazing. Overall worth the read.
I love story line and i hope you write more in the future. this is great work but may i suggest writing in one person POV to minimize confusion. i really enjoy reading. i will read more in the future. Keep it coming.
The plot is amazing ,the characters are great too, this is so thrilling to read, I really loved reading the chapters I went through so far, can't wait to read more ,I love the creativity in this book ,really !! really !! loved Brald's character . A total score for this one...........[img=recommend][img=faceslap]
I love the plot, the characters and everything. I just love everything. If you are a fan of thrillers, I strongly recommend this novel. I have to. It gives yyou chills and thrills.