So first of all you'll need a synopsis because a lot people would be reading the synopsis to see if the story is interesting or not instead of going straight into the story. 2nd of all the story is going nice 3rd of all when you explain the characters it was also good. 4rth I don't if your gonna work on the background but put some detail into it and where they are and uh that's all I have to say. Oh yeah put some genre in it because it seems like it'll be a mystery genre and the more genre the more likely more people will come and read.
So first of all you'll need a synopsis because a lot people would be reading the synopsis to see if the story is interesting or not instead of going straight into the story. 2nd of all the story is going nice 3rd of all when you explain the characters it was also good. 4rth I don't if your gonna work on the background but put some detail into it and where they are and uh that's all I have to say. Oh yeah put some genre in it because it seems like it'll be a mystery genre and the more genre the more likely more people will come and read.