THE RISE OF THE FATELESS

LV 15

Infernox_AOF

Writing quality - 2 stars Generally, the paragraphs were massive and hard to read, with punctuation missing(mainly just commas or and, etc) and the flow of the writing was somewhat poor(considering you aren’t a native speaker it’s to be expected you would need to practice more), I would recommend get Grammarly as it would hopefully help with the punctuation. Updating stability - 3 stars The book has only been out for a day so I just put it as 3 stars Story development - 3 stars So far not much has happened but before he got his fate tested it seemed like he already knew he didn’t have any fate yet once he stood on the path he was shocked by the fact but that might be more of a character problem than a story development one Character design - 2 stars Unfortunately, the writing quality has somewhat impacted the ability to convey the appearance of characters but it’s only a matter of time before you improve on this and writing quality World background - 2 stars We don’t know much about the world so far, obviously if you read the auxiliary chapter you know about the various areas that the world is split into and the power levels but not much else has been conveyed as of yet, of course the book only has 8 chapters of actual story so that’s to be expected Overall, the story has potential to get much better and could eventually become pretty popular as the power system seems fairly unique so far, although I only know the names of the levels and not how you progress so my opinion on that may change Also, you should probably choose one out of the three tags cultivation, superpowers and magic as those are fairly distinct power system types and might confuse people since you have all three, superpower seems the least suited since superpowers usually have no room for growth other than learning how to use them better