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The story is about a man who is standing on the top of the most popular DMMO-RPG "overlord" as an Aurelian mage. one day while traveling across the continent, Anon (the mc) discovered the most hidden dungeon, and unconsciously, his game character became his reality. he was sent to a world where titanic mythical creatures such as Charybdis, Leviathan, Dragons, Demons, etc. reigns as natural disasters, terrors and supreme. With the power of his character what fate awaits Anon as he discovers the new world of sword and magic? This is his new life, to live and to survive. But, can his accumulated strength survive in this harsh and terrifying world?
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Write a reviewThis is a review for 7 chapters so I don't know if improvements were implemented. The quality of writing needs refurbishing. Please revisit some grammatical and punctuation lectures or hire an editor. The sentences are bearable, but as an author, one is obliged to at least give a pleasant experience to the readers. The stability of updates is quite alright and allows the author to reflect more. If this is your first novel then it is good to start slow and learn. For story development, since we are still at 7 chaps, then I'd forgive the development of the story. For the world background, it is not described vividly. Characters are quite hollow at the moment. Please define your character as detailed as possible. No need to write the intricacies of your characters in the novel itself. As long as you have a clear definition of the traits of your character and it will aid you till the end of your characters' lifespan.
it's so good(don't know how it's to you pals) i enjoyed it. it's like how every isekai should be. fun mc, interesting world. I enjoyed it but author san. pls fix your pov. you started with 1st person than in the middle with 3rd person. fix it
Author somerandomnoone
Need more work on writing quality, especially on using passive and active voice. Points of View are also important in order to know who is speaking and to whom. It is also essential to describe the scene well and make sure that the picture you want to show is conveyed well. Update stability is quite well, but it is better to have a strict schedule. This habit is important when you want to cater to fans. This might be the least fan service an author can do and it is good to develop early on. You might do it for fun now, but retaining loyal readers is hard. Story development couldn't be judged within 7 chapters based on your pace so no need to worry for now. Character designs are confusing, please describe them with utmost devotion, and don't just throw in a mob without a prior character setting. The world is also important so you can't skimp on it. You might be writing tropes that are common, but what makes your novel different is defined by your character design and world-building. How you showcase the world and package it as well as how you play the characters will make your novel distinguishable. LEARN while writing.