Overall, the story ain't bad. Just a few more revisions and this would be good to go. Just have to correct a few grammatical errors and probably looking for your own writing style would help. Also, skimming or reading a few books could also help you in improving so try doing that if you can..
That's all my say in all of this. Good job, man!
Overall, the story ain't bad. Just a few more revisions and this would be good to go. Just have to correct a few grammatical errors and probably looking for your own writing style would help. Also, skimming or reading a few books could also help you in improving so try doing that if you can.. That's all my say in all of this. Good job, man!