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Ten Darkest Secrets (Betrayer Series Book #1)
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"You were never the best pretender. Instead, you are my best friend. My dearest friend. The trust I build-up, and the memories we shared, it all shattered. You broke everything. If killing you would condemn me to hell, I just have to take a seat beside you. I will never forget your betrayal while your body is dying."
Set off in the year of 2018, in the capital of Manila, the group of 7 friends, together with the office worker's brother, a popular actress, and a painter, were mystically followed by a person wearing a black hoodie.
Everyone has a secret to keep, but when someone tries to peek into the gloom, you will never know how dark they are.
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I originally entitled this story "Diyes" which means "Ten" in Latin words. It also released this story in the year 2018 as an unofficial/ school project film on the university premises of Pamantasan ng Cabuyao.
Together with the author herself — that's me — the story's arranged with Razil Jane Mamplata and Chris Joshua Gonio as the main scriptwriters for the film.
However, the book was written by me myself with many additional scenes that are not shown in the school film.
SPECIAL THANK YOU CREDIT FOR ALL THE CREW WHO PARTICIPATED IN THE SCHOOL FILM ON THE YEAR 2018. YOU ARE PART OF MY WRITING CAREER JOURNEY AS IT TAKES FLIGHT.
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BETRAYER SERIES:
BOOK #1: Ten Darkest Secrets (ONGOING)
BOOK #2: Eight Strongest Lies (soon)
BOOK #3: Four Bravest Keepers (soon)
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DISCLAIMER:
The characters portrayed in this drama are fictitious. Organizations, names, places, and situations are based on imagination.
Book cover made by: Author and Digital Artist Sendaline_16
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Reading this had be intrigued from the beginning. If I don't focus on the narrative too much, the introduction of the premise is good. I can easily know what kind of story setting we'd have if I want to keep reading it. It definitely had my curiosity. It made me wonder what kind of twists are on the way. Since it's still in the introduction, I can't give a full depth review on the story development. Most of this will be abstract. One of the hardest to do as a writer is to intrigue readers from the first chapter and this novel does well on that! After the prologue, it entices readers to wonder how that becomes to the main storyline. The transitions between characters in the first chapters were well-done. There are two that stood to me because of the amount times their POVs came up. Since the two of them are about to be affiliated, it made me wonder if one is the protagonist and one is the antagonist. I mean I just saw one person did 3 faces in front of 3 people--that almost screams 'antagonist' for me. The idea of seeing both sides of them sounds exciting. Not only does it give out the bigger picture but also it makes the story much more interesting. Their personalities plus the premise seem like a good mix to keep readers interested. There's a lot of characters. I'm unsure if I'm in favor of having them all come out at the same time. When I read their background, like job descriptions, I wonder how they all had the time to meet because I find it hard in real life ad ulthood. Haha. (deng WN censor. had to redo it lol.) The spontaneity of it does make up for it since it's the unplanned that really push through. I found a few parts confusing, mostly some information. I didn't know how they connect and there was disruption in the flow of narrative. It's easily looked over because I just thought I'd understand it better as I read further. The descriptions in the narrative are a hit and a miss for me. There were details that I thoroughly appreciated and there were lack of details that I looked for. It depends on a reader I guess to what they are after and what the writer wants them to focus on. Because more characters came out right away, I'm not quite attached yet to the main characters. POVs are easily switched with a big group and with multiple characters. It's hard to find the balancing point when everyone has a personality to contribute to the story. Overall, the concept is intriguing. The execution can be improved but it doesn't necessarily bring down the intrigue of the premise. I just think that some improvement can really take it to a next level to where it can fully immerse readers into the story. Good luck on future endeavors!
Good story. I have to loud the author(s) for their creativity. The conversations feel natural while reading. They basically tell the whole plot and will keep you drawn in, pushing you to read the next chapter. Waiting to see how the plot develops. But i do hope for a a faster pace of release.
I seriously like Mina, Carmela and Zoey but I'm still not sure what to think about the character of Margo. The story is actually good and there are very minor grammatical errors which does not impact the plot. I'm looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up author!!!
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The perspective of a prima donna or a diva character at the beginning, made me think: - if this is the villain or anti-hero, its odd to start with their perspective but thats goof good. - if this is the protagonist, since this is about betrayal, i wont have hard time feeling sympathy. Betrayal can happen to anyone. While i am not sure if this will be a short one but nonetheless, the command of words are good and the grammar is superb. There are times that i would be adding taglish lines while reading.
I just have one word for this book, unique. It is well grafted and really sucked me in. I felt goosebumps, fear, jittery and anxiety just reading. The perfect kind of mystery book that you read and feel like you're actually watching it unfold. A bit of tenses mixed up but as long as I understood it, I was good to go. I am definitely following the updates cos this is my cup of tea. And the fact that this was featured as a school project shows how unique this story is and author's talent in crafting a really good story. I love everything and is waiting for updates.
love this story! it keeps my attention throughout the whole story! I cant wait to continue on to the next chapter and continue reading the story.
Having 108 reviews with just 10 chapters is already an amazing feat. Horror & thriller isn’t usually my cup of tea and it will always be somewhat like that, but as a recommendation from the author herself, giving it a chance is enough for me to realize that it surpasses way more than what I had expected to find in the contents. High Quality Guaranteed: - Perfect grammar & spellings; Definitely is well-edited. 💯 Hard to spot any errors within. - Simple but easy content that makes the basic plot and story of this novel appeal. - An unpopular genre is used here and has interesting elements we don’t always find. - Not the typical cliché stories we see all the time. This is definitely a one-of-a-kind novel written.
An Intriguing story with an intriguing start, all you need is the auxiliary chapter and you're hooked. Although the book continued in an unexpected way, I commend the author's writing skills.
Great writing and interesting plot. This is completely different from all other novels in wn. The story has a nice flow and few grammatical errors. And the characters are interesting and captivating. You can feel the passion of author. I strongly recommend that you read this. 👏👏👏👏👏👌👌👌👌
I love the concept of the story but there are certain factors that could be slowing you down, I'll try to be descriptive on each one. 1. Pacing. You need to add elements on your story that gives a faster pace, it's understandable when the first chapters are slow paced because you're trying to set foundations for the plot, but we still can't ignore that it's slowing down your potential. Aim to replace small talks with something that will force readers to hold their breath, short said, your first chapter is a good example of writing drastic content. Of course you can't go around killing everyone in the first chapters, but try to replace small talk with something heavier. 2. References and name tags. Overall, I found a vast majority of your sentence structure amazing, but here there are name tags that can put the reader off the mood. A good example is, over using "said". It's truly an eye sore but it's an easy fix. Google "100 ways to say "said". There you can find a lot of words you can use instead, like: Interjected, portrayed, muffled, weighed in, etc. All of which share the same understanding as "said". Apart from those problems, I think your story is golden. I encourage you to stick with it and hope to see you on the top 10s one day.
Cheers to Carmela for being hired! I know that she can do the job properly. I just have some qualms regarding the nature of her employment? It's a tad sketchy to hire someone by simply seeing them walk inside the room - that's like diving into danger, since Margo is a celebrity after all. Although it's good to be precise, some of the sentences sounded monotonous. Also, some of the mistakes that I happened upon were questionable word choices, inconsistent verb tenses, misuse/absence of punctuation marks leading to run-ons, incorrect word usages, and missing articles/modifiers. I just pointed these out to let you know that your passages could look even neater when you proofread them. I appreciate that you're taking the time to describe things, but I think that this you could be a tad more descriptive in your passages. Utilize figures of speech instead of mere adjectives in your expositions. I can pretty much say that the chapters are overabundant with dialogues. The addition of a character after another character seemed kind of confusing, Maybe it's because the readers don't know much about these characters, that adding some more without elucidating on the background of the already shown character made me dread of another appearance. So far, the character that stuck to me is Carmela, by virtue of her interview with Margo. Then, there's Mina who is a unique individual in the cliue. Aside from those two, I'm quite not into the other characters because I haven't read about how they work as a cast. The main theme of betrayal was not yet shown, but I'm looking forward to it. Apropos the pacing, it's a bit varied, though overall, some transitions could be inputted to. Rest assured that your writing skills would improve! Be confident! I'll be cheering you on! (Sorry for my review, please don't hate me.)
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Super nice start and I really like the way in which this story flows. The character design is amazing and the story is amazing too. I love this story.❤❤❤. I don't kniw why, but my favourite character in this book is "Carmela
Really solid from what I've seen! It starts off in such an intriguing way, and the way the story is paced makes you want to read more! Definitely one you need to read if you're looking for something unique!
This is amazing, writing style is very good its very intriguing and then it is easy to read. I liked the title very much. Waiting for more updates
Although The story is good and its attractive towards reader and keep it up author[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This story is so real. Reading this book made me feel like a character in the story. The writing style is really unique. Keep writing because a writer like you can really get an audience,
Aah this book is very nice . After reading initial chapter it felt like mystery to me. The author sure had done a great job and her writing style is very unique too . Everyone should give a read to this book. Good luck author ❤️
I love the beginning of the book, it was very hooking. The characters are well developed. It's very well paced, the author did a really good job the plotting. There's still room for improvement. I really enjoyed this book. Keep it up author, your really talented.
This book is very very artistic in terms of sentences and creative writing. I'm not fond of urban or slice of life stories, but this is intriguing. There's not much character in their dialogues though, but I considered it since that's how Filipinos usually talk. I'm glad that a fellow Filipino is here to publish more works. Good luck!
This is a bit of my honest opinion after reading 6 chapters - chapter 4. The writing style is really unique, feel like I just read a documentary film converted into a novel. Overall is good, you have a good future ahead, keep writing and you shall be rewarded someday. 😆 Because don't have enough word count to say anything anymore, my only advice is: you shouldn't write the chapter title like that, WN already gives your title a number for it.