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I am only 15 chapters in at the moment, but the story has good pacing and good development. The main character is interesting so far. my one comment is that the timeline is very hard to follow. the actual events are fine, but there is no way to tell if one fight or quest happened an hour ago or a week ago. For instance: when she returned to the town of beginnings, until she compared the town to a few weeks ago, it seemed like only maybe one or two days had passed since the death game started. I would recommend saying things like "1 week later" or "a few hours later" to help us follow the timeline. it doesn't have to be large explanations, just a short info sentence or even during line breaks to help us follow along better.
A great novel so far and nothing really to complain about so keep up the good work
Its a good story. It doesn't really focus on SAO as much as it does the concept of it. It's mostly world building at the moment, with very few interactions with the main characters. The reason I find this book troubling is because of how complicated it is. The breaks are quite long so when I returned to read it, I had no clue what was going on, so unless I reread everything I'm screwed.
Hey hey hey please don’t take those idiots seriously! I love this story. Plus it is so hard to find decent yuri stories. So please don’t listen to those idiots. You are doing a great job with this story so far.
One of rare Sao book i ever read and a female mc to count on that . so yes I love it. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!
Is the protagonist male or female? And why does it have the YURI tag, it really does YURI in this work? ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
It's sad that there isn't a chapter showing the reactions of people in her mansion, including her father. ----------------------------------
should i say this are just good, really really good. It's so rare seeing fanfic this good on WN. Keep the good work mate...,...........................
So far so good and author Why, when you reach the most exciting part of the novel, You make me wait for three day why?
ive been considireng this since i read this chapter earlier if i should say this but shouldnt blacksmiting takes only less than a minute or atleast a day in this one and the blood thing shouldnt be possible unless its paet of the effect of the item(i dont know what else could it be) and a lot of things as well like the weapon having an effect on a mentally shouldnt be a thing(im not sure about this one but its my opinion) and all of the things i just said makes it feel like a normal isekai not sao im sorry its stuck on my mind i need to at least adress it to removed it from my system(this is my comment as of chapter 20)...... and this is my opinion i only have anime knowledfe about sao so yeah if im wromg then im wrong
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Best version of SAO gl story🔥🔥🔥🔥 that I've ever read Love how the story develops😁👍❤️.
I am only 15 chapters in at the moment, but the story has good pacing and good development. The main character is interesting so far. my one comment is that the timeline is very hard to follow. the actual events are fine, but there is no way to tell if one fight or quest happened an hour ago or a week ago. For instance: when she returned to the town of beginnings, until she compared the town to a few weeks ago, it seemed like only maybe one or two days had passed since the death game started. I would recommend saying things like "1 week later" or "a few hours later" to help us follow the timeline. it doesn't have to be large explanations, just a short info sentence or even during line breaks to help us follow along better.
A great novel so far and nothing really to complain about so keep up the good work
Its a good story. It doesn't really focus on SAO as much as it does the concept of it. It's mostly world building at the moment, with very few interactions with the main characters. The reason I find this book troubling is because of how complicated it is. The breaks are quite long so when I returned to read it, I had no clue what was going on, so unless I reread everything I'm screwed.
Hey hey hey please don’t take those idiots seriously! I love this story. Plus it is so hard to find decent yuri stories. So please don’t listen to those idiots. You are doing a great job with this story so far.
One of rare Sao book i ever read and a female mc to count on that . so yes I love it. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!
Is the protagonist male or female? And why does it have the YURI tag, it really does YURI in this work? ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
It's sad that there isn't a chapter showing the reactions of people in her mansion, including her father. ----------------------------------
should i say this are just good, really really good. It's so rare seeing fanfic this good on WN. Keep the good work mate...,...........................
So far so good and author Why, when you reach the most exciting part of the novel, You make me wait for three day why?
ive been considireng this since i read this chapter earlier if i should say this but shouldnt blacksmiting takes only less than a minute or atleast a day in this one and the blood thing shouldnt be possible unless its paet of the effect of the item(i dont know what else could it be) and a lot of things as well like the weapon having an effect on a mentally shouldnt be a thing(im not sure about this one but its my opinion) and all of the things i just said makes it feel like a normal isekai not sao im sorry its stuck on my mind i need to at least adress it to removed it from my system(this is my comment as of chapter 20)...... and this is my opinion i only have anime knowledfe about sao so yeah if im wromg then im wrong
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Best version of SAO gl story🔥🔥🔥🔥 that I've ever read Love how the story develops😁👍❤️.