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The thing I hate the most with this type of fanfics is how stu*id the MC's at choosing their wishes. Like why ask for mental shield when you can ask for the same power as Bella and be immune to all types of powers? And why ask to be a strong vampire when you can ask to be superman without his weakness for example? The author putting so little thought on the very first chapter is very concerning...
This is the first Twilight fanfic I've read, and it's bad. Story development is slow, but my problem is with the MC and his constant rambling. More than half of every chapter is the MC talking with himself, and it's getting very frustrating. Also MC is just plain stupid and extremely immature with zero self-respect.
O início foi até decente mas os drama aleatórios e sem sentido do capítulo 10 pra frente foram uma merda absurda, oque era engraçado se tornou lixo, as interações do mc com os personagens são de querer fazer você arrancar os próprios olhos, todos são sem personalidade e falam de maneira totalmente formal como se estivessem escrevendo para uma redação ao invés de uma conversa, a gota d'água foi a gatota extra dos cullen descobrindo que o Mc sabe sobre a leitura de mente dela, foi epitome da burrice do autor, completamente forçado só para o mc mostar os poderes ou se revelar de uma vez, já que a cada capítulo ele tenta tornar o mc o mais burro e impotente possível para fazer que alguma """coincidência""" aconteça com o mc.
Dude, why don't you make a TVD or TO fanfic? It would be really cool, and of course I'm not complaining about the Twilight ones, but it would be really cool to have one from the TVD verse. Imagine this vampire that you created who is the MC against mikaelson.
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This novel was a pretty decent read for me personally. The character design was 5 stars, although not perfect. I liked how the author constantly delved into the main character's emotional growth, rather than leaving him as an emotionless block. The writing quality was also 5 stars, as I believe in not judging anyone below that unless I cannot understand them at all. The world background was 5 stars, with the main backdrop being twilight and elements of other worlds mixed in. The update stability was 5 stars, as I was able to read this in one go without any issues. The story development was also 5 stars, as I didn't personally have any problems with the content. While I may have preferred something else happening at one point or another, it didn't retract from the overall entertainment of the story.
beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................
Reading it feels so slow. The plot doesn't seem like it's going anywhere and if it is it's at a snails pace.
So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.
so far I'm loving the stories I do not mind a grammar's mistake I do not mind the childish don't mind it so far I can say this is one of the best Twilights stories I ever read dial all the Twilight stories always plot it's always getting me very annoyed this is the reason why I do not f*** with Twilight stories not like that no more you outdone yourself you much better than all the Twilight people who did better
dis good shii I see some small issues but thats fine its still goood shi (if u stop writing i will R##E you)
Srx un coven moi je lâche ce truc c bon [img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face]
Estou ansioso pelo próximos capítulos, Gostei muito de como vc criou o MC, fiquei intriganto com os personagens e ansioso pra ver o Alex ainda mais forte
I have really enjoyed this story! I hope you don't drop it like so many others are apt to do.
Good but still nothing important till now, after more than 90 chapters ....... .......... ...... .....
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Good job bro i dont wanna sound like your mom but make sure to get some rest and some sun anyway just keep it up your doin good. Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood jooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooob
the story itself is great. as a twilight fanfiction what else to do you expect from a teenage drama. but the problem is the MC. got a very big problem with his personality and always on inner retrospect shit. so yeah. got discouraged reading it.
Well imma give it 5 stars, because i rarely see any good fics on twilight. Everything is always forced and the world revolves around the mc and the cullen family just flocks to him because he is overpowered. This fic though takes a slow approach, the each character has its soul and you can picture the world background entirely. I am pretty excited about how this will turn out in the end. Though the whole vampire heritage revealing part was underwhelming. Like the story breezed thru it. Should have been a little dramatic and intense. Everything else is good, man. Like a breath of fresh air.
I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.
Really good twilight fanfic but god damn the chapters are short as hell legit takes me like a min to read them lol needs to bump the chapters word count by alot
Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.
It starts off abit ruff but the author gets his rhythm and it gets to be pretty good definitely recommend
... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...
Good morning, writer. I hope everything is going well with you. I just wanted to ask if the story is going to continue at this slow pace. Now, I’m not complaining, but we’re 35 chapters in, and the story hasn’t really started yet. I’m just a bit worried because I’ve read so many stories like this where the writer keeps delaying the plot, and by the time it’s supposed to start, they give up on writing it altogether. But thank you for continuing the story—it really brightens our days.
A great novel that keeps me coming back for more and more. The Mc actually acts intelligent and does flaunt or show off his powers to others exposing his secret and the author made the original book characters not the exact same way of thinking and acting like in the books making the characters seem more lively.
So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.
The thing I hate the most with this type of fanfics is how stu*id the MC's at choosing their wishes. Like why ask for mental shield when you can ask for the same power as Bella and be immune to all types of powers? And why ask to be a strong vampire when you can ask to be superman without his weakness for example? The author putting so little thought on the very first chapter is very concerning...
This is the first Twilight fanfic I've read, and it's bad. Story development is slow, but my problem is with the MC and his constant rambling. More than half of every chapter is the MC talking with himself, and it's getting very frustrating. Also MC is just plain stupid and extremely immature with zero self-respect.
O início foi até decente mas os drama aleatórios e sem sentido do capítulo 10 pra frente foram uma merda absurda, oque era engraçado se tornou lixo, as interações do mc com os personagens são de querer fazer você arrancar os próprios olhos, todos são sem personalidade e falam de maneira totalmente formal como se estivessem escrevendo para uma redação ao invés de uma conversa, a gota d'água foi a gatota extra dos cullen descobrindo que o Mc sabe sobre a leitura de mente dela, foi epitome da burrice do autor, completamente forçado só para o mc mostar os poderes ou se revelar de uma vez, já que a cada capítulo ele tenta tornar o mc o mais burro e impotente possível para fazer que alguma """coincidência""" aconteça com o mc.
Dude, why don't you make a TVD or TO fanfic? It would be really cool, and of course I'm not complaining about the Twilight ones, but it would be really cool to have one from the TVD verse. Imagine this vampire that you created who is the MC against mikaelson.
[img=Loving it] truly loving it [img=More pls] give more ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥🩵❤️🔥💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💬💬💬💬💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💬💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯😝😄🤣🤣😅😁😄😃😀😃😁😆😅🤣🤣😝😝
This novel was a pretty decent read for me personally. The character design was 5 stars, although not perfect. I liked how the author constantly delved into the main character's emotional growth, rather than leaving him as an emotionless block. The writing quality was also 5 stars, as I believe in not judging anyone below that unless I cannot understand them at all. The world background was 5 stars, with the main backdrop being twilight and elements of other worlds mixed in. The update stability was 5 stars, as I was able to read this in one go without any issues. The story development was also 5 stars, as I didn't personally have any problems with the content. While I may have preferred something else happening at one point or another, it didn't retract from the overall entertainment of the story.
beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................
Reading it feels so slow. The plot doesn't seem like it's going anywhere and if it is it's at a snails pace.
So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.
so far I'm loving the stories I do not mind a grammar's mistake I do not mind the childish don't mind it so far I can say this is one of the best Twilights stories I ever read dial all the Twilight stories always plot it's always getting me very annoyed this is the reason why I do not f*** with Twilight stories not like that no more you outdone yourself you much better than all the Twilight people who did better
dis good shii I see some small issues but thats fine its still goood shi (if u stop writing i will R##E you)
Srx un coven moi je lâche ce truc c bon [img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face][img=In your face]
Estou ansioso pelo próximos capítulos, Gostei muito de como vc criou o MC, fiquei intriganto com os personagens e ansioso pra ver o Alex ainda mais forte
I have really enjoyed this story! I hope you don't drop it like so many others are apt to do.
Good but still nothing important till now, after more than 90 chapters ....... .......... ...... .....
Bien et toi tu es où [img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls]
Good job bro i dont wanna sound like your mom but make sure to get some rest and some sun anyway just keep it up your doin good. Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood jooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooob
the story itself is great. as a twilight fanfiction what else to do you expect from a teenage drama. but the problem is the MC. got a very big problem with his personality and always on inner retrospect shit. so yeah. got discouraged reading it.
Well imma give it 5 stars, because i rarely see any good fics on twilight. Everything is always forced and the world revolves around the mc and the cullen family just flocks to him because he is overpowered. This fic though takes a slow approach, the each character has its soul and you can picture the world background entirely. I am pretty excited about how this will turn out in the end. Though the whole vampire heritage revealing part was underwhelming. Like the story breezed thru it. Should have been a little dramatic and intense. Everything else is good, man. Like a breath of fresh air.
I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.
Really good twilight fanfic but god damn the chapters are short as hell legit takes me like a min to read them lol needs to bump the chapters word count by alot
Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.
It starts off abit ruff but the author gets his rhythm and it gets to be pretty good definitely recommend
... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...
Good morning, writer. I hope everything is going well with you. I just wanted to ask if the story is going to continue at this slow pace. Now, I’m not complaining, but we’re 35 chapters in, and the story hasn’t really started yet. I’m just a bit worried because I’ve read so many stories like this where the writer keeps delaying the plot, and by the time it’s supposed to start, they give up on writing it altogether. But thank you for continuing the story—it really brightens our days.
A great novel that keeps me coming back for more and more. The Mc actually acts intelligent and does flaunt or show off his powers to others exposing his secret and the author made the original book characters not the exact same way of thinking and acting like in the books making the characters seem more lively.
So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.