Primogenitor in Marvel

Dont know if the author deletes bad reviews or... Writing quality is good and updates are consistent so far. story development was interesting until shortly after meeting carol. The whole hypocrisy play with getting her kidnapped and then going "woo me... i could have prevented that. Poor carol feel bad and i have to suffer living with that but all for the greater good" would make dumbledore fans proud. Add to that a rather random Adoption and spoiling said daughter with mostly slice of live elements derailed it a lot. Dunno if it will get better again but currently at chapter 24 i guess i will have to drop it. characters seem rather linear and simple with rather rushed character interactions and the relationshipdynamic. No problem if relationships may develop fast and you dont have to wait 100k words for some romance or friendship bit currently the character development is at most slightly above the love at first sight lets marry trope. Might work with mind control ina slightly darker work but here its just random

It's my personal opinion so don't take any offense. The novel is very well written and close to zero grammar mistakes. The world background didn't change much from original marvel or at least not yet so I will only give one star as I think the there should be a butterfly effect considering that the Mc is from a fairly wealthy family that should have quite some influence on the world with every action it does. Mc is typical "I just got my powers but at least I know what they do" - guy. He trains them but seldomly uses them which is quite sad considering the power he has. It's also quite a shame that he didn't came into contact with the marvel vampires. About the story. The only thing he does is going around and f**k his women. There's also a little bit about the world but not really much. His family affection is a nuisance after some time as I think that it is too much and the story doesn't progress. About giving the characters a background. It's a nice idea and I don't really mind but it's unreasonable after some time. Just do it in 20 chapters and that's it. There's no need to span the entire beginning in 100+ chapters. If you wanted to give them a background do it somehow in moderation. I also don't get it why he doesn't create more vampires but instead creates super soldiers. Now the only important information is, that he has three wives (maybe 4 if you count ophelia), has three children (for which I personally hoped that there would finally be a male as the sole male character seems to be the mc). He is a king of a country and subdued some kree people. He does almost nothing except for getting women and doing them and also playing with his daughters. It's the first time I saw such a mix stb+marvel but somehow the implementation could've been far better and it's too slow paced.

an ff of the strongest progenitor, I can not wait to read about this new adventure, and it would be nice to see growth on the part of his side "vampire" I see a lot of ff with vampire, but soon a suruba of powers enter and is very confusing its power level, would be interesting to get these powers outside the bloodline, and transform into other avatars or strengthen what you already have, one day realize my dream of seeing a mixture of alucard with Raizel and in the end awakening or creating some deity over "monsters" anyway it was just a tip thank you for your attention.