Passages of Time

LV 2

Anime_loverx

This story is amazing like you could feel the t e n t i o n and you would kind of feel as if u were there which makes it good. I really love how she thinks about how the main character thinks, feels and imagine rather then rushing things I would really suggest everyone to read it, I think it’s a really good story, I think it would get better and better during the future but the only thing I want her to improve is maybe taking her time writing the story ,making it a bit longer then rushing writing it into the website well if she can’t she must be having a busy live..... cough yah , and I think it would be better if she could write the main character point of view in one whole chapter rather then making it into three chapter, it all depends on how she will write her story. I kind of get why she’s doing it to give the audience more thoughts about what’s going to happen next I think it’s going well if that’s what’s she’s doing it 👏👏👏👏I think she’s already doing a great work other then that I think it’s reallllyyy goood can’t wait for more chapter in the future. Good work (wtf I wrote so much for a review) cough goodbye even though u never said hi.😂

Wow I really like how the story is developing chapter by chapter it is quite interesting and intriguing to see that.For improvements I suggest you to do a character perspective from the main character feelings and a little more information about her life in general.I am really impressed and I can't wait for the next chapter.For the people reading this story the writer can't post all her chapters in one go she needs time to process her thoughts on what's going to happen and she has quite a busy life as you can see from her updates but her stories are really riveting so keep reading them ,she deserves more attention .