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LV 4

amaturewriter

Its cool that MC is way before cannon and nice that author wont see this as an anime world, very nice...Also interesting to see that MC will be a marine, rarely if ever done. Suggestions: -Dont become marine right now, travel the world for a bit, and show some new **** first. -Explore the world, the one piece world should techinacally be gigantic, maybe even the size of a sun, cause they have oceans with creatures that are fking kilometres in size, and so they must be gigantic. So yah. -this is way before cannon, so u could make it so that Z family is still alive, MC could save him and as a result join elite team and through that become a marine? -Fisher tiger, help him..MC could make his land from the shadows? -Way before cannon, MC can save gold tesoro and his lover, reason I say this is for MC to form organisation..now whilst I believe in one man army, a org would be interesting...especially if MC has a genius like tesoro in his team. But u showing how its created would be interesting to read. -Gekko Moria, save him after his defeat and send him to thriller bark, and turn it into a resort? -Momo shiliks sis, save her and send her to mink people, then gain their alliance, if u want, add her to org or make her part of his marine crew and manage some****, cause she was smart. -Same with robin, and it would funny if u take her with him to marine base, and u could kill her...meaning, use magic to transform dead body into her and give to marines, u get money and robin would be safe, no one can suspect **** cause her image is over a decade old, she is ' dead ' and also cause of plot. -Any relationships, take slow and show build, and dont do some weird dxd ****, and force it in a couple weeks or months. GL

LV 5

ArcOfEmbodiment

Good story 140 characters: Nau brit pindaarselok, aal bein gramme graan, Nol riiselaas do vah, ahrk venne nau viing. Strunne ahrk tahrovin bo, fah faal thuum dreh uth goraan koor. Ful, huzrah, feyn do daar lein, Alduin. Hin bein ven tol du daanik sille vonuz. Naal suleyk do kruziik kendovve, lot thuum kotin, Rein komeyt amativ, hi sahlo, ahrk hin vokul rel nok nu, Feyn do daar lein, Alduin!

LV 13

Kliemann

For such a novel name and MC power, he really lacks imagination, he has the arc of embodiment but dont create anything good. for example: -Super Soldier Serum -Pill of cultivation world -Symbiote or something similar -Manuals, that may vary from cultivation manuals to haki to martial arts and weapons manuals. This was just I thought without any deep thinking, whiler the MC basically just create a spear and boat... Maybe after a reboot I might come back to this... Just remeber these were just examples, dont need to create these things to make the novel good.

LV 5

ahmed_waleed_1200

Thanks for your hard work so keep up and don't drop this story. Waiting for him to become more powerful and visit other worlds and become a god. Really good and great work so don't drop it and hope you post new chapters soon. Waiting for new chapters and updates.

LV 5

Dfransginola

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LV 4

DARK_SAGE

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LV 4

DARK_SAGE

Keep going 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩❤❤💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕

LV 14

Carefree_Sensei

I'm a drunk I'm a troll troll troll troll troll troll troll tralalala Trololo tralalalala Joe lalalalala troll la la la la la la la la love hahaha hahaha

LV 3

Stand_TheWorld777

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LV 3

Rudranarayan_Nanda

Bro this is a good story but try to improve more and don't make our mc harem seeking protagonist. Harem are good in manga and anime but bad if you put it bluntly in novels

LV 4

yungN

Quite a nice novel. I do like the Mc's power, quite overpowered. Tengoku Aburame Meshishi Tengoku Aburame Meshishi Tengoku Aburame Meshishi