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So this will need to story will be needed to rewrite again it's have too much flaws. And author read my comment in second chapter and give me reason. Cause if you don't explain it. It will be one of the biggest hole in the story. So think nicely. I m not saying it bad but it's have too much loopholes like my call of duty warzone account name. Why is he hated my his mother and father that they didn't even hear his reason or try to hear out. Reason why he is neglected. Cause you should have an chapter to explain it first other then make further story. I am discouragingyou and saying you are bad. Just saying this for you to see flaws which you will not make in future.
This is retarded..this is a true neglect FF...just like the rest of the garbage.....ie: MC is neglected, tortured and raped [chp 1 and chp 2]......and yet author does this retarded **** of making MC normal and happy despite what he is been through,, I mean everything is unrealistic....I mean the kages child being tortured.... to said childs mentality....point is, its just like all the other neglect FF's out there, authors **** up MC just for a sad story and theres no change for MC's mentality, plus all their **** is unrealistic [i mean, even in cannon naruto didnt gone through this ****, .......if author wanted to do it, he should've built it, instead of this ****]...no bash...just...if yah despise neglect FF,,,dont read this
So this will need to story will be needed to rewrite again it's have too much flaws. And author read my comment in second chapter and give me reason. Cause if you don't explain it. It will be one of the biggest hole in the story. So think nicely. I m not saying it bad but it's have too much loopholes like my call of duty warzone account name. Why is he hated my his mother and father that they didn't even hear his reason or try to hear out. Reason why he is neglected. Cause you should have an chapter to explain it first other then make further story. I am discouragingyou and saying you are bad. Just saying this for you to see flaws which you will not make in future.
This is retarded..this is a true neglect FF...just like the rest of the garbage.....ie: MC is neglected, tortured and raped [chp 1 and chp 2]......and yet author does this retarded **** of making MC normal and happy despite what he is been through,, I mean everything is unrealistic....I mean the kages child being tortured.... to said childs mentality....point is, its just like all the other neglect FF's out there, authors **** up MC just for a sad story and theres no change for MC's mentality, plus all their **** is unrealistic [i mean, even in cannon naruto didnt gone through this ****, .......if author wanted to do it, he should've built it, instead of this ****]...no bash...just...if yah despise neglect FF,,,dont read this