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The inner side comments are really cringey. This would've been nice if MC didn't have a hard on everytime he hears a familiar name.
Ok, being objective this Fanfic is very good, the character interactions are very good and everything, BUT there is always a BUT, the story is probably the slowest I've read in a Naruto Fanfic, I mean, 59 chapters and the mc He's still 6 years old, he's boring.
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Muy bien fanfic de Naruto me gusta como estas desarrollando la historia que no te estancas y los capítulos antes del canon no se se sienten como relleno además de muy buena la forma en que muestras su relación con Hinata
Olvide poner una calificación jaja. Por el momento voy por el capitulo 38 y no puedo parar de leerlo, me encanta la personalidad del MC y como interactúa con los demás personajes. Vi que alguien había escrito un comentario diciendo que el MC tenia complejo de Héroe, no se si comió setas radioactivas o algo por el estilo, o simplemente leyó otro Fic y lo confundió con este xD
Good book. Mc talent is explained and his power up isn’t without reason. No system, but signs of a growing harem so beware of your steps fellow fatties.
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Is a good story of naruto. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
For someonewho’s writing a fic for the first time this story is really impressive, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
As far as chp 39 the ff is really good, and that is just the intro stuff, he is op enough to curbstomp any random chunin but not quite jonin lv yet, a gokd balance
breath of fresh air in the naruto isekai novels. from the start it seems well written and interesting. i like that the mc (despite his family) is not some edge lord but also not a beta. he knows what he wants and acts to get it but also has friends around him to get help and keep him grounded. all in all with the update stability, i recommend this book👌👌
The writing quality is great, Grammar is consistent with minimal mistakes if any(I personally haven't noticed any). As for characters, the MC is pretty selfish, manipulative and a bit villainous but nothing that would turn away readers who don't mind a Capitalist business minded person. His interactions with the support characters thus far show him to be possessive towards those he considers 'his', and indifferent to those who aren't 'useful'. No unnecessary bashing, so that's a plus for me. The support characters till now have been consistent with their canon counterparts, but not many have been given enough screen time, of the most prominent characters in the support cast, Hinata is still "Hinata-ish" if you get me, and Danzo in my opinion has had the greatest exploration and development, he is a bit soft towards the MC, but not so much that it's OOC, in this fic at least he seems Human enough and not the complete 1D villain that most portray him to be. The world background is still Canon Naruto thus far, so nothing much to say here. As for the negatives, the character interactions between the MC and the support other than Hinata and Danzo is a bit 1D and they haven't shown much thought on their part. The only well explored support character with independent thought and personality is Danzo, even Hinata lacks a bit when it comes to her own self, we don't have much to see of her thoughts and personality other than what she thinks of the MC or anything related to the MC, but this can be forgiven as she's still a child. Overall a good read in my opinion.
To be honest this is a really great story and I hope that the keeps on going much love a fan
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Okay I’ll preface this review by saying that the MC and plot are great so far and the chosen side characters are great as well. The writing quality is also great. I have only one issue with this story so far and it’s the MC’s choice of ninjutsu. Small spoiler here but giving the MC wind and lightning affinity and making his first elemental ninjustus water wall, water clone, great fireball, and earth wall is crazy to me as it waste tons of time and effort that could be spent on the things you have a talent for. It’s all well and good to “cover his weaknesses” but the truth is making your strengths stronger is way better in Naruto than branching out to much Garra and Lee are great examples of focusing on one’s strengths. Side note: if you have swift release then leaning how to slowly cast a wall you won’t even use is wild. Also thanks author excited to read more!
I like MC, he is intelligent and not stupid to do what he needs, also the author listens to his audience, a good plot and a great origin, he knows what to capture and it gets better and better.
25 chapters in, and it looks like it has potential. The writing could be better, but it’s better than mine so I won’t complain. my only real grievance so far is that mc isn’t learning Wind style from danzo.
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The inner side comments are really cringey. This would've been nice if MC didn't have a hard on everytime he hears a familiar name.
Ok, being objective this Fanfic is very good, the character interactions are very good and everything, BUT there is always a BUT, the story is probably the slowest I've read in a Naruto Fanfic, I mean, 59 chapters and the mc He's still 6 years old, he's boring.
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Muy bien fanfic de Naruto me gusta como estas desarrollando la historia que no te estancas y los capítulos antes del canon no se se sienten como relleno además de muy buena la forma en que muestras su relación con Hinata
Olvide poner una calificación jaja. Por el momento voy por el capitulo 38 y no puedo parar de leerlo, me encanta la personalidad del MC y como interactúa con los demás personajes. Vi que alguien había escrito un comentario diciendo que el MC tenia complejo de Héroe, no se si comió setas radioactivas o algo por el estilo, o simplemente leyó otro Fic y lo confundió con este xD
Good book. Mc talent is explained and his power up isn’t without reason. No system, but signs of a growing harem so beware of your steps fellow fatties.
ésto parece interesante jeje zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
Is a good story of naruto. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
For someonewho’s writing a fic for the first time this story is really impressive, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
As far as chp 39 the ff is really good, and that is just the intro stuff, he is op enough to curbstomp any random chunin but not quite jonin lv yet, a gokd balance
breath of fresh air in the naruto isekai novels. from the start it seems well written and interesting. i like that the mc (despite his family) is not some edge lord but also not a beta. he knows what he wants and acts to get it but also has friends around him to get help and keep him grounded. all in all with the update stability, i recommend this book👌👌
The writing quality is great, Grammar is consistent with minimal mistakes if any(I personally haven't noticed any). As for characters, the MC is pretty selfish, manipulative and a bit villainous but nothing that would turn away readers who don't mind a Capitalist business minded person. His interactions with the support characters thus far show him to be possessive towards those he considers 'his', and indifferent to those who aren't 'useful'. No unnecessary bashing, so that's a plus for me. The support characters till now have been consistent with their canon counterparts, but not many have been given enough screen time, of the most prominent characters in the support cast, Hinata is still "Hinata-ish" if you get me, and Danzo in my opinion has had the greatest exploration and development, he is a bit soft towards the MC, but not so much that it's OOC, in this fic at least he seems Human enough and not the complete 1D villain that most portray him to be. The world background is still Canon Naruto thus far, so nothing much to say here. As for the negatives, the character interactions between the MC and the support other than Hinata and Danzo is a bit 1D and they haven't shown much thought on their part. The only well explored support character with independent thought and personality is Danzo, even Hinata lacks a bit when it comes to her own self, we don't have much to see of her thoughts and personality other than what she thinks of the MC or anything related to the MC, but this can be forgiven as she's still a child. Overall a good read in my opinion.
To be honest this is a really great story and I hope that the keeps on going much love a fan
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Okay I’ll preface this review by saying that the MC and plot are great so far and the chosen side characters are great as well. The writing quality is also great. I have only one issue with this story so far and it’s the MC’s choice of ninjutsu. Small spoiler here but giving the MC wind and lightning affinity and making his first elemental ninjustus water wall, water clone, great fireball, and earth wall is crazy to me as it waste tons of time and effort that could be spent on the things you have a talent for. It’s all well and good to “cover his weaknesses” but the truth is making your strengths stronger is way better in Naruto than branching out to much Garra and Lee are great examples of focusing on one’s strengths. Side note: if you have swift release then leaning how to slowly cast a wall you won’t even use is wild. Also thanks author excited to read more!
I like MC, he is intelligent and not stupid to do what he needs, also the author listens to his audience, a good plot and a great origin, he knows what to capture and it gets better and better.
25 chapters in, and it looks like it has potential. The writing could be better, but it’s better than mine so I won’t complain. my only real grievance so far is that mc isn’t learning Wind style from danzo.
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