MLBB: LOVE UNTOLD

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BlackSwan_20

I joined this contest not for prize and fame but to improve my self in the field of writing AND TO REACH MORE READERS MLBB: LOVE UNTOLD NEEDS YOUR REVIEW I WILL ACCEPT NEGATIVE REVIEWS IF IT IS FOR MY IMPROVEMENT. THANKS

LV 3

Arcturus420

Pros: Rather poetic, graceful prose, like a fairytale story or a dark, grim tale. Use of rare words noted. Cons: Rather short, too quick pacing, lack of elaboration and connection. Suggestion: Put all of the four chapters into one, and rename the whole chapter into something different. I see potential, but it's hitting the wrong tones. Good luck!

LV 2

boymeetssofia

The storyline is nice. And it is good that the plot was not dragged further and was on point. Sad that is was short. I like how you write and your sentence structure is good not like the other entries💕. Hope that you do more writings in the future.

The ending will be better if Alucard tried to change the prophecy but his destiny will keep on chasing him. And the girl he loves will die in the end. Can I be the writer you need for the ending?

Wow! excellent writing. I m not really a fan of MLBB, I only play this game when I m bored and Webnovel but someone recommend this to me on Facebook and I gave it a try. I did not regret reading this one. Two thumbs up wish you will reach more readers.

I m also an author from other Online novel app and a fan of MLBB also. You have the potential in writing but you should make a more longer story for your readers so that they will not be dismay on what they read. Hope that you make it to the top

i like it, but i rlly think its too short :/ idk if its good for the top 10 because of the length of the story, but the poetic nature to it makes up for the shortness i guess.

LV 4

Llievy

It is good :). As what others said it is rather poetic well, that's a good point. This story needs to be recongnized for it has the potential. Good luck!!

For real a "POETIC TRAGEDY PHENOMENA" hope this story will be noticed by the readers. May good quality stories prevail. Congrats to the author, this is now one of my favorites!

HONESTLY, THE STORY IS EXCELLENT BUT AS WHAT OTHER SAID IN THEIR REVIEWS YOU NEED TO ADD MORE CONTENT ON YOUR STORY DON'T PUT YOUR READERS IN A "BITIN" STATE. AND AS A FAN OF ODETTE AND LANCELOT STORY I HATE YOU FOR MAKING ME GUILTY ABOUT THE FEELINGS OF ALUCARD, JUST KIDDING. IT IS FUNNY HOW YOU CAMPAIGN YOUR STORY I SAW THE COMMENT SECTION OF THIS EVENT YESTERDAY AND YOU REALLY PUT AN EFFORT IN SPREADING YOUR WORK TWO THUMBS UP FOR THE DETERMINATION AND PLEASE IF WRITING IS REALLY YOUR PASSION DON'T STOP WRITING GOOD STORIES. GOOD LUCK

LV 3

Kennu_Demerin

I just read your review last night and thanks about that, I have read your story and if I can recall back when I just started, both of us advertised our works at the same time. :D God bless for the both of us again , thanks for leaving a review on my story

Poets are very rare nowadays but I m happy to see the combination of Poem and Novel on MLBB: LOVE UNTOLD! two thumbs up to you gurl! I hope you will make it to the top 10

The story had given a bittersweet taste to a typical love story but too short and it needs improvement in terms of giving the readers more chapters to read on.

I said to my self not to read this one because I thought it was boring but damn I gave it a try and I did not regret reading this one I hope that MLBB or Webnovel will create a short comics for this one thou it is short and it keep me hang in but the lesson you will learn is good. To the author you have potentials but keep on improving yourself in writing novels

The Story is very good and you can connect it to a real life situation that anybody can change their fututre just believe and have faith. This story made my eyes in tears.yes! in tears really... call me OA but stories like this makes me cry a tragic tale is a nice idea

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Help_Me

Your writing is pretty much very fluid, the story is amazing and the way how you fit Alucard's in game quote at the end was just perfect, I'd say you do need someone to proofread it or you could do it yourself, other than that. Awesome story!

Nice plot and the twist in fate of the characters was so good. Know that you really wrote this story ready about the background of each character that was really connected to their story on MLBB your writing styles was just like the style on the MLBB lore of each heroes and it is also connected to the lore of Odette, Lance, Alucard and Esmeralda. I hope that MLBB will came up to this idea and add this to their story about their character's comics or cinematics soon.

Did you know that I admire you because you created a rare kind of story that was kissed by your style in writing poems? I am also writing poems and I know that combining different genre is very hard. Keep up the good work