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i don't understand why mc needs to be secretive about his talents. yeah maybe you could argue that AFO might find out and steal his quirk. but why couldn't he tell his 'guardian' makima? wouldn't that benefit him the most? like the whole personality change could also be resolved there because of the nature of his quirk. he could just say he put a lot of his 'Talent Points' into his inteliligence, so his personality change 180°. Not only that, but makima could teach him everything else required to be a hero, if not the best. You could argue that maybe makima is bad. but makima 'kills' someone in their kitchen that night. But that would also mean that the person who got killed is a villain, or an enemy. it couldn't possibly be a hero, if not she would be hunted by now. so that means the villain is targeting her for whatever reason. possibly because of the mc? because of his parents? idk. and the person that got killed is not a robber either because makima seems to be known and feared. conclusion? Makima is a good guy who had enemies (AFO maybe? idk) so if makima knows about MC's quirk, she would make him as strong as possible. so i couldn't see the reason why mc needs to hide his quirk from her.
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Muito bom até agora, e sim, eu não vou traduzir esse comentário, se quiser saber o que eu escrevi vai ter que traduzir sozinho, e se você leu até aqui é por quê traduziu, já escrevi nesse idioma complicado justamente para isso.
Good grammar, some mistakes here and there, but mostly misspelled words. The premise is not too unique, but the story builds intrigue and interest about the future. Some aspects are A.U, but they are minimal and I hope the author doesn’t deviate too much from the original universe. But what makes the story special, unique and compelling is the system that was given to the mc. It is the most interesting system I have seen in a while that doesn’t feel like a gimmick. The system, if I understand it correctly, allows the user to respec his talents in a numerical way at any point in time. For example, he could have a talent of 23 in reading and 50 in listening, he then could change his talent of reading to 73 while he’s trying to understand an academic paper, then move it all to listening while in class. It doesn’t feel overpowered and makes his progress feel natural. Obviously it is still too early to tell if the novel will pan out, but I am very eager to see what the future holds for this one. P.S Psychologist: Makima by your bed is not real, do not worry about it. Makime by your bed:
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exactly what i was looking for...genius MC who uses brains by building something just like Marvel genius characters, I hope you built something like iron man suit/arc reactor/pym particles/cap america serum/nanotech/spaceship etc or similar and useful gadgets I mean all that brain power it would be a crime to not use it. hope you dont't drop this
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i don't understand why mc needs to be secretive about his talents. yeah maybe you could argue that AFO might find out and steal his quirk. but why couldn't he tell his 'guardian' makima? wouldn't that benefit him the most? like the whole personality change could also be resolved there because of the nature of his quirk. he could just say he put a lot of his 'Talent Points' into his inteliligence, so his personality change 180°. Not only that, but makima could teach him everything else required to be a hero, if not the best. You could argue that maybe makima is bad. but makima 'kills' someone in their kitchen that night. But that would also mean that the person who got killed is a villain, or an enemy. it couldn't possibly be a hero, if not she would be hunted by now. so that means the villain is targeting her for whatever reason. possibly because of the mc? because of his parents? idk. and the person that got killed is not a robber either because makima seems to be known and feared. conclusion? Makima is a good guy who had enemies (AFO maybe? idk) so if makima knows about MC's quirk, she would make him as strong as possible. so i couldn't see the reason why mc needs to hide his quirk from her.
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Muito bom até agora, e sim, eu não vou traduzir esse comentário, se quiser saber o que eu escrevi vai ter que traduzir sozinho, e se você leu até aqui é por quê traduziu, já escrevi nesse idioma complicado justamente para isso.
Good grammar, some mistakes here and there, but mostly misspelled words. The premise is not too unique, but the story builds intrigue and interest about the future. Some aspects are A.U, but they are minimal and I hope the author doesn’t deviate too much from the original universe. But what makes the story special, unique and compelling is the system that was given to the mc. It is the most interesting system I have seen in a while that doesn’t feel like a gimmick. The system, if I understand it correctly, allows the user to respec his talents in a numerical way at any point in time. For example, he could have a talent of 23 in reading and 50 in listening, he then could change his talent of reading to 73 while he’s trying to understand an academic paper, then move it all to listening while in class. It doesn’t feel overpowered and makes his progress feel natural. Obviously it is still too early to tell if the novel will pan out, but I am very eager to see what the future holds for this one. P.S Psychologist: Makima by your bed is not real, do not worry about it. Makime by your bed:
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exactly what i was looking for...genius MC who uses brains by building something just like Marvel genius characters, I hope you built something like iron man suit/arc reactor/pym particles/cap america serum/nanotech/spaceship etc or similar and useful gadgets I mean all that brain power it would be a crime to not use it. hope you dont't drop this