Immortal.

LV 12

_VOIDLESS_

what type of immortal are we talking about is it the xianxia immortal type or just normal type of immortal. Good concept we are with you all the though good and bad

LV 4

ObamaUchiha

the problem is the dialogue and characters, the biggest problem is probably that it's too forced and super cheesy stereotypical stuff. like when you think of a teenage school drama with vampires this comes to mind

LV 4

Knight_Riku

So far this is a great fic. Although, things were a little quick with how fast the suddenness of getting kidnapped was. It should have been slightly calm fir at least two chapters more, 3 were dedicated to family and readjusting to his return to life from his coma/death fir three years. After that it should have been two chapters or so fir MC himself and waht he dies. But instead it was kinda quick. This seems to have a good story going for it. Author also did say in comments of a chapter that this has a world building basis similar to the "Charlotte" Anime. I've seen Charlotte, and while it wasn't a bad show, it was boring. Even when the Charlotte anime mc sister died, I felt nothing fur her death. It was that boring and easily predicted. But Author is definitely making a clear Antagonistic Force that can doom the world. Be it a single powerful individual, multiple Government and greedy politicians or such. It is made clear that the world is doomed and needs to be saved. If I had to say to any new readers what to expect, then think of this as something like Charlotte or any other Superpower Anime. Maybe even like the Sky High movie (trash movie but good example). And also a mix of the Infamous game series. Infamous was a good series in its story and was such a succes fir the SuckerPunch game studios. Infamous MC Cole Maggrath, becomes a Conduit (basically means a super powered individual like XMen or on this story or Charlotte). The entire plot of Infamous is if Cole needing to become powerful enough to defeat The Beast, taht will destroy the world like Magneto, in Xmen, and unsure in an age of only Conduits. The suorise was that The Beast was actually a Conduit called John White. It is a great story and game and I hope that the Author draws inspiration from it. Maybe even have a similar Individual Antagonist, like The Beast, be a permanent power user. Only mc is permanent power user, but it can certainly open up a whole entire story with lots of potential to come from this possible idea if mine. Tbh, my personal opinion of this story should be rated as a 4.6 since it si really good, but the beginning was too rushed. When a story starts, it needs to be done nice and slowly, depending on the type of story and the follow up of events. Other than that, it is really good, but as an act of sincerity and good faith that I am not being influenced by my personal thoughts of the story, I have given 5 stars. Most people don't give a proper review or their thoughts and instead just give 5 or 2 stars all the time without proof or reasoning. I hope I made my thoughts clear for any new readers and the Author. You should definitely read this story as it is looking good and i hope it isn't dropped.

LV 3

RandomDudeTbh

I love the concept; it's completely fresh to me; I've never seen anyone have immortality before, and I can't wait to see what happens next. I'll offer my full evaluation once there are a lot more chapters.

LV 4

FosterChild

seems interesting 😃 i like your other novel even tough I don't really comment, so I'm giving five stars for the sake of it hopefully this is also good. 👍