Interesting premise and handled rather well. That said you could use an editor or a beta reader because sections of the story read like it was feed to google translate. Keep writing, while there are still grammatical errors your pacing and world building have improved as the story goes on.
Interesting premise and handled rather well. That said you could use an editor or a beta reader because sections of the story read like it was feed to google translate. Keep writing, while there are still grammatical errors your pacing and world building have improved as the story goes on.