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Pretty good start. Could use a bit of editing for smoother transitions. The story moves pretty quickly and I feel like I’m missing some background information on the characters. It could be brought in later chapters to make the story more well rounded. Other than that, keep up the good work author. This story has a lot of potential.
At first it was for the FP but then I read all 4 chapters. Author why do you have to do Mr like this, climax both literally and figuratively. Don't tell me you are the 'Major Knight Bu...' (I can't remember how to spell that name). That's cold, I feel used, I just had my first one night stand. Zero penetration, witchcraft I tell you. you must take responsibility for me, more chapters will do the trick.
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Hello Author, just wanted to let you know I'm really enjoying your story so far and I'm looking forward to more updates ❤️❤️❤️
Pretty good start. Could use a bit of editing for smoother transitions. The story moves pretty quickly and I feel like I’m missing some background information on the characters. It could be brought in later chapters to make the story more well rounded. Other than that, keep up the good work author. This story has a lot of potential.
At first it was for the FP but then I read all 4 chapters. Author why do you have to do Mr like this, climax both literally and figuratively. Don't tell me you are the 'Major Knight Bu...' (I can't remember how to spell that name). That's cold, I feel used, I just had my first one night stand. Zero penetration, witchcraft I tell you. you must take responsibility for me, more chapters will do the trick.
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Hello Author, just wanted to let you know I'm really enjoying your story so far and I'm looking forward to more updates ❤️❤️❤️