/ Anime & Comics / Dungeon System Within DanMachi

Dungeon System Within DanMachi Original

Dungeon System Within DanMachi

Anime & Comics 298 Chapters 12.0M Views
Author: Seion

3.91 (298 ratings)

Read
About Table of Contents

Synopsis

A neet a closed in classic otaku as he was passing his days watching different kinds of animes...
Decided it was time to go out and be something in this rottern world...
Too bad that fate had other plans when he saw a car losing control and fell on him!!!

No One 17 and Under Admitted

Fans

  1. Seion
    Seion Contributed 5
  2. Avatar
    (Vacant)
  3. Avatar
    (Vacant)

You May Also Like

298Reviews

3.91

  • Translation Quality
  • Stability of Updates
  • Story Development
  • Character Design
  • World Background

Share your thoughts with others

Write a review
Asmodai216

Writing Quality: Trash tier. The grammar is awful, you can tell the writer isn't a native English speaker. It's legible, you can understand it, but a 5 minute spelling and grammar check on each chapter isn't too much to ask for. Stability of Updates: The author Seion writes a bunch of different system based stories and updates all of them with great frequency. This is great as far as updating the story goes, but it seriously detracts from the quality of the story. An author churning out multiple updates a day for different stories will end up suffering when it comes to quality and foresight. Story Development: Like a lot of the sub-standard wish fulfillment series on this site, the pacing of the story is very quick. Characters who should gradually build up a relationship with others are instead instantly won over for no real reason, and a bunch of plot points are not thought out well... Whatsoever... At all. Character Design: The MC we're given is freaking ridiculous. I personally appreciate an MC I can relate to, but I usually like an MC that has a fleshed out character. This MC fails to react with anything resembling common sense, decency, caution, or any other reasonable character trait. For fucks sake, in chapter 8 he literally molests a goddess and goes on to say that he likes things to be consensual. Speaking of, the characters from the series are massively OOC with no real explanation given. Sure, some basic traits are there, but they are railroaded onto whatever path the author wants with no explanation other than, "Hurr durr, Hestia is cute, I don't care if she's a virgin goddess who only fell for the pure-hearted Bell after he spent months earnestly supporting her, I want her to get with my supah awesome MC." I don't even care if he stole her from Bell, just make it actually make some damn sense. Then there are the background characters who just go along with this complete bull****. World Background: The only reason this is getting 2 stars is because of the ALREADY FUNCTIONING world provided by virtue of being FANFICTION. Frankly, the additions made regarding the system, the MCs abilities, and his self-insert into an adventurer's body make no goddamn sense whatsoever. "Hey Eina, I'm already level 3 despite not being in a familia. It doesn't matter that even having a level at all requires someone to have a falna, I'm supah aweshome and you'll totally believe me" "I've never been apart of a familia, even though the body I took over was actually apart of one before I got here." Summary: This is a pretty standard work for the author, Seion. Crappy grammar, characters and powers that don't make any damn sense. Railroading into relationships that don't make any damn sense from the chicks standpoint. Generic crappy wish-fulfillment fanfic is trash.

5yr
View 33 Replies
Roktah
LV 14 Badge

started of interesting but the mc turned out to be evil(not antihero but evil) meaning he is a douchbag. its the kind of mc where you go: oh he got killed? meh. So for me the main character is unlikeable he asked at the guild to contact hestia and preety much told her i don't want to be part of a family i just want to **** while groping her. so just based on his personality he is evil, arrogant and will probbly start raping people sooner or later. If you don't like that kind of dark character then this novel isn't for you. SD:not much going on. novel just started but like a lot other system novels he gets stuff too easy. WB: Danmachi, probably a canon too soon to tell.

Reveal Spoiler
5yr
View 27 Replies
ExiledLord

Literally one of the worst novels I have ever had the misfortune to put my eyes on. This novel is so crap it makes the human centipede look like sesame street. Jesus Christ, wish fulfillment at its finest. Author-san does the world a favor and lobotomize yourself.

5yr
View 14 Replies
doppelganguer

mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash mc is trash

5yr
View 10 Replies
DaoisttG3KuY

bit.ly/3LyRF1N ๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—

2yr
View 0 Replies
DarkDaoist

not sure what dungeon system he author is using but it's definitely not the danmachi one, not sure if author even bothered reviewing the concept or simply thought fu*k that mine is better as it will bring a character from zero to hero in few days. MC automatically knows how to fight to best of his stats no matter how fast they change and knows how to use automatically without even trying. you'll lose your brain over trying to justify this sh!t.

5yr
View 1 Replies
Rahmanism

The character is too unlikeable, with no redeeming quality whatsoever. The writing style and plot is too immature, like a 15 year old trying to be edgy by being evil for the sake of it. The chapter length is too short, and also laking in contex. And the dialogue is unrealistic and absolutely cringeworthy.

5yr
View 0 Replies
AE86
LV 5 Badge

One of my favorite anime. I hope that the release chap got increase, coz this is good anime evenif the anime doesnt have stability release. Continue the hard word man๐Ÿ™‹๐Ÿ™‹๐Ÿ™‹๐Ÿ™‹

5yr
View 6 Replies
Fever_D_Novel

Pretty fun man keep writting I love th I novel .............................................................. next chapter please fast I can't wait it.................. it's one of the my favourite novel........... so plz update chap fast OK........................................................................ sorry about the language I never writes any reviews before today..........

5yr
View 0 Replies
LonelyAlphaWolf

I like your novels. I hope youkeep updating them ----------##########&&&&&&&&########------------------------------##########&&&&&&&&#######---------------

5yr
View 0 Replies
Immortal_Potato

As the first Lv. 5 person to review it, I think it's good. Much better than Seion's other novels. Points of interest: DanMachi, MC, System. DanMachi is one of those unique worlds that we don't see explored often. The main character is not a cringey lovey dovey type that will bend to the will of females. He does not do romantic things. He is a uniquely selfish human, and I LOVE IT.

5yr
View 0 Replies
ksreader

MC is trash.. Bell plot same... Even knowing everything, he doesn't do anything... It's trash novel... You will be dissapointed.... Trash novel.... Really not worth your time.... Left bad aftertaste... Blehh...

4yr
View 1 Replies
NeoBee

One more... It's bad . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

5yr
View 1 Replies
NeoBee

It's bad . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

5yr
View 0 Replies
NeoBee

It's bad . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

5yr
View 0 Replies
NeoBee

It's bad . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

5yr
View 0 Replies
Translating_Finger

I absolutely love this. Never did I imagine that someone would write a novel based on Dan Machi and then include a cheat ability. Afraid that I will not be able to give it 5 stars at the moment though as the story still needs a lot of work and the writing quality isn't exactly top notch with a few grammatical errors from time to time. Although, good work Author.

5yr
View 0 Replies
Cliff_Sama

Total trash, it's obvious the author didn't do any research. Horrible MC Retarded MC Weak as **** MC Stats are incorrectly gained MC is a total jackass Worst than the original Manga Total disregard what happens on suroundings based on MC's choices Story development is terrible Side characters seemingly more stupid than original manga Overall author is terrible writer I WANT MY 30 MINS OF READING BACK!!!

5yr
View 4 Replies
IsekaiAnimes

Hm, I am enjoying this fic, but it is a pity that I have just read all the chapters!!! Author, could you please post more chapters of this fic? I am really enjoying this story very much.

img
2yr
View 8 Replies
Arsomist

keep up the good work. I would like if you mass release this story as I like it a lot. Thank you forthis story and I hope that you complete it

5yr
View 0 Replies

Author Seion