BLOOD OF MY BLOOD (HOTD)

LV 5

mutekishifu

just for the prologue I want to give 1 star, because there was the dragon dance? because Westero society is sexist! reason 1 = Westero society is sexist! woman to sit on the iron throne is impossible for them reason 2 = the king only remarried because he was forced if he has an heir (male son) 99% chance of not remarrying. reason 3 = a son from a second marriage would never get the same support as aegon because reason 1 was too strong it split the kingdom in 2, you already have half of the loyal kingdom, and on top of that the son of the first marriage is a man, if aegon gets 10% of westeros he is an incredible genius in short: the mere existence of Mc changes at least 60% of the whole story, too much for you to want to write this without using your creativity The only way that would make Aegon viable would be assassination and that's all, the lords of Westeros are very serious about the line of succession, no one would support a coup. why would you go to war? is the king a tyrant? not is the heir a tyrant? not Are the benefits good enough to pick up a sword to fight a beast the size of a mountain? ...

LV 2

SomethingMalefic

WQ: 1 obviously translated, uses wrong words constantly, never and I mean never gets the gender of the characters right. spelling and grammar mistakes galore. SD: 1 Author Doesn't seem to understand a thing about the story, I think he heard about HOTD and decided to skim through the wiki timeline for a few seconds. CD: 1 Characters do not act how they should, it feels weird, alien almost. Not much to say, bland and alien. US: 4 Updates every few days by the looks of things but I don't have high hopes as 80% of HOTD fics are abandoned, especially translated ones. WB: 1 (0 IF POSSIBLE) Author doesnt understand a thing about AsoIaF world. Its superficial at best. maybe he watched a few epsidoes of the show in English while he obviously doesn't speak it, maybe thought if he looked at the wiki for a few minutes people wouldn't notice his terrible understanding of the world. Personally I've only known the ASOIAF world for a few months and I know every single thing about it and I don't dare write a fic just incase I get something wrong, this guy doesn't seem to care.

LV 1

Mad_Governor

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LV 4

kosmas_kosmas

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