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The plot is all over the place man, it's too dumb at times and the way some things are just does not make any sense but still a good Idea for fic👍
Advice from a brother to his brothers, do not read this nonsense ................ Contains love at first sight for every girl........................... .................................................. Silly events
1. U got a big bick 2. U read wrong that. 3. U read that wrong as well. 4. U checked 5. U smiled. . . . . Now give me like and exp thanks.
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I really like this story so far and have only just got to chapter 4 but please don’t tell me that obito/naruto will get a harem with his mom and Sasuke’s mom
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For starters the mc awakens sharigan at 4 which everyone knows but decides to hide his abilities in the academy like all these lowkey mc's do. On top of this, the author is making a villian out of every girls original partner. for example: Minato, Fugaku, asuma. On top of this hes twisting narutos personality to much. both him and obito were pretty much the same person until rin died, but hes making him think like a calculating mc. And of course he's villainizing hirzuen so naruto who idolized the man doesn't trust him. this story will be a lot of nonsense so i'm not even going bother anymore. DONT WASTE YOUR TIME OR GET YOUR HOPES UP
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R serious?? it was good at first but...seriously?? Kushina?? HIS OWN MOTHER?? Well this is too much, I can't take it anymore. Naruto...reincarnated as obito....my fav character... to degrade it to this level...such a shame...no....shame on you ....naruto would have never acted like that...I'm so disappointed. Then again IT'S an AU...but still... you didn't say anything abt naruto character change and abt him dating "his own mother", no to mention the age difference as he was now reincarnated as 'Obito'. (The only good think is the grammar and the world back ground)
In this story, there are pros and cons. The quality of the letter is very good, a stable update also has a positive effect, since you do not lose momentum in the story. The plot goes smoothly, there are no sharp jumps in the narrative (for me, a little slow). The very concept of changing the psychological character of Naruto is interesting and again not drastic. The characters also reveal themselves from the other side, not the one we are used to (this is both a plus and a minus). Secondary characters are also prescribed and do not behave like dolls. It is not clear in history whether it will be a harem or not, there are shortcomings in the history of the world itself (but this is all taste). Well, in general, everything is acceptable for me personally. And so everyone will find their pros and cons in this story. Well, I would give this story a chance, since the spelling and the whole narrative is captivating.
I just don't like that it's going the harem route and the Minato is secretly a second danzo route. not going to lie I saw this coming the moment The only characters being introduced were girls.
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great writing but very bad plot, naruro x kushina really?? and then he demonizes every other male character just so his harem is somehow able to come true... also has a lot of info thats simply not correct but i can give that a pass but the romance is trash.
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Good fic Didn’ like where you were heading with the pairing so I decided to drop. Kushina… Really? I honestly don’t get why you made Naruto get reborn as Obito when you could have had an OC reincarnate as him Would have made for a much better story
I love this auther for his writing quality and is ability to write good dialogue. I also respect the fact that he’s pretty good with us update stability. My issues with this book has to do with the story. It starts with a great concept of naruto going back into time as obito. Great idea!!! But then Naruto is ‘unconsciously’ catching girls like he has a Pokédex to fill. His own mother kushina, is implied at this point to have feelings for obito, who is also naruto. Its also implied that mikoto and kaguya (yes that kaguya) is also also apart of his herem. And as bs and cringe I find all that, as a fan fic reader I have come to learn that every fan fic, as a wish fulfillment book will have something you don’t like that you will need to power though to continue reading. But, my biggest issue is the author demonizing every male character that would usually end up with that girl who will now eventually end up in obitos herem. Minato for some reason has become a manipulative a** that would let kushina be kidnapped so he could save the day and win her heart just so he can be closer to his goal of becoming hokage. Fugaku has become the clan head who wants to marry mikoto because she has deep pockets of cash and it would stabilize his position as head of the uchiha. And I am pretty sure thats how asuma will be portayed since kurenai seems to also be interested in obito. And that bothers me. Good characters with potential are just demonized for the sake of plot convenience so he can have a big herem. And this is all done before hes even 5. Character design is alright since its naruto, apart from the dudes that are demonized and the girls who for some reason get a ‘special feeling’ in there heart the moment they meet with obito. They do seem to act like they would in the show. And the world background is naruto. Its hard to mess up a world like naruto since some information we get in manga and anime conflict with each other and the dates make no sence. So as long as you don’t forget major events, any minor changes to the story or timeline can be shrugged off since the whole show is filled with plot wholes. My final thoughts on this book is that its a great story for those who love herems and hate on previous romantic intrestes of herem members. For those who dont, I recommend giving it a chance since I’ve read this authors starwars book and found that even with all the bs(talking about many times he adds a crossover jusy to boost the character) in that novel he can write a interactive and intriguing story.
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definitely recommended to read this fanfic, it's like a crossover of tatsuya from irregular from magic highschool and fatestaynight. instead of emiya it's tatsuya in the story plus it's a harem about all cute characters from fate <3
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its an interesting concept, especially with the magic systems being centred around science and technology. they are a good match. I'm looking forward to how this story progresses!
The book is very well written. I'm highly looking forward to the future of the book. There isn't much I can write about since there is only one chapter but there is one thing to note is that I have nothing bad to say which is an achievement since I can usually find something bad for the author to improve his book. Definitely want more!
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In support of the author. ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Reveal Spoiler The plot is all over the place man, it's too dumb at times and the way some things are just does not make any sense but still a good Idea for fic👍
Advice from a brother to his brothers, do not read this nonsense ................ Contains love at first sight for every girl........................... .................................................. Silly events
1. U got a big bick 2. U read wrong that. 3. U read that wrong as well. 4. U checked 5. U smiled. . . . . Now give me like and exp thanks.
Nice, nice, nice Èeeee eeeeewjd hdkwjcnxiehd bcndjdh xbfbfbr bfhdhd jcjcj cdjdjdjd ndndn dndjd jdjdjd dhh dhdhei eiw rjdj ccjd b rdjj cjn r nd jfkf rrjrj cjsjs j f fnx skskdnf disoajdn jdkxjx
I really like this story so far and have only just got to chapter 4 but please don’t tell me that obito/naruto will get a harem with his mom and Sasuke’s mom
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For starters the mc awakens sharigan at 4 which everyone knows but decides to hide his abilities in the academy like all these lowkey mc's do. On top of this, the author is making a villian out of every girls original partner. for example: Minato, Fugaku, asuma. On top of this hes twisting narutos personality to much. both him and obito were pretty much the same person until rin died, but hes making him think like a calculating mc. And of course he's villainizing hirzuen so naruto who idolized the man doesn't trust him. this story will be a lot of nonsense so i'm not even going bother anymore. DONT WASTE YOUR TIME OR GET YOUR HOPES UP
Great fanfic........ ............................................................................................................................................
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R serious?? it was good at first but...seriously?? Kushina?? HIS OWN MOTHER?? Well this is too much, I can't take it anymore. Naruto...reincarnated as obito....my fav character... to degrade it to this level...such a shame...no....shame on you ....naruto would have never acted like that...I'm so disappointed. Then again IT'S an AU...but still... you didn't say anything abt naruto character change and abt him dating "his own mother", no to mention the age difference as he was now reincarnated as 'Obito'. (The only good think is the grammar and the world back ground)
In this story, there are pros and cons. The quality of the letter is very good, a stable update also has a positive effect, since you do not lose momentum in the story. The plot goes smoothly, there are no sharp jumps in the narrative (for me, a little slow). The very concept of changing the psychological character of Naruto is interesting and again not drastic. The characters also reveal themselves from the other side, not the one we are used to (this is both a plus and a minus). Secondary characters are also prescribed and do not behave like dolls. It is not clear in history whether it will be a harem or not, there are shortcomings in the history of the world itself (but this is all taste). Well, in general, everything is acceptable for me personally. And so everyone will find their pros and cons in this story. Well, I would give this story a chance, since the spelling and the whole narrative is captivating.
I just don't like that it's going the harem route and the Minato is secretly a second danzo route. not going to lie I saw this coming the moment The only characters being introduced were girls.
......,.....,,,,..........,....,...........,.....,,,,..........,....,...........,.....,,,,..........,....,...........,.....,,,,..........,....,...........,.....,,,,..........,....,.....
great writing but very bad plot, naruro x kushina really?? and then he demonizes every other male character just so his harem is somehow able to come true... also has a lot of info thats simply not correct but i can give that a pass but the romance is trash.
Reveal Spoiler Good fic Didn’ like where you were heading with the pairing so I decided to drop. Kushina… Really? I honestly don’t get why you made Naruto get reborn as Obito when you could have had an OC reincarnate as him Would have made for a much better story
I love this auther for his writing quality and is ability to write good dialogue. I also respect the fact that he’s pretty good with us update stability. My issues with this book has to do with the story. It starts with a great concept of naruto going back into time as obito. Great idea!!! But then Naruto is ‘unconsciously’ catching girls like he has a Pokédex to fill. His own mother kushina, is implied at this point to have feelings for obito, who is also naruto. Its also implied that mikoto and kaguya (yes that kaguya) is also also apart of his herem. And as bs and cringe I find all that, as a fan fic reader I have come to learn that every fan fic, as a wish fulfillment book will have something you don’t like that you will need to power though to continue reading. But, my biggest issue is the author demonizing every male character that would usually end up with that girl who will now eventually end up in obitos herem. Minato for some reason has become a manipulative a** that would let kushina be kidnapped so he could save the day and win her heart just so he can be closer to his goal of becoming hokage. Fugaku has become the clan head who wants to marry mikoto because she has deep pockets of cash and it would stabilize his position as head of the uchiha. And I am pretty sure thats how asuma will be portayed since kurenai seems to also be interested in obito. And that bothers me. Good characters with potential are just demonized for the sake of plot convenience so he can have a big herem. And this is all done before hes even 5. Character design is alright since its naruto, apart from the dudes that are demonized and the girls who for some reason get a ‘special feeling’ in there heart the moment they meet with obito. They do seem to act like they would in the show. And the world background is naruto. Its hard to mess up a world like naruto since some information we get in manga and anime conflict with each other and the dates make no sence. So as long as you don’t forget major events, any minor changes to the story or timeline can be shrugged off since the whole show is filled with plot wholes. My final thoughts on this book is that its a great story for those who love herems and hate on previous romantic intrestes of herem members. For those who dont, I recommend giving it a chance since I’ve read this authors starwars book and found that even with all the bs(talking about many times he adds a crossover jusy to boost the character) in that novel he can write a interactive and intriguing story.
Reveal Spoiler definitely recommended to read this fanfic, it's like a crossover of tatsuya from irregular from magic highschool and fatestaynight. instead of emiya it's tatsuya in the story plus it's a harem about all cute characters from fate <3
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its an interesting concept, especially with the magic systems being centred around science and technology. they are a good match. I'm looking forward to how this story progresses!
The book is very well written. I'm highly looking forward to the future of the book. There isn't much I can write about since there is only one chapter but there is one thing to note is that I have nothing bad to say which is an achievement since I can usually find something bad for the author to improve his book. Definitely want more!
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