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Alix, a young student from Ol'Tree village is soon to be graduated but things seem to go a little awry. This young man who gradually loses his haughty personality with discovering a world bigger than anything he knew will set sails on a path of no return like many before him, The Abraxas. How far will he go?
Set sails in the world of Orbis, full of treacherous history with unpredictable future where gods are not the main threat.
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Well there is not much to say. The characters are on point the story is developing in a brisk pase and the overall world sounds fantastic. Only two criticisms come to mind: The first, being the grammar mistakes you can find littered everywhere without much improvement. The writer needs an English grammar checker at least. I even recommend putting it through Google there are so many missing letters and no proper use of had/have. The second is the boring first chapter where we get an info dump and only a small interaction with an elder. First impression is important!!!!!!!!! All the info given is being told not SHOWED and is not a great way to hook in the audience. Other then these two the rest is amazing and I would love to read this story going forward. To the writer: I don't know if you have plans for it but pls continue to write this story.
Few minor mistakes in the writing quality, makes some sentences hard to make out what it actually mean, but with the good storyline and character development, these mistakes are only a small price to pay. This story is good I can't wait for the new chapters. The development of the world during the story makes it interesting, keeps you reading, I am only on chapter 15, lastest one at the time of the reveiw, but it already draws me in and makes me want to know more.
Great story, I want more !!! For the update quality I can't really say it's too soon but for the world backround, some interesting little sentence that show there is more to it, a likeable MC not too cliche for the moment, the writing quality seems really good for me but I'm not a native english speaker either.
I will like to commend you for your work. Great job so far. I like your writing despite some mistakes here and there. As a writer too, i understand. Love your story line, world building and your characters. Great job.
I don't see much errors when it come to grammar, and it's a well-written plot. The plotline seems interesting and sort of unique. Keep up with the good work!
Actually, one of the first novels I read on this site, discovered by chance on the first page, pleasantly surprised by the writing quality even if some mistake can be seen here and there. The story and the main character are enjoyable with a deep background and human emotions. The pace of one chapter per day seems fine to me as they are actually quite long. I'm waiting for more, please don't drop Author !!
Although I said I'll give feedback, but honestly the book didnt fit my tastes so I didnt read much. What I saw was that your paragrahs were too long. Litterslly covered my whole phone screen. This is a novel, not a educative paper for school. Shorter parafrahs are better, seperated by thoughts for novels. I didn't notice typos but saw you mossed somecommas oncein a while. Not that big od deal thouvh since you still used xommas some timez, still better to reread a vit slower to see where ya missed them though. World background seemes really good exxept the prologue. Tha just confused thebhexk out od me, which Im guessing is why u put it n auzilary not vol1 as its cobfusnng at least for me. You should always put prologue in your volume, when you clixk read it ges strsight to C1 (at least for me) so somepeople will miss it. Camt sag much about char development as I didnt readmuch, but story and chara look good. Canttell much though. Laatly your update speed isbreally good, would add release schedle though, getyou more fans and consiatency
Read up to chapter 30. The writing quality is alright. There were a few mistakes here and there, but it did not ruin my reading experience. The chapters are pretty long. I would suggest for the author to shorten some paragraphs. It was a bit hard to read as I was using apps. This genre/type of story is something that I usually enjoy. However, the first chapter did not grab me. I have to reread it twice to understand what was going on. I was kinda lost after the fall (chapter 4). I guess part of it was because I could not connect with the character. I don't understand the world yet. And I also blame the long paragraphs. LOL. However, it gets better after I read more. I guess it takes time for me to get used to the characters and the world in the story.
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I actually quite like this story. The characters are fresh compared to other novels, the background seems impressively vast and is spoken of in the early chapters, sign for me that the Author knows where he is going. The update of one chapter per day never failed once from its first published chapter. This fresh work deserved more recognition and the grammar mistakes don't bother me much as what is said in other reviews, there were small ones at the beginning but it's truly better now, the Author is taking into account the reviews and comments posted. The story had kind of a slow pace use to develop the world and its several important characters and not full of fillers.
Well, shamelessly commenting here myself, if I can't do even a little bit of self promotion... I hope you love this work of mine for I have deep expectation for it, a particularly large world already designed for most part, a logic one made of thermodynamic laws similar to our owns but where it's possible to achieve much more. I know one of my weaknesses is the English language which is not my mother tongue, so I write not as quicker as I want, and with, without a doubt, lots of errors and mistakes. So my update speed will be for now, one chapter per day, and if with time I can write faster, I will post more often. The chapter will be approximately 2000 word each. Enjoy, and if you don't, don't hesitate to post why, critics are welcomed for me to progress.