Shadow Slave: Eternal Madness

Horrible pacing is all I can say. He goes from a weak little guy to the absolute strongest amongst humanity in 22 chaps (With his seven convenient slaves). All of his power was granted to him in the span of a couple of chapters and his interactions with the original cast aren't really interesting.

I just finished chapter 22 and here is my review. this is one of the only OC FF I enjoyed so far. but i feel like after the 2nd like he got so OP with a cracked army that kills the joy of stressing. like the MC is cracked up until this point with his regeneration and now he also have a cracked army. I'm enjoying the story but I just wanted to point that out.

Ok here is my take on this so far. First this might be long so be warned. Writing quality is 10/10. Update is 10/10( i dont really know tbh). Stroy development: it is fast paced, i dont mind it when it comes to him travelling the desert cause not much to show, but when he meets up with Neph and stayed with her for 2 years we didnt see any story developments, this is very shitty cause that makes that part useless to us tbh. then there is the part where he was walking in the street and a 60 year old try to f him then her daughter joins n when she gets called out for being married she said idc n everyone in the street agreed even other men, wtf that is one of the dumbest shit i ever read. Then the part where he visits Sunny and his crew that part felt forced. he had every right to be pissed an Neph he did get his shit rocked for months, i get it she went through her own trial but in her eyes n everyone else he shouldnt know what she went through so he has the right to be pissed but instead u apologize like if u dont they will kill u( mf cant die). Then u give them all high rank memory for no reason at all(bullshit idc if u meant to say sorry, if u did then Neph would do the job idk why he gave all of them one) then u say if it breaks come and ask for more(why?) is he some hero ?. All the power up he got kinda make sense ya know but after everything he went through shouldnt he want to train? get strong and be a little smarter but he goes n picks a fight with a sovereign[img=faceslap] wtf, no one knew who he was so why the f would he put a target on his back ? he relies on his immortality way to much. Advice(if ya wanna some): When u make and MC pick a goal for him n through that u can control what he does. If u wanted him to fight the sovereignty system then u could say he wanted to take control of the dream realm or give him a goal that they wont let him accomplish so he must fight them. If u want him to get close with the main cast then do it naturally dont force it and base the entire shit of a book, i know for a fact u wont give ur friends 10 dollars if u mother gives u 100 for lunch so why do it here ? with people u dont even know?. you can make it where he need them to do the thrid nightmare so he helps them n gets close to them through Neph. you could have also build the relationship with sunny during his stay at the academy he had no friends u could have built something there. Idk i feel like u just force anything u want which makes it hard for us to make sense of it, this is what people mean by turn of ur brain when u read cause u cant sit there n try to imagine what is happening. do what you want as a writer at the end of the day u must enjoy what u do. but there is better ways of getting what u want put urslef in ur MC shoe, after being tortured for months why would u help people ? and not focus on making urslef stronger ?. like think does that make sense to u?. if u read this far thank u and everyone read it. its not that bad tbh but idk. it feels like an MC born in one piece then is given the power to be the strongest person on the planet and instead of him going after his dream he joins Luffy crew and helps them achieve theirs. But the MC is sigma even guys call him handsome and wonder how big his pp is lol.

Masterpiece A good novel, its author is creative and its rhythm is good. I haven't tried reading Abdul Al-Zil because I think it's not my type, but after reading this novel I will definitely try.