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Your novel is simply brilliant.. i love the calming effect it has on me and the good wordings and steady buildup. Brilliant!!
I like the flow of this book I’ve unlocked every chapter and want lots more. Still I want more smut in the book please :)
Man, if you don't want non-privileged readers to stop following your novel, just post an announcement. It's been around a week and with more than 20 chapters since you didn't post a chapter for non-privileged readers
Enjoying the book so far and plan to continue reading. My only qualm is the Mrs Jones plotline as I’m not really sure where that’s going. Since she has featured heavily up to now but has a husband and children I’m concerned this is going to change from a harem novel into a share/open-relationship story. Hopefully that’s not the case and I t doesn’t end with her not being exclusive to the MC. But to reiterate I’m enjoying the story for the most part and I’ll continue with it.
Okay I'm not really judge the story not because it is bad or good but because it wasn't boring, if your story can keep the reader entertained it doesn't matter if it is good or bad in my book
I love it! I want more of it! I have some reservations about certain scenes but after seeing your replies to other comments. I will trust the process and trust you
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I am utterly appalled by the recent developments in this novel. After reading up to chapter 81, I couldn't even finish chapter 82 before giving up in sheer disgust. The introduction of NTR and the MC's despicable actions in destroying a happily married couple with a young child is absolutely repulsive. I had initially hoped the author would refrain from turning the MC into a homewrecker, but instead, they chose to have him meticulously manipulate and seduce the married woman into an affair. To make matters worse, the story expects readers to root for this detestable character. This is a clear indication of the author's complete lack of a moral compass. If you're going to include such reprehensible content, at least have the decency to put an NTR tag on your book! I am thoroughly disgusted and have decided to drop this novel immediately. The MC is truly despicable, and such a character deserves nothing less than a fitting demise in any other story.
This story is as silly as Looney Tunes, but without the charisma of Daffy Duck or Bugs Bunny. Author, you really should've set this an alternate Earth or something because the way you write the characters and "Los Angeles" makes it painfully obvious that you aren't from the US... Like, it's so obvious and just plain ridiculous that it's immersion breaking... Or at least I hope you aren't from America because if you are then you really need to go outside and touch some grass instead of observing the world through the news and Reddit.
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So it’s mostly the little things that make this subpar to terrible. California is a state not a city, and it’s really big with lots of differences across it. If you mean the L.A./Hollywood area as a caricature fine, BUT it does not rain there. The whole point of the area is it has no weather. Cops in the U. S. can get away with lots of stuff, but making a person transfer money out of electronic banking, nope. The setting makes the story less believable not more. It’s like saying all Midwest farming is rice paddies. Unless it’s addressed why culture mashing is happening, it’s just makes the story ungrounded.
your below average novel a average man who get a system and remain average the character design is trash the female characters are even more of trash I don't even know are people even pass 10 chapter and the mc is kind of stupid.
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This is pretty good read overall, love hiw simole the story and is and even more enjoyable. Sad that it has so few chaps[img=update]
Just caught up to the latest free chapter. Very nice concept that I haven't seen much of. I quite enjoy the characters/story so far. intrigued to see how the story unfolds.
reviewing after 31 chaps.I really loved this. I'm ok with netori and all but the landlord is good to the mc. so i hope he won't duck the landlady. or you can just make the landlord bad hehehe🤭🤭
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I like the concept, and the writing is good. I will look forward to seeing how this novel goes. Keep up the excellent work, and most importantly, write a story you like.
This is my first rebate story so go easy on me and also let me know the kind of rebate stories you would like in the future under here. This way I can create more books around rebate stories just for you. I will choose the one with the most likes!
Your novel is simply brilliant.. i love the calming effect it has on me and the good wordings and steady buildup. Brilliant!!
I like the flow of this book I’ve unlocked every chapter and want lots more. Still I want more smut in the book please :)
Man, if you don't want non-privileged readers to stop following your novel, just post an announcement. It's been around a week and with more than 20 chapters since you didn't post a chapter for non-privileged readers
Enjoying the book so far and plan to continue reading. My only qualm is the Mrs Jones plotline as I’m not really sure where that’s going. Since she has featured heavily up to now but has a husband and children I’m concerned this is going to change from a harem novel into a share/open-relationship story. Hopefully that’s not the case and I t doesn’t end with her not being exclusive to the MC. But to reiterate I’m enjoying the story for the most part and I’ll continue with it.
Okay I'm not really judge the story not because it is bad or good but because it wasn't boring, if your story can keep the reader entertained it doesn't matter if it is good or bad in my book
I love it! I want more of it! I have some reservations about certain scenes but after seeing your replies to other comments. I will trust the process and trust you
Reveal Spoiler I am utterly appalled by the recent developments in this novel. After reading up to chapter 81, I couldn't even finish chapter 82 before giving up in sheer disgust. The introduction of NTR and the MC's despicable actions in destroying a happily married couple with a young child is absolutely repulsive. I had initially hoped the author would refrain from turning the MC into a homewrecker, but instead, they chose to have him meticulously manipulate and seduce the married woman into an affair. To make matters worse, the story expects readers to root for this detestable character. This is a clear indication of the author's complete lack of a moral compass. If you're going to include such reprehensible content, at least have the decency to put an NTR tag on your book! I am thoroughly disgusted and have decided to drop this novel immediately. The MC is truly despicable, and such a character deserves nothing less than a fitting demise in any other story.
This story is as silly as Looney Tunes, but without the charisma of Daffy Duck or Bugs Bunny. Author, you really should've set this an alternate Earth or something because the way you write the characters and "Los Angeles" makes it painfully obvious that you aren't from the US... Like, it's so obvious and just plain ridiculous that it's immersion breaking... Or at least I hope you aren't from America because if you are then you really need to go outside and touch some grass instead of observing the world through the news and Reddit.
Reveal Spoiler So it’s mostly the little things that make this subpar to terrible. California is a state not a city, and it’s really big with lots of differences across it. If you mean the L.A./Hollywood area as a caricature fine, BUT it does not rain there. The whole point of the area is it has no weather. Cops in the U. S. can get away with lots of stuff, but making a person transfer money out of electronic banking, nope. The setting makes the story less believable not more. It’s like saying all Midwest farming is rice paddies. Unless it’s addressed why culture mashing is happening, it’s just makes the story ungrounded.
your below average novel a average man who get a system and remain average the character design is trash the female characters are even more of trash I don't even know are people even pass 10 chapter and the mc is kind of stupid.
Reveal Spoiler This is pretty good read overall, love hiw simole the story and is and even more enjoyable. Sad that it has so few chaps[img=update]
Just caught up to the latest free chapter. Very nice concept that I haven't seen much of. I quite enjoy the characters/story so far. intrigued to see how the story unfolds.
reviewing after 31 chaps.I really loved this. I'm ok with netori and all but the landlord is good to the mc. so i hope he won't duck the landlady. or you can just make the landlord bad hehehe🤭🤭
Reveal Spoiler I like the concept, and the writing is good. I will look forward to seeing how this novel goes. Keep up the excellent work, and most importantly, write a story you like.
This is my first rebate story so go easy on me and also let me know the kind of rebate stories you would like in the future under here. This way I can create more books around rebate stories just for you. I will choose the one with the most likes!