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Grammar needs work, lots of spelling and punctuation errors that has to be corrected and the writing in general is barely average. We know nothing of the character description besides the fact mc reincarnated with powers of homelander, and then author changes it and says it came from this ‘new order’ power that’s so overpowered it changes reality, thus allowing him to make any ability he wishes. Mc kills his pedo uncle and drug/alcohol addicted parents which is fine, makes sense. What doesn’t make sense is that the X-men look for him, Jean finds him and then he somehow forcibly mind controls her(new order bs power) to leave and attack the X-men while also making them lose their memories. Next he somehow gains a zealous ally that was never mentioned and talked about, and he vents to her on a angsty crying rant about being a god in chains wanting more power bla bla blah, out of nowhere. Keep in mind all we know is mc died (age unknown), reincarnated into current body in mcu(age again unknown), and he’s acting like this??? Story needs to be fleshed out so much it’s not funny, this just makes no sense(barebone details). It’s like going into the mind of a schizophrenic that gets more powers like it’s free real estate, but he also does irrational things for no reason. Also the ancient one exists for a reason when it comes to mystical threats and reality changing powers, but ok just ignore that as well.
I'm at Chapter 16 as of writing this review and so far the story going amazing. I enjoy the fact of how the author did his first appearance though I did kinda wish for a gaint fight The only thing I could hope for is for MC to be a bit more almight in the way that when he arrives people feel themselves relax as his smile tells people everything will alright
[AI NOVEL ALERT] It started very good, but the heavily AI usage after chapter 10 make it barely readable. Was 4 paragraphs to describe how bad he was feeling while punching a wall while just saying the same thing over and over...
A good start to the story, I hope you will finish it without giving up on this fanfic. Yes, the story has shortcomings, mistakes, it is not perfect, as is everything in this world. Keep up the good work, I wish you inspiration and good health
It's not a bad story at all, interesting power and the grammar is fine. The Mc is relatable and the beggining of the story is great until chapter 12. There is an unmarked, unshown timeskip of unknown duration. During that time skip the character develops a bunch and we are left in the dark. Not only does he gain powers over the time skip, but his relations with a character briefly mentioned once 5 chapters previously changes drastically and we don't see any of this occur, or be explaomed. His personality also goes through a big change and we see none of the build up. This left me disconnected and simply lost in the story, struggling to make sense of things when none of the pertinent information is given to the reader. Tldr. After the chapter titled "ice cream" the story goes south hard into a confusing mess.
Until chapter 10 it was normal, although I didn’t understand what Homelander had to do with it at all, given his abilities it’s as if the author is trying to attract attention with this name, and then sends readers to hell, but from chapter 10 outright nonsense begins and it became completely unclear what was happening and the story began to turn into a bunch of weird things
i dont see the point in writing that title when you just give the mc powers beyond the scope of homelander, powers that outshine homelanders alibies anyway
op and not a brain dead MC, world seems to be a combination of the movies and the x-men, could be the comic world, has a lot of potential. . ......... ...................
this a really interesting story, it has just the right amount of darkness you'd expect of a story that has the name homelander in the title but it also has that nice touch of light and good sense so that we can relate, has a lot of potential, i hope he continues posting
It's fabulous,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..........................................................................................................................................................................
Grammar needs work, lots of spelling and punctuation errors that has to be corrected and the writing in general is barely average. We know nothing of the character description besides the fact mc reincarnated with powers of homelander, and then author changes it and says it came from this ‘new order’ power that’s so overpowered it changes reality, thus allowing him to make any ability he wishes. Mc kills his pedo uncle and drug/alcohol addicted parents which is fine, makes sense. What doesn’t make sense is that the X-men look for him, Jean finds him and then he somehow forcibly mind controls her(new order bs power) to leave and attack the X-men while also making them lose their memories. Next he somehow gains a zealous ally that was never mentioned and talked about, and he vents to her on a angsty crying rant about being a god in chains wanting more power bla bla blah, out of nowhere. Keep in mind all we know is mc died (age unknown), reincarnated into current body in mcu(age again unknown), and he’s acting like this??? Story needs to be fleshed out so much it’s not funny, this just makes no sense(barebone details). It’s like going into the mind of a schizophrenic that gets more powers like it’s free real estate, but he also does irrational things for no reason. Also the ancient one exists for a reason when it comes to mystical threats and reality changing powers, but ok just ignore that as well.
I'm at Chapter 16 as of writing this review and so far the story going amazing. I enjoy the fact of how the author did his first appearance though I did kinda wish for a gaint fight The only thing I could hope for is for MC to be a bit more almight in the way that when he arrives people feel themselves relax as his smile tells people everything will alright
[AI NOVEL ALERT] It started very good, but the heavily AI usage after chapter 10 make it barely readable. Was 4 paragraphs to describe how bad he was feeling while punching a wall while just saying the same thing over and over...
A good start to the story, I hope you will finish it without giving up on this fanfic. Yes, the story has shortcomings, mistakes, it is not perfect, as is everything in this world. Keep up the good work, I wish you inspiration and good health
It's not a bad story at all, interesting power and the grammar is fine. The Mc is relatable and the beggining of the story is great until chapter 12. There is an unmarked, unshown timeskip of unknown duration. During that time skip the character develops a bunch and we are left in the dark. Not only does he gain powers over the time skip, but his relations with a character briefly mentioned once 5 chapters previously changes drastically and we don't see any of this occur, or be explaomed. His personality also goes through a big change and we see none of the build up. This left me disconnected and simply lost in the story, struggling to make sense of things when none of the pertinent information is given to the reader. Tldr. After the chapter titled "ice cream" the story goes south hard into a confusing mess.
Until chapter 10 it was normal, although I didn’t understand what Homelander had to do with it at all, given his abilities it’s as if the author is trying to attract attention with this name, and then sends readers to hell, but from chapter 10 outright nonsense begins and it became completely unclear what was happening and the story began to turn into a bunch of weird things
i dont see the point in writing that title when you just give the mc powers beyond the scope of homelander, powers that outshine homelanders alibies anyway
op and not a brain dead MC, world seems to be a combination of the movies and the x-men, could be the comic world, has a lot of potential. . ......... ...................
this a really interesting story, it has just the right amount of darkness you'd expect of a story that has the name homelander in the title but it also has that nice touch of light and good sense so that we can relate, has a lot of potential, i hope he continues posting
It's fabulous,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..........................................................................................................................................................................