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Write a reviewIf you can ignore the writing quality, it is really not bad, this is better than other dungeon novels.
Having read through all the free chapters the author had some very creative and novel ideas. however, there was no story development, we really only see one character and they are pretty flat. Status screens take up significant space ( although they are far more creative, when I usually see this happening). Writing quality was decent.
I liked the story and it has potential but there are a couple of problems. One is grammar I’m not at all an expert in grammar but I can clearly see you misspelled many words or completely forgot to write some. This makes overall writing quality horrible. You could solve this by maybe going back to read it over and make changes. Two the information dumps need to be spaced out. While it did help give an over impression of the world background. It also kind’ve made the story a little boring. Anyways I believe this story has potential and I hope you can develop its potential to the fullest
Thanks for a Wonderful story. Storyline development has potential. Please author release more chapter.
Good story thus far. It has potential to be a hit, Grammer issues are found and some chapters are bland. would be interesting to see some perspective of adventures about to stumble upon his dungeon or some senior dungeon masters seeing a new name rising the ranks fast.
I really want to read this, I love Dungeon Master/Summoner kind of novels but damn 10 chapters stright and absolutely no story at all. Worldbuilding should be done by story Devlopment not by info dumping. Author should have done it like this. Story starts, 30 days pass away and as story progresses the narrative will move back to the past to explain how it was done, or maybe the characters can talk and you find out from their talk about the whole empires and stuff, you can do a lot but it just feels dull from the first 10 chapters.
If you can ignore the writing quality, it is really not bad, this is better than other dungeon novels.
Having read through all the free chapters the author had some very creative and novel ideas. however, there was no story development, we really only see one character and they are pretty flat. Status screens take up significant space ( although they are far more creative, when I usually see this happening). Writing quality was decent.
I liked the story and it has potential but there are a couple of problems. One is grammar I’m not at all an expert in grammar but I can clearly see you misspelled many words or completely forgot to write some. This makes overall writing quality horrible. You could solve this by maybe going back to read it over and make changes. Two the information dumps need to be spaced out. While it did help give an over impression of the world background. It also kind’ve made the story a little boring. Anyways I believe this story has potential and I hope you can develop its potential to the fullest
Thanks for a Wonderful story. Storyline development has potential. Please author release more chapter.
Good story thus far. It has potential to be a hit, Grammer issues are found and some chapters are bland. would be interesting to see some perspective of adventures about to stumble upon his dungeon or some senior dungeon masters seeing a new name rising the ranks fast.
I really want to read this, I love Dungeon Master/Summoner kind of novels but damn 10 chapters stright and absolutely no story at all. Worldbuilding should be done by story Devlopment not by info dumping. Author should have done it like this. Story starts, 30 days pass away and as story progresses the narrative will move back to the past to explain how it was done, or maybe the characters can talk and you find out from their talk about the whole empires and stuff, you can do a lot but it just feels dull from the first 10 chapters.