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A good character design and the updating stability is good as well and I wasn't able to find
It’s a really good fanfic, however I have one major problem with the dialogue. It’s way too formal. Like every conversation is way too formal that it starts to feel stiff between characters. If you can fix the dialogue, then I’d give this a five star rating. Other than that, I’m loving it. But please try to fix it.
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Well, you should skip the part that it's a rewrite, usually rewrites are abandoned very quickly that's why people don't take the time to read.
I know I'm not that good and that's why I need your help. Please point out plot holes or something I missed, helps me improve. Also, don't just trash it for no reason because I already have a hard time writing as is with the pressure of college exams and then a part time job along with pressure from my parents to get a government job. I can't handle unjustified trashing man, it hurts my soul, which doesn't usually care about most things. Anyways, too much of sob story of my life, not like I am worse than many people out there. So ask any questions about the fic that you have and give some love through those power stones people.
When it says the system isn't sentinent, that's all I need to read to bookmark this fanfic. Probably should always put that at the top.
A good character design and the updating stability is good as well and I wasn't able to find
It’s a really good fanfic, however I have one major problem with the dialogue. It’s way too formal. Like every conversation is way too formal that it starts to feel stiff between characters. If you can fix the dialogue, then I’d give this a five star rating. Other than that, I’m loving it. But please try to fix it.
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Well, you should skip the part that it's a rewrite, usually rewrites are abandoned very quickly that's why people don't take the time to read.
I know I'm not that good and that's why I need your help. Please point out plot holes or something I missed, helps me improve. Also, don't just trash it for no reason because I already have a hard time writing as is with the pressure of college exams and then a part time job along with pressure from my parents to get a government job. I can't handle unjustified trashing man, it hurts my soul, which doesn't usually care about most things. Anyways, too much of sob story of my life, not like I am worse than many people out there. So ask any questions about the fic that you have and give some love through those power stones people.
When it says the system isn't sentinent, that's all I need to read to bookmark this fanfic. Probably should always put that at the top.
You should make the FL lady death. That way they’re both skeletons.