Dark Lord in Twilight

How should I put it... the author based the main character on Tom Riddle, but it’s not Tom at all. Not even close. The author tries to justify his behavior with the emotions Tom experienced after his rebirth. But understand, while emotions exist, they cannot fundamentally change the essence of a person, their personality. Tom Riddle, as a character, has immense pride and self-love; he is a true narcissist. He didn't particularly like Muggles, loved magic, and was proud to be a wizard. Do you think such a person (even considering he developed emotions) would work as a PE teacher in a Muggle school (even to blend in)? Would such a person talk to Muggles just because he has no one else to talk to? Would such a person want to drive a car or, even worse, a motorcycle? Author, understand, this is not Tom Riddle. I wouldn't even be writing this comment if you had based the character on someone else. But if you chose Tom, at least stick to his character a bit. So far, the main character only has Tom Riddle’s name. If you wanted to change his personality, do it gradually; a person cannot change so quickly, even after death. P.S. Written after reading three chapters.

Calidad de escritoria 2/5: haber la ortografía se podria decir que esta bien, lo que no esta bien es la forma en que redacta, todo se siente tan rapido y tan confuso, si mejorara la redacción o usara almenos alguna ia gratuita podria ser mejor. Ya lo demas tiene 5 estrellas todo, para mi gusto el resto esta bien y me gusta la idea, no es alguien malvado al 100% ni alguien que se vuelve muy emocional solo por una chica caliente, queda acorde