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TheUngod

Obligatory shameless author review! This is my second official book, and I am taking this one much more seriously than my last one as I made some bad mistakes with that one that unfortunately led to it being dropped. But I learned a lot from writing my previous book and I'm putting my all into this novel from this point onwards! Happy reading!

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Art_Show

my best book , really i love this book, i think you can give one chance , dont be hesitate, will be a rising star over time [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Zook_51
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the author took huge inspiration from "Shadow Slave" and then made it entirely their own... This story is awesome, worth reading and adding to your library!

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DaoistVv6PHh

story telling and world building is decent. but the characters development, discussions conversations, are horrible. and I mean literally horrible. plus the plot armor is too big. and character is dumb I mean who would accept a meeting with strangers

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Omar_S_7563

I think the author is decent and so is the writing but I give up with this mc. Over 280 chapters in and little to no mental development from him. Hero complex (and im someone who doesnt mond that and dislikes ruthless MCs) but does everything with 0 preparation, takes unnecessary risks and alwYs fights to the point of collapsing in a jungle or a battlefield. He should be dead atleast 4 times.

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Akselelator

This story is the best in terms of what I’ve read, the way the world is built and the development of the characters is very pleasing, the characters are happy, their growth is average, their emotions are written, in short, I’m hooked so far 5

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Preston_Bunn

first, I love the book. but. the inconsistencies kill the immersion and every time it happens, i get more and more frustrated with it. avoiding spoilers. main character gets an ability. the ability is expanded, but in about 50 chapters, that ability is like it was never upgraded. Just to be upgraded AGAIN. same upgrade, 100 chapters later. next big one. Good old Nick Stein, and his LIGHT element, and the speed of light references, and bright entry. was later replaced with good gold Nick stein with lightning sparking between his fingers and lightning abilities. there are some typos here and there, those are fine, understandable. but creating large lore inconsistencies .... is rough. please, 🙏 do better.

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Daoistm7Yh5H

Despite Being A Single Female Lead In Relationships The Book/Novel Is Quite Worthwhile Of Reading

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_ZypHer_

Quite good, but the mc is trash(but I doubt he's the mc). Too much boon on Mira while mc just leftovers. Mc personality is also trash, he's too nosy for some freakin reason. Romance was also rushed, it's too early for me. And finally, is Alex really the mc of this novel???

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wrongaccounttt

I would have loved this story more if the romance was delayed, for some reason I lost interest the moment the M.C started a relationship with Mira.

2mth
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Fenrir_Stormspear

The story concept is cool, the mc was a little dense at first but he’s growing on me. Decent story

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Breckie_Smith

Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare

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DavidFR0215

I have never done a review and I haven’t been captivated by a book so much in months or even years since I started reading light novels. I highly encourage anyone to read this, as once you start to read is hard to stop doing so. Thankful it appeared on my daily free read that allowed me to read it.

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Akugbo_Larry

Mr. round-up figure is here to say hello to this hot and recent novel.

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Ryan_9182

I absolutely loved this book one of the best I’ve read for a very long time however I do have some problems Mainly Mira I think you dedicate too much time to her making multiple chapters about her in a row I think she Is a good character just not worth having as much time in put too her and the other problem I have is that we didn’t delve more into the fact that he can steal talents like when he stole the fire talent I was expecting to see what else he would steal like maybe the pierce from the red demon would have been interesting but other than those I thought the book was amazing keep up the good work

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A_Stevenson

Main character is not smart, to put it nicely. Story seems like a mash up of various other stories, but not bad. The character having an IQ below 70 makes the story VERY hard to keep reading.

3mth
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Darius_Chromwell

Why does it feel like the main character is not actually the main character but rather the comedic relief… where can I go to read Mira’s side of the story if anyone is actually the main character then it’s her!

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DaoistKSbLen

Ok, so, several points! It's similar to shadow slave , that's a positive thing, unfortunately it didn't got me because the writing has some inconsistencies. 1) It lacks context and environmental description. The fight in the forest, what forest, what treas for example? How a boy that always lived in a asteroid ( mining) knows what a forest or treas are if he doesn't even know what horses are? 2) He has a fight with a wild carnivorous 1meter tall rabbit. The rabbit slices and wounds his leg. He defeats the rabbit. And then proceeds to run for 20km???? With a wounded leg??? 20km??? 3) He was in a camp with 1000 people, was the only survivor of a monster attack. Later he defeats the rabbit there. He skins the rabbit ( in like 10min?) and makes a bag with his skin. Lol ( without waiting to dry the blood? To do a bag like this you need to dry the skiing for days), and in the middle of thousands of death people he couldn't find a bag? No one had a bag? Incongruity like this gets me out of the reading completely. And it continues on and on.

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Stewart_Umberger

One of the best books on here. The MC does get extremely lucky quite often but he still grows and gets powerful with his own work. Although, the actual progression of the story does take quite a while even though his ability is so powerful.

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ZikkyCent

This book is indeed one of the best reads I've had in my life. if you haven't read this, then you're missing out on life, sorry. I really appreciate the author.

4mth
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myth0517

I have a question author will Alex gain more talents in coming chapters? He has two so far and he’s s C ter all ready and fighting in a war. I was wondering if he’s going to happen or not

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Nick_N_1873

Great read! Has me hooked after the first few chapters

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Love_C_raft

sorry I can't comprehend stupid, my brain can't compute stupidity.

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sergioh1t

[Alert Spoiler - Cap 121] Does the MC have a hero complex, or is he just stupid? This cave arc is really annoying me—I was really enjoying this story, but now I'm not sure if I should continue. I'll probably read a few more chapters, though... Why is the MC going to fight someone he knows almost nothing about, who has a high chance of killing him? To save people in a world he knows very little about? It's worth noting that he can already return to his own universe—he's completed his objective. He could even just go train somewhere else if he doesn't want to go back yet... But no, he prefers to risk his life constantly and in every possible way.

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Beluinus

I was tremendously enjoying the story and looking forward to how far the MC can go. But I just couldn't anymore. The world building was decent, with showing that both worlds are different enough and have different societies. It's basically a cut and paste of the beginning of and rough semantics of Shadow Slave, something the autor himself admitted. But the MC is just stupid. Repeatedly. Constantly forgets abilities he has, and has so many Ex Machinas to save his life in fights he should have no business participating in. Then you're constantly slapped in the face, over and over, about how special MC is. Like how much stronger for his level he is, and how much potential he has compared to others.

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Godsp3ll

Good book, found it really enjoyable.

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DeadpanDeme

Okay, so my review is gonna be more critical than that of the other reviews. I’m going to update it as I read further until I either catch up or drop it. (Warning, the spoilers get more detailed the further down you get.)I will note the grammar is good. This is where the positive things end. As of where I’ve read to, chapter 30 something, the author seems to either have been writing without an outline or storyboard. So moments contradict each other. The speeds and strengths of characters in particular are highly inconsistent. I did the math and main character at his weakest and injured easily avoided and killed a 10m/s enemy. After getting massively stronger three times, main character is only 30m/s at fastest speed. As well, a different thing was only a bit faster than a horse before but was later 30+ times faster than main character. The characters are aweful in my opinion. Not a single character can think outside of the box, the author is dumbing all the characters down to the point a group of what is supposed to be hardened adventurers + mc follow a guy for four days into the forest. It’s the IRL equivalent of following a creepy man into his van because he offered to take you home, only thing is that you’re a grown man and know you shouldn’t go with him. Main character has not touched a book once despite being in an unfamiliar world for weeks. He’s also more naive than the average 10 year old. That would be a fine plot point if it was written better, it’s mostly been written as, oh I noticed this but ignored it. Or, “I’ve been too hopeful in this world, I’m gonna do better.” Then he forgets to do better. He also casually kills with no remorse despite living all his life in the mines. Which is also crazy that a universally united human federation allows that form of slavery to exist. The novel feels almost as though it is being written through the eyes of someone who has only read a few novels and purely wants their ideas on paper. Whether it’s true or not, I don’t know, but that’s how it feels. It also lacks descriptive language. It’s a very, this happened then that happened type novel. TLDR: The grammar is fine, the problem is the story itself and the lack of structure. I hope I have clearly articulated what I mean. Thanks for reading my review.

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pyroxys

So, after reading the free chapters, this story is for sure INSPIRED by shadow slave, but by no means is ripping it off. look, that old saying, there is nothing new under the sun, is very true in fiction. this author was clearly inspired by the idea/world building of shadow slave...BUUUUUT, it then it veers off into its own world that IS DIFFERENT than the world of sunny. I mean, the sci fi aspects alone are great, but the first few locked chapters builds the world in such a way that it will clearly be different than earth bound shadow slave. I look forward to seeing how it goes in the future!

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Howling_Moon

Average at best. This novel starts out strong (which might be due to it taking inspiration from one other novel about a shadow) then quickly goes downhill. The MC can be described as idiotic at his smartest

6mth
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Jayanth_

great novel ,just waiting to stack up more chapters..but I hope author can update more chapters...😅

6mth
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RAPID_5188

Excellent work an extra writing quality of this masterpiece this stability is very upgraded a developed story design is very hard for a normal person characters are special background for the world in this masterpiece is amazing

6mth
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TheUngod

Obligatory shameless author review! This is my second official book, and I am taking this one much more seriously than my last one as I made some bad mistakes with that one that unfortunately led to it being dropped. But I learned a lot from writing my previous book and I'm putting my all into this novel from this point onwards! Happy reading!

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9mth
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Art_Show

my best book , really i love this book, i think you can give one chance , dont be hesitate, will be a rising star over time [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Zook_51
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the author took huge inspiration from "Shadow Slave" and then made it entirely their own... This story is awesome, worth reading and adding to your library!

4mth
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DaoistVv6PHh

story telling and world building is decent. but the characters development, discussions conversations, are horrible. and I mean literally horrible. plus the plot armor is too big. and character is dumb I mean who would accept a meeting with strangers

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Omar_S_7563

I think the author is decent and so is the writing but I give up with this mc. Over 280 chapters in and little to no mental development from him. Hero complex (and im someone who doesnt mond that and dislikes ruthless MCs) but does everything with 0 preparation, takes unnecessary risks and alwYs fights to the point of collapsing in a jungle or a battlefield. He should be dead atleast 4 times.

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Akselelator

This story is the best in terms of what I’ve read, the way the world is built and the development of the characters is very pleasing, the characters are happy, their growth is average, their emotions are written, in short, I’m hooked so far 5

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Preston_Bunn

first, I love the book. but. the inconsistencies kill the immersion and every time it happens, i get more and more frustrated with it. avoiding spoilers. main character gets an ability. the ability is expanded, but in about 50 chapters, that ability is like it was never upgraded. Just to be upgraded AGAIN. same upgrade, 100 chapters later. next big one. Good old Nick Stein, and his LIGHT element, and the speed of light references, and bright entry. was later replaced with good gold Nick stein with lightning sparking between his fingers and lightning abilities. there are some typos here and there, those are fine, understandable. but creating large lore inconsistencies .... is rough. please, 🙏 do better.

1mth
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Daoistm7Yh5H

Despite Being A Single Female Lead In Relationships The Book/Novel Is Quite Worthwhile Of Reading

2mth
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_ZypHer_

Quite good, but the mc is trash(but I doubt he's the mc). Too much boon on Mira while mc just leftovers. Mc personality is also trash, he's too nosy for some freakin reason. Romance was also rushed, it's too early for me. And finally, is Alex really the mc of this novel???

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wrongaccounttt

I would have loved this story more if the romance was delayed, for some reason I lost interest the moment the M.C started a relationship with Mira.

2mth
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Fenrir_Stormspear

The story concept is cool, the mc was a little dense at first but he’s growing on me. Decent story

2mth
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Breckie_Smith

Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare

2mth
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DavidFR0215

I have never done a review and I haven’t been captivated by a book so much in months or even years since I started reading light novels. I highly encourage anyone to read this, as once you start to read is hard to stop doing so. Thankful it appeared on my daily free read that allowed me to read it.

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Akugbo_Larry

Mr. round-up figure is here to say hello to this hot and recent novel.

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Ryan_9182

I absolutely loved this book one of the best I’ve read for a very long time however I do have some problems Mainly Mira I think you dedicate too much time to her making multiple chapters about her in a row I think she Is a good character just not worth having as much time in put too her and the other problem I have is that we didn’t delve more into the fact that he can steal talents like when he stole the fire talent I was expecting to see what else he would steal like maybe the pierce from the red demon would have been interesting but other than those I thought the book was amazing keep up the good work

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A_Stevenson

Main character is not smart, to put it nicely. Story seems like a mash up of various other stories, but not bad. The character having an IQ below 70 makes the story VERY hard to keep reading.

3mth
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Darius_Chromwell

Why does it feel like the main character is not actually the main character but rather the comedic relief… where can I go to read Mira’s side of the story if anyone is actually the main character then it’s her!

3mth
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DaoistKSbLen

Ok, so, several points! It's similar to shadow slave , that's a positive thing, unfortunately it didn't got me because the writing has some inconsistencies. 1) It lacks context and environmental description. The fight in the forest, what forest, what treas for example? How a boy that always lived in a asteroid ( mining) knows what a forest or treas are if he doesn't even know what horses are? 2) He has a fight with a wild carnivorous 1meter tall rabbit. The rabbit slices and wounds his leg. He defeats the rabbit. And then proceeds to run for 20km???? With a wounded leg??? 20km??? 3) He was in a camp with 1000 people, was the only survivor of a monster attack. Later he defeats the rabbit there. He skins the rabbit ( in like 10min?) and makes a bag with his skin. Lol ( without waiting to dry the blood? To do a bag like this you need to dry the skiing for days), and in the middle of thousands of death people he couldn't find a bag? No one had a bag? Incongruity like this gets me out of the reading completely. And it continues on and on.

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Stewart_Umberger

One of the best books on here. The MC does get extremely lucky quite often but he still grows and gets powerful with his own work. Although, the actual progression of the story does take quite a while even though his ability is so powerful.

4mth
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ZikkyCent

This book is indeed one of the best reads I've had in my life. if you haven't read this, then you're missing out on life, sorry. I really appreciate the author.

4mth
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myth0517

I have a question author will Alex gain more talents in coming chapters? He has two so far and he’s s C ter all ready and fighting in a war. I was wondering if he’s going to happen or not

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Nick_N_1873

Great read! Has me hooked after the first few chapters

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Love_C_raft

sorry I can't comprehend stupid, my brain can't compute stupidity.

5mth
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sergioh1t

[Alert Spoiler - Cap 121] Does the MC have a hero complex, or is he just stupid? This cave arc is really annoying me—I was really enjoying this story, but now I'm not sure if I should continue. I'll probably read a few more chapters, though... Why is the MC going to fight someone he knows almost nothing about, who has a high chance of killing him? To save people in a world he knows very little about? It's worth noting that he can already return to his own universe—he's completed his objective. He could even just go train somewhere else if he doesn't want to go back yet... But no, he prefers to risk his life constantly and in every possible way.

5mth
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Beluinus

I was tremendously enjoying the story and looking forward to how far the MC can go. But I just couldn't anymore. The world building was decent, with showing that both worlds are different enough and have different societies. It's basically a cut and paste of the beginning of and rough semantics of Shadow Slave, something the autor himself admitted. But the MC is just stupid. Repeatedly. Constantly forgets abilities he has, and has so many Ex Machinas to save his life in fights he should have no business participating in. Then you're constantly slapped in the face, over and over, about how special MC is. Like how much stronger for his level he is, and how much potential he has compared to others.

5mth
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Godsp3ll

Good book, found it really enjoyable.

5mth
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DeadpanDeme

Okay, so my review is gonna be more critical than that of the other reviews. I’m going to update it as I read further until I either catch up or drop it. (Warning, the spoilers get more detailed the further down you get.)I will note the grammar is good. This is where the positive things end. As of where I’ve read to, chapter 30 something, the author seems to either have been writing without an outline or storyboard. So moments contradict each other. The speeds and strengths of characters in particular are highly inconsistent. I did the math and main character at his weakest and injured easily avoided and killed a 10m/s enemy. After getting massively stronger three times, main character is only 30m/s at fastest speed. As well, a different thing was only a bit faster than a horse before but was later 30+ times faster than main character. The characters are aweful in my opinion. Not a single character can think outside of the box, the author is dumbing all the characters down to the point a group of what is supposed to be hardened adventurers + mc follow a guy for four days into the forest. It’s the IRL equivalent of following a creepy man into his van because he offered to take you home, only thing is that you’re a grown man and know you shouldn’t go with him. Main character has not touched a book once despite being in an unfamiliar world for weeks. He’s also more naive than the average 10 year old. That would be a fine plot point if it was written better, it’s mostly been written as, oh I noticed this but ignored it. Or, “I’ve been too hopeful in this world, I’m gonna do better.” Then he forgets to do better. He also casually kills with no remorse despite living all his life in the mines. Which is also crazy that a universally united human federation allows that form of slavery to exist. The novel feels almost as though it is being written through the eyes of someone who has only read a few novels and purely wants their ideas on paper. Whether it’s true or not, I don’t know, but that’s how it feels. It also lacks descriptive language. It’s a very, this happened then that happened type novel. TLDR: The grammar is fine, the problem is the story itself and the lack of structure. I hope I have clearly articulated what I mean. Thanks for reading my review.

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pyroxys

So, after reading the free chapters, this story is for sure INSPIRED by shadow slave, but by no means is ripping it off. look, that old saying, there is nothing new under the sun, is very true in fiction. this author was clearly inspired by the idea/world building of shadow slave...BUUUUUT, it then it veers off into its own world that IS DIFFERENT than the world of sunny. I mean, the sci fi aspects alone are great, but the first few locked chapters builds the world in such a way that it will clearly be different than earth bound shadow slave. I look forward to seeing how it goes in the future!

6mth
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Howling_Moon

Average at best. This novel starts out strong (which might be due to it taking inspiration from one other novel about a shadow) then quickly goes downhill. The MC can be described as idiotic at his smartest

6mth
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Jayanth_

great novel ,just waiting to stack up more chapters..but I hope author can update more chapters...😅

6mth
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RAPID_5188

Excellent work an extra writing quality of this masterpiece this stability is very upgraded a developed story design is very hard for a normal person characters are special background for the world in this masterpiece is amazing

6mth
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