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At the beginning, I nearly quit reading the fic after seeing the writing is done in script. But I though, maybe the author might improve afterall those feedbacks given to them. So, I give it a shot... It didnt get better... Everything feel plain and robotic. No character developments. No interesting dialogs. There's storylines for sure but it just feel rush and messy, that I have to reread some parts just to fully understand where's it going. The most frustrating part about the fic that I feel is that the author skip the important dialog without giving a further details or explanations! All done in summaries. So, I hope the aurthor would actually grown and learn from this and better themselve on their writing skills to further improve the fic since it have potential to be better.
First he builds tech and stuff quickly and it’s kinda fast paced in the first 20 chapters after that it’s like author quit and realized he couldn’t keep that pace so he made the entire thing boring asf took 70 chapters from the time he got the electric motercycle blueprint to the time he finally decides to build guess what A gasoline powered bike because authors words ”there are still gas stations around to fill up the bikes and those gas stations don’t exist and if they did they would be full of 200 year old gas it would be sludge. Evey car in fallout is nuclear powered the cherry bomb car has a atomic v8 engine that can explode violently and the flying cars are hydrogen powered fusion engines that can’t explode or have some kind of protective shield from stopping it from exploding because they were for the rich and most of the cars explode violently if crashed
Dialogue is too rocky and does not flow. The story line is hard to follow and he doesn’t ever describe the events they just happen. He went and killed a bounty. Instead of describing the encounter, and telling how he was able to overcome. All in all not good. Whichtakes the fun out of fallout.
The writing quality is very average, maybe below it depending on your standards. The conversations between people especially feel inorganic. The characters are very - mtl quantity over quantity writing style.
Hey author what’s going on with the story you started off strong but now it’s uhhh😱 But overall i will still read it just wondering what going of with the writing and the mc One more thing why and how are they making t-60 power armor when he only has t-51 schematics and why was he walking around in t-45 armor a while ago
I'm going to be honest here. I love the idea of the story. I've always wanted to read Fallout 4 fanfictions. But i just cant find any. I love it so much that in each chapter I'm actively trying to make corrections to the many Grammer mistakes I'm finding while reading. (If English isn't your first language then I understand.) There's also the "Flow" of the story, it feels somewhat off in a way. There are certain moments in the chapters where, seemingly important moments, are rushed through or brushed aside. I really love the idea of the story, but my mind and imagination are working very hard to make sure I enjoy it. But maybe it'll get better overtime, we'll see. Goodluck and remember to enjoy writing.
I really wanted to like this story. It's exactly the type of story I was looking for, or so I thought. The writing/translation is awful. It's nearly impossible to read. The characters are... incredibly unrelatable and story itself is super hard to follow. And I mean I like wish-fulfillment, sometimes it makes a great -relaxing- read, but this is too much. No one questions anything, the dialogue is so contrived and forced that it pains me to read it. Just... super disappointed. And before anyone says it gets better or something, I made it to chapter twenty. That's far enough I think. Nothing had improved by then
Cette est au mieux 3 étoiles pas 4.2 Lors des dialogues j'ai l'impression de regarder des gens lire un texte plutôt que s'exprimer eux même Et la majorité des personnages sont mort je veux dire que tout le monde écoute le MC et fait ce qu'il dit comme si c'était normal [img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
You don’t need to put the name of the speaker in front of every phrase ._. It makes it unreadable
Terrible dialogue, terrible sentence structure, the author skips over important details simply because he/she forgets. Introduces a system but ignores it… then why even introduce it.
So I didn't get very far because of the clunky and for lack of better term artificial dialogue as an example to potential readers all conversation are like this Sico"did you say something Jenny" Jenny"no, I've haven't made a peep" sico "I swear I heard something" the author claims it gets better but I checked up to chapter 70 and it's still in this script format and to the author when someone says artificial dialogue they mean they style not the content e.g "Did you say something Jenny" sico whispered. "no" came her crisp reply. Would be how one expects to read dialogue Other than that it's a good story sorry I couldn't stick around I do love fallout
The dialogue is extremely robotic and unsatisfying, besides that everything else is fine. Really hope the author can learn from other authors dialogue and improve
I'm going to chapter 20 For starters, it seems like the author forgot that Mc had learned beginner hand-to-hand combat, since it's not added in his state. The dialogue system is horrible, it is the worst thing you can use since you avoid showing the characters' expressions when speaking. Things happen too fast for my liking, plus you're going to tell me that you couldn't find skill magazines in all this time.
hey I love the story so far but I feel like you have completely forgotten sico's original home where his parents are and the vibe I get from him doesn't seem like the type to forget his parants.
The only reason it’s not 5 stars is because of grammar and how fast it goes but that’s really it other than that great story and will continue to read.👍
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My biggest problem with this story is that all the dialog feels robotic and un human.second problem is that the mc(mc's name is sico) system is weak 😔 to such a degree that It makes him weaker then a normal person in gaining stats and he stated with 7 intelligence he should level up way more and gain stats way more.
A great star for a fallout fanfic, some grammar error here and there but for me it's not a problem and I can still immerse in the story, for world building it will be awesome since it was Fallout 4, the mc looks like good some good head on his shoulders, I recommend this novel for everyone
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Just because this was a fallout novel and fallout is my all time favorite game. So i hope you doesn't drop this one author even though i know there was no chance you to drop it
Hello Tang12 as a fan of your writing i will support this story, I can not wait to see what you can do with such World like Fallout.
Since it was Tang12 who made it, I believe it would be a great piece of work just like his other work! The world-building is definitely already perfect as it was based on Fallout 4, for other things I can't see but I believe it would be great! Keep up the spirit author!
Making gas powered vehicles makes no sense in fallout there isn’t any oli to make gas it’s the reason the Great War happened and the war of Alaska was to protect the last of the oli in the world and all gas has gone bad hundreds of years ago it only last 2-4 years before it’s bad. Maybe you make a biofuel but you never mention it.
Reveal Spoiler At the beginning, I nearly quit reading the fic after seeing the writing is done in script. But I though, maybe the author might improve afterall those feedbacks given to them. So, I give it a shot... It didnt get better... Everything feel plain and robotic. No character developments. No interesting dialogs. There's storylines for sure but it just feel rush and messy, that I have to reread some parts just to fully understand where's it going. The most frustrating part about the fic that I feel is that the author skip the important dialog without giving a further details or explanations! All done in summaries. So, I hope the aurthor would actually grown and learn from this and better themselve on their writing skills to further improve the fic since it have potential to be better.
First he builds tech and stuff quickly and it’s kinda fast paced in the first 20 chapters after that it’s like author quit and realized he couldn’t keep that pace so he made the entire thing boring asf took 70 chapters from the time he got the electric motercycle blueprint to the time he finally decides to build guess what A gasoline powered bike because authors words ”there are still gas stations around to fill up the bikes and those gas stations don’t exist and if they did they would be full of 200 year old gas it would be sludge. Evey car in fallout is nuclear powered the cherry bomb car has a atomic v8 engine that can explode violently and the flying cars are hydrogen powered fusion engines that can’t explode or have some kind of protective shield from stopping it from exploding because they were for the rich and most of the cars explode violently if crashed
Dialogue is too rocky and does not flow. The story line is hard to follow and he doesn’t ever describe the events they just happen. He went and killed a bounty. Instead of describing the encounter, and telling how he was able to overcome. All in all not good. Whichtakes the fun out of fallout.
The writing quality is very average, maybe below it depending on your standards. The conversations between people especially feel inorganic. The characters are very - mtl quantity over quantity writing style.
Hey author what’s going on with the story you started off strong but now it’s uhhh😱 But overall i will still read it just wondering what going of with the writing and the mc One more thing why and how are they making t-60 power armor when he only has t-51 schematics and why was he walking around in t-45 armor a while ago
I'm going to be honest here. I love the idea of the story. I've always wanted to read Fallout 4 fanfictions. But i just cant find any. I love it so much that in each chapter I'm actively trying to make corrections to the many Grammer mistakes I'm finding while reading. (If English isn't your first language then I understand.) There's also the "Flow" of the story, it feels somewhat off in a way. There are certain moments in the chapters where, seemingly important moments, are rushed through or brushed aside. I really love the idea of the story, but my mind and imagination are working very hard to make sure I enjoy it. But maybe it'll get better overtime, we'll see. Goodluck and remember to enjoy writing.
I really wanted to like this story. It's exactly the type of story I was looking for, or so I thought. The writing/translation is awful. It's nearly impossible to read. The characters are... incredibly unrelatable and story itself is super hard to follow. And I mean I like wish-fulfillment, sometimes it makes a great -relaxing- read, but this is too much. No one questions anything, the dialogue is so contrived and forced that it pains me to read it. Just... super disappointed. And before anyone says it gets better or something, I made it to chapter twenty. That's far enough I think. Nothing had improved by then
Cette est au mieux 3 étoiles pas 4.2 Lors des dialogues j'ai l'impression de regarder des gens lire un texte plutôt que s'exprimer eux même Et la majorité des personnages sont mort je veux dire que tout le monde écoute le MC et fait ce qu'il dit comme si c'était normal [img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
You don’t need to put the name of the speaker in front of every phrase ._. It makes it unreadable
Terrible dialogue, terrible sentence structure, the author skips over important details simply because he/she forgets. Introduces a system but ignores it… then why even introduce it.
So I didn't get very far because of the clunky and for lack of better term artificial dialogue as an example to potential readers all conversation are like this Sico"did you say something Jenny" Jenny"no, I've haven't made a peep" sico "I swear I heard something" the author claims it gets better but I checked up to chapter 70 and it's still in this script format and to the author when someone says artificial dialogue they mean they style not the content e.g "Did you say something Jenny" sico whispered. "no" came her crisp reply. Would be how one expects to read dialogue Other than that it's a good story sorry I couldn't stick around I do love fallout
The dialogue is extremely robotic and unsatisfying, besides that everything else is fine. Really hope the author can learn from other authors dialogue and improve
I'm going to chapter 20 For starters, it seems like the author forgot that Mc had learned beginner hand-to-hand combat, since it's not added in his state. The dialogue system is horrible, it is the worst thing you can use since you avoid showing the characters' expressions when speaking. Things happen too fast for my liking, plus you're going to tell me that you couldn't find skill magazines in all this time.
hey I love the story so far but I feel like you have completely forgotten sico's original home where his parents are and the vibe I get from him doesn't seem like the type to forget his parants.
The only reason it’s not 5 stars is because of grammar and how fast it goes but that’s really it other than that great story and will continue to read.👍
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My biggest problem with this story is that all the dialog feels robotic and un human.second problem is that the mc(mc's name is sico) system is weak 😔 to such a degree that It makes him weaker then a normal person in gaining stats and he stated with 7 intelligence he should level up way more and gain stats way more.
A great star for a fallout fanfic, some grammar error here and there but for me it's not a problem and I can still immerse in the story, for world building it will be awesome since it was Fallout 4, the mc looks like good some good head on his shoulders, I recommend this novel for everyone
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Just because this was a fallout novel and fallout is my all time favorite game. So i hope you doesn't drop this one author even though i know there was no chance you to drop it
Hello Tang12 as a fan of your writing i will support this story, I can not wait to see what you can do with such World like Fallout.
Since it was Tang12 who made it, I believe it would be a great piece of work just like his other work! The world-building is definitely already perfect as it was based on Fallout 4, for other things I can't see but I believe it would be great! Keep up the spirit author!
Making gas powered vehicles makes no sense in fallout there isn’t any oli to make gas it’s the reason the Great War happened and the war of Alaska was to protect the last of the oli in the world and all gas has gone bad hundreds of years ago it only last 2-4 years before it’s bad. Maybe you make a biofuel but you never mention it.
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