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Gilgamesh9669

that typical Author's Review of his own fanfic . . . IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully

1yr
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Kurama24

This fanfic isn't meant for special snowflakes so if u are one then don't read it. 1) The mc is semi-op, he's like a ben 10 of fate but with some rng for who he gets. 2) The writing overall is good and clear with few mistakes. 3) The mc ain't mister perfect so he has some shortcomings like his temper when it's related to certain topics. 4) Sooo far it's a single LI and i didn't see a harem tag, but the romance execution was bland like u hardly see them interact. Imo it should've been given a few more months for them to interact and deepen their relationship. 5) The Mc joins the YJL and semi-explained how his power works which isn't much of an issue except to the snowflakes (that 1 star reviewer😂) since they are the GOOD guys and would provide him help and protection due to his unique situation not to mention u can't just accept someone without having a basic idea of what they're capable of. Overall it's an enjoyable and unique fanfic and i hope it won't get dropped soon.

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zack_205

it's a good one. I didn't expect that I would fou d a story the wai I want , thank you Mr.best writer

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Dale_Melvin

very good I'm on chapter 31 it's interesting and very different from all the other DC pics I've read eager for more.

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ShifuLong

The only feasible reason I see that this novel has such a good rating is that the creator himself is eliminating reviews. This is just garbage.

1mth
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jflores
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like the story so far keep it up. Having the count of Monte Cristo was lit.

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Squirrelly_Whirly1

Going good so far showing how he deals with his trauma and his growth so it going good it’s showing some of the hypocrisy of the average dc universe justice league and their priorities in the hero work.

2mth
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Jacob_Hickok

I haven't read that far but so far I think people are being too harsh to this book, which doesn't surprise me on webnovel, it's isn't perfect but I for one didn't expect perfection, who Raiden was, isn't described that much (yet at least) but I don't think that's that important since the main focus is who he is now and the summons. Either way it's not that bad so far and I'm entertained.

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Lurcho

It’s pretty bad, character is sometimes idiotic and the development itself is somewhat annoying

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CassTheEevee

Up to chapter 60 this story was absolutely fantastic, it was great, I liked the way you did Raiden’s powers, unfortunately chapter 61 completely tanked my opinion on this novel, the thing with Gaia was completely stupid and unnecessary, and while I tried to continue on because of all the previous greatness I just can’t bring myself to do it, those last 60 chapters are the only reason the rating on this is so high, either way, good on you for writing, keep improving and writing, I’m sure I’ll read something else from you but the choices you made for this one are ones I don’t agree with, hope you enjoy writing it tho

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Yameteyoo

The plot idea is interesting, but there are too many problems. 1) The author rushes too much and doesn't care about the important points about the highlight of the summoned character. Personality, appearance, power, no clear explanation, even though it's something the protagonist uses. 2) The protagonist wants to attract attention from others like a newborn baby. It's very annoying. Focus on one point, such as weak, strong, smart, stupid (don't recommend this or that. No one wants to read it because it's annoying even if there is character development later. If you want, just stay in the normal range.) 3) The protagonist's power scale is ridiculous and unreasonable. Don't forget that it's a heroic spirit. All fighting skills are at a high level in each area. There is no training or thinking about it. There is no development. And when calling characters to fight, it's like they are completely different people. For example, fighting skills, thoughts, they shouldn't be that different from the original characters. Don't forget that the spirit is not in control. 4) The relationship is too rushed. The story can go a long way. 5) Too much time limit for summoning heroes. Don't forget that this is the DC universe. There are a lot of cheating powers. How many enemies? 6) The power scale comparison between characters is incorrect or not interested. For example, what is the A status? How much is it equivalent to in attack or defense? ############## Most of them are the foundations that the author neglects. If you adjust them as suggested, both the story and the graphics will be much better. ฿: This is a suggestion. Use the idea. The author continues to practice writing and develop his skills, and it will improve on its own. ฿: Recommend if you reach a point where you think that if you are a reader, it will be interesting even if you write slowly. It is not a problem for the reader (if you write faster, it is considered good, but do not forget about the quality). For example, Essen Gacha ฿: The author presents an interesting idea with potential. ฿: When the author reaches a point where he thinks it is appropriate, he recommends that you rewrite this novel, adding details as suggested, and adding other details that the author thinks are interesting. ***Recommend***

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LostRegressor

honestly this is one of the best fanfics I've read ngl 1)The mc is actually smart and not sum stupid mf. His personality is very likable except at the start but he got way more mature later and he isn't sum edgelord. 2) The author actually knows what he's doing. And when I say that I mean he has a good understanding of the characters and their powers and uses each character in ways that makes sense. And If your a normal reader you won't find much plotholes unless your sum smartass who thinks they have smt to prove. 3)The romance is good just wished it had developed abit more "naturally" and the only issues for me is that its harem but whenever starfire is mentioned I just skip over her and focus and raven so it's like she's not even there. But then again that's just down to our own personal preference. 4) The story line follows the Young Justice story line and the author adds the story lines from from the DCAU which adds more depth and possibles. 5) world buildin, this one was way lacklustre ngl. And when I say that I just wished that there were moments when the civilians had presense. for example moments when the mc exposed Amanda waller and PM for their crimes I wish there was a chat that had the civilians opinions on the subject and how they view the actions of the mc and their views about the mc. The author did a moment like that but only once. I just wished there were more moments like those. 6) Finally grammar the grammar in this is actually good. Personally when I read stuff my mind just auto corrects the mistakes. And even when I see the bad grammar I just gloss over it since my grammar is not that good so who am I to judge. So yh I would definitely recommend reading this novel if you are a DC fan. Way better than the rest of the trash out there. And even if you are just a DC and doesn't know much about Fate you don't have to worry about not knowing what's going on since the author and the community post gifs and references to what's happening so even if you know nth about the Fate heros that he summons you will atleast know what they look like and the general overview of their powers.

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Lady_TeZATalks

Take your deserved review, my guy ! Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!

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Night_Specter

Review based on reading till CH 60 Good concept, bad writing. I am having a constriction in my chest on reading this book, but I still perserved till chap 60 but no more, sorry author. The writing quality is very sub-par. There is nothing to visualize, nothing to immerse yourself in. The main character has very less than ideal intelligence but that could have been overseen, seeing how author has done character devolopment, but the book really has such dead level of writing that its difficult to read. Not to mention the romance is done badly and very quickly, not in temporal meaning, but rather in the way of showing things.

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DaoistCkdsB0

writing quality is very good with no mistakes until chapter 13. story development is nonsensical at best, downright unbelievable at worst. the story feels like it is the plot of a very bad indie rpg. the dialogue feels like NPCs talking and everything happens to further the plot. there is also a lot of unnecessary and annoying dialogue between characters that further destroys the emotion. for example, the needless talk that between two adversaries during a fight. character design is atrocious. every character is an annoying NPC who has a personality of a pencil. the main character is dumb, to say the least. when I say dumb I don't mean the average Joe dumb. I mean dumb to the point of having a brain injury. updating is regular as far as I can see. world background has left the building. no characters adhere to their canon personalities, which isn't necessarily a bad thing but here, it is executed very badly. the characters become NPCs with no personality at all. at the end, it was never about if the character was overpowered or underpowered. i have liked Saitama as well as guren lagen. but you have got to have some semblance of consistency in your power scaling, power acquisition, demotion etc. with proper reasoning. anyway, it's your book man. you do you.

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Psan
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Really good, and finally a novel where mc gets both Raven and Starfire!. The character development needs improvement and add more world background such as descriptions of the surroundings and settings. But overall its really good.

4mth
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Akila_Pc

love it.....................................

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ANANTAVIJAYA1961

well the mc is always getting beaten up and fainting . Its's not that good many things are stupid here.

4mth
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AlastorGF

SINCERAMENTE LO QUE ME HIZO VOTAR ASI FUE LA REACCION A AÑOS DE TORTURA DEL MC, SALIO DE AHI CON UNA SONRISA ENTUSIASTA Y MUY PERO MUY FELIZ........ OSEA QUE MIERD AUTOR ENSERIO NO PODES PENSAR UN POCO ? ENSERIO CREES POR UN SEGUNDO QUE 5 AÑOS DE TORTURA NO LO CAMBIARIA ? PRACTICAMENTE TODO ESE CAPITULO DE SIENDO SECUESTRADO Y TORTURADO POR 5 AÑOS FUE COMPLETAMENTE INUTIL Y SIN SENTIDO PORQUE EL MC ESTA IGUAL QUE CUANDO REENCARNO, PRACTICAMENTE ES COMO SI NO HUBIERA PASADO NADA

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CLOX
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I'm not trusting reviews from now on, this story was something I've been a bit hesitant to read cause 1 I'm that invested in DC (hell i only watched teen titans) and some of the movies, and the reviews were low BUT this isn't bad at all, so for believing other's bullshit I deeply apologize.

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The_reader_ofnovel

The writing could be better. The mc literally transforms into the heroic spirit unfortunately it would’ve been nice to know before reading that the MC doesn’t actually get the powers but gets genderbent into the heroic spirit with the powers honestly its a bit disappointing .

5mth
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Rimuru_2412

solo leí 3 capítulos pero con eso puedo decir que será una mierda 💩, porque te preguntaras, simple por que tiene un sistema de Fate, no digo que no me guste fate pero cuando es un sistema con esa temática siempre son una mierda, porque siempre hacen lo mismo...... quisiera explicar más pero se me hace una perdida de tiempo explicar esta mierda, aparte y la actitud del prota me parece una mierda, aunque no a hablado mucho, entonces como puedo decir que es una mierda porque en esos poco diálogos a demostrado una actitud Infantil, impulsiva que no piensa antes de actuar. en resumen una mierda evitence esta perdida de tiempo, a menos que seas alguien con malos gustos.

5mth
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glmo11

the story is good but it feels like it can still be improved.................................................................................................

5mth
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Kosmostars

Хорошая работа [img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad]

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MOTF_author

i had read few reviews for this book and i honestly don't understand why there are so many negative comments here? this is a different kind of story where the protagonist has a hero like mentality and not op from the start. I believe author have explained all his system abilities very well and making him powerful little by little. Author keep up the good work it's good to see a heroic mc instead of always having a evil one👍

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can_kan

Good................ ..................................................... .................................................................

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FrenzyAren

Raiden character is quite interesting and the story so far is good, i've read others complain about his ability to turn into a woman for example and it's peak ficiton.

6mth
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Heroic_Spirit23

feels rushed ngl, like the way it was written is comparable to someone who's in a hurry. you might wanna slow down the pace/ rhythm, cuz it feels weird reading it. im only at the first 10+ chapters so im not judging all the chapters you've written, else i'll just update this if the writing improves in the later chapters.

6mth
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Austin_oates

I don't understand fanfic authors that torment their Mc. the books is are interesting, but all the bad stuff that's happened to the Mc is so cliche. the main reason I read it is ilike the prospect of his powers in the dc verse but he's so nerfed that it ruins the enjoyment.And he doesn't take advantage of the wisdom that the heros poses. he's copied 1 spell from madea and that's it so far. had the power for months and didn't learn anything from fighting or magic from the heros it's such a waist.

8mth
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Legxndary

A great story idea that is plagued by bad grammar and editing. You have sentences where words are combined together with no spaces, and there is no " " for characters speaking. You need to go back and edit chapters that have this issue. The story is good but has so many errors that it's almost unreadable. Advice from a fellow author: Get Grammarly or an app like it to fix your grammatical errors.

9mth
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Ruscyl
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good 👍 funny fate DC not boring. me caveman.

9mth
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Faggio

Realistically, no fanfic deserves a five, but I’m giving this story a five to boost it’s rating. This fanfic is better than most dc fanfics.

10mth
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Gilgamesh9669

that typical Author's Review of his own fanfic . . . IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully

1yr
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Kurama24

This fanfic isn't meant for special snowflakes so if u are one then don't read it. 1) The mc is semi-op, he's like a ben 10 of fate but with some rng for who he gets. 2) The writing overall is good and clear with few mistakes. 3) The mc ain't mister perfect so he has some shortcomings like his temper when it's related to certain topics. 4) Sooo far it's a single LI and i didn't see a harem tag, but the romance execution was bland like u hardly see them interact. Imo it should've been given a few more months for them to interact and deepen their relationship. 5) The Mc joins the YJL and semi-explained how his power works which isn't much of an issue except to the snowflakes (that 1 star reviewer😂) since they are the GOOD guys and would provide him help and protection due to his unique situation not to mention u can't just accept someone without having a basic idea of what they're capable of. Overall it's an enjoyable and unique fanfic and i hope it won't get dropped soon.

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zack_205

it's a good one. I didn't expect that I would fou d a story the wai I want , thank you Mr.best writer

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Dale_Melvin

very good I'm on chapter 31 it's interesting and very different from all the other DC pics I've read eager for more.

1mth
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ShifuLong

The only feasible reason I see that this novel has such a good rating is that the creator himself is eliminating reviews. This is just garbage.

1mth
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jflores
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like the story so far keep it up. Having the count of Monte Cristo was lit.

1mth
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Squirrelly_Whirly1

Going good so far showing how he deals with his trauma and his growth so it going good it’s showing some of the hypocrisy of the average dc universe justice league and their priorities in the hero work.

2mth
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Jacob_Hickok

I haven't read that far but so far I think people are being too harsh to this book, which doesn't surprise me on webnovel, it's isn't perfect but I for one didn't expect perfection, who Raiden was, isn't described that much (yet at least) but I don't think that's that important since the main focus is who he is now and the summons. Either way it's not that bad so far and I'm entertained.

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Lurcho

It’s pretty bad, character is sometimes idiotic and the development itself is somewhat annoying

3mth
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CassTheEevee

Up to chapter 60 this story was absolutely fantastic, it was great, I liked the way you did Raiden’s powers, unfortunately chapter 61 completely tanked my opinion on this novel, the thing with Gaia was completely stupid and unnecessary, and while I tried to continue on because of all the previous greatness I just can’t bring myself to do it, those last 60 chapters are the only reason the rating on this is so high, either way, good on you for writing, keep improving and writing, I’m sure I’ll read something else from you but the choices you made for this one are ones I don’t agree with, hope you enjoy writing it tho

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Yameteyoo

The plot idea is interesting, but there are too many problems. 1) The author rushes too much and doesn't care about the important points about the highlight of the summoned character. Personality, appearance, power, no clear explanation, even though it's something the protagonist uses. 2) The protagonist wants to attract attention from others like a newborn baby. It's very annoying. Focus on one point, such as weak, strong, smart, stupid (don't recommend this or that. No one wants to read it because it's annoying even if there is character development later. If you want, just stay in the normal range.) 3) The protagonist's power scale is ridiculous and unreasonable. Don't forget that it's a heroic spirit. All fighting skills are at a high level in each area. There is no training or thinking about it. There is no development. And when calling characters to fight, it's like they are completely different people. For example, fighting skills, thoughts, they shouldn't be that different from the original characters. Don't forget that the spirit is not in control. 4) The relationship is too rushed. The story can go a long way. 5) Too much time limit for summoning heroes. Don't forget that this is the DC universe. There are a lot of cheating powers. How many enemies? 6) The power scale comparison between characters is incorrect or not interested. For example, what is the A status? How much is it equivalent to in attack or defense? ############## Most of them are the foundations that the author neglects. If you adjust them as suggested, both the story and the graphics will be much better. ฿: This is a suggestion. Use the idea. The author continues to practice writing and develop his skills, and it will improve on its own. ฿: Recommend if you reach a point where you think that if you are a reader, it will be interesting even if you write slowly. It is not a problem for the reader (if you write faster, it is considered good, but do not forget about the quality). For example, Essen Gacha ฿: The author presents an interesting idea with potential. ฿: When the author reaches a point where he thinks it is appropriate, he recommends that you rewrite this novel, adding details as suggested, and adding other details that the author thinks are interesting. ***Recommend***

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LostRegressor

honestly this is one of the best fanfics I've read ngl 1)The mc is actually smart and not sum stupid mf. His personality is very likable except at the start but he got way more mature later and he isn't sum edgelord. 2) The author actually knows what he's doing. And when I say that I mean he has a good understanding of the characters and their powers and uses each character in ways that makes sense. And If your a normal reader you won't find much plotholes unless your sum smartass who thinks they have smt to prove. 3)The romance is good just wished it had developed abit more "naturally" and the only issues for me is that its harem but whenever starfire is mentioned I just skip over her and focus and raven so it's like she's not even there. But then again that's just down to our own personal preference. 4) The story line follows the Young Justice story line and the author adds the story lines from from the DCAU which adds more depth and possibles. 5) world buildin, this one was way lacklustre ngl. And when I say that I just wished that there were moments when the civilians had presense. for example moments when the mc exposed Amanda waller and PM for their crimes I wish there was a chat that had the civilians opinions on the subject and how they view the actions of the mc and their views about the mc. The author did a moment like that but only once. I just wished there were more moments like those. 6) Finally grammar the grammar in this is actually good. Personally when I read stuff my mind just auto corrects the mistakes. And even when I see the bad grammar I just gloss over it since my grammar is not that good so who am I to judge. So yh I would definitely recommend reading this novel if you are a DC fan. Way better than the rest of the trash out there. And even if you are just a DC and doesn't know much about Fate you don't have to worry about not knowing what's going on since the author and the community post gifs and references to what's happening so even if you know nth about the Fate heros that he summons you will atleast know what they look like and the general overview of their powers.

4mth
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Lady_TeZATalks

Take your deserved review, my guy ! Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!Cheers!!!!!!

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Night_Specter

Review based on reading till CH 60 Good concept, bad writing. I am having a constriction in my chest on reading this book, but I still perserved till chap 60 but no more, sorry author. The writing quality is very sub-par. There is nothing to visualize, nothing to immerse yourself in. The main character has very less than ideal intelligence but that could have been overseen, seeing how author has done character devolopment, but the book really has such dead level of writing that its difficult to read. Not to mention the romance is done badly and very quickly, not in temporal meaning, but rather in the way of showing things.

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DaoistCkdsB0

writing quality is very good with no mistakes until chapter 13. story development is nonsensical at best, downright unbelievable at worst. the story feels like it is the plot of a very bad indie rpg. the dialogue feels like NPCs talking and everything happens to further the plot. there is also a lot of unnecessary and annoying dialogue between characters that further destroys the emotion. for example, the needless talk that between two adversaries during a fight. character design is atrocious. every character is an annoying NPC who has a personality of a pencil. the main character is dumb, to say the least. when I say dumb I don't mean the average Joe dumb. I mean dumb to the point of having a brain injury. updating is regular as far as I can see. world background has left the building. no characters adhere to their canon personalities, which isn't necessarily a bad thing but here, it is executed very badly. the characters become NPCs with no personality at all. at the end, it was never about if the character was overpowered or underpowered. i have liked Saitama as well as guren lagen. but you have got to have some semblance of consistency in your power scaling, power acquisition, demotion etc. with proper reasoning. anyway, it's your book man. you do you.

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Psan
LV 6 Badge

Really good, and finally a novel where mc gets both Raven and Starfire!. The character development needs improvement and add more world background such as descriptions of the surroundings and settings. But overall its really good.

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Akila_Pc

love it.....................................

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ANANTAVIJAYA1961

well the mc is always getting beaten up and fainting . Its's not that good many things are stupid here.

4mth
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AlastorGF

SINCERAMENTE LO QUE ME HIZO VOTAR ASI FUE LA REACCION A AÑOS DE TORTURA DEL MC, SALIO DE AHI CON UNA SONRISA ENTUSIASTA Y MUY PERO MUY FELIZ........ OSEA QUE MIERD AUTOR ENSERIO NO PODES PENSAR UN POCO ? ENSERIO CREES POR UN SEGUNDO QUE 5 AÑOS DE TORTURA NO LO CAMBIARIA ? PRACTICAMENTE TODO ESE CAPITULO DE SIENDO SECUESTRADO Y TORTURADO POR 5 AÑOS FUE COMPLETAMENTE INUTIL Y SIN SENTIDO PORQUE EL MC ESTA IGUAL QUE CUANDO REENCARNO, PRACTICAMENTE ES COMO SI NO HUBIERA PASADO NADA

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CLOX
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I'm not trusting reviews from now on, this story was something I've been a bit hesitant to read cause 1 I'm that invested in DC (hell i only watched teen titans) and some of the movies, and the reviews were low BUT this isn't bad at all, so for believing other's bullshit I deeply apologize.

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The_reader_ofnovel

The writing could be better. The mc literally transforms into the heroic spirit unfortunately it would’ve been nice to know before reading that the MC doesn’t actually get the powers but gets genderbent into the heroic spirit with the powers honestly its a bit disappointing .

5mth
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Rimuru_2412

solo leí 3 capítulos pero con eso puedo decir que será una mierda 💩, porque te preguntaras, simple por que tiene un sistema de Fate, no digo que no me guste fate pero cuando es un sistema con esa temática siempre son una mierda, porque siempre hacen lo mismo...... quisiera explicar más pero se me hace una perdida de tiempo explicar esta mierda, aparte y la actitud del prota me parece una mierda, aunque no a hablado mucho, entonces como puedo decir que es una mierda porque en esos poco diálogos a demostrado una actitud Infantil, impulsiva que no piensa antes de actuar. en resumen una mierda evitence esta perdida de tiempo, a menos que seas alguien con malos gustos.

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glmo11

the story is good but it feels like it can still be improved.................................................................................................

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Kosmostars

Хорошая работа [img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=Smitten][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad][img=sad]

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MOTF_author

i had read few reviews for this book and i honestly don't understand why there are so many negative comments here? this is a different kind of story where the protagonist has a hero like mentality and not op from the start. I believe author have explained all his system abilities very well and making him powerful little by little. Author keep up the good work it's good to see a heroic mc instead of always having a evil one👍

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can_kan

Good................ ..................................................... .................................................................

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FrenzyAren

Raiden character is quite interesting and the story so far is good, i've read others complain about his ability to turn into a woman for example and it's peak ficiton.

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Heroic_Spirit23

feels rushed ngl, like the way it was written is comparable to someone who's in a hurry. you might wanna slow down the pace/ rhythm, cuz it feels weird reading it. im only at the first 10+ chapters so im not judging all the chapters you've written, else i'll just update this if the writing improves in the later chapters.

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Austin_oates

I don't understand fanfic authors that torment their Mc. the books is are interesting, but all the bad stuff that's happened to the Mc is so cliche. the main reason I read it is ilike the prospect of his powers in the dc verse but he's so nerfed that it ruins the enjoyment.And he doesn't take advantage of the wisdom that the heros poses. he's copied 1 spell from madea and that's it so far. had the power for months and didn't learn anything from fighting or magic from the heros it's such a waist.

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Legxndary

A great story idea that is plagued by bad grammar and editing. You have sentences where words are combined together with no spaces, and there is no " " for characters speaking. You need to go back and edit chapters that have this issue. The story is good but has so many errors that it's almost unreadable. Advice from a fellow author: Get Grammarly or an app like it to fix your grammatical errors.

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Ruscyl
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good 👍 funny fate DC not boring. me caveman.

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Faggio

Realistically, no fanfic deserves a five, but I’m giving this story a five to boost it’s rating. This fanfic is better than most dc fanfics.

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