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The story is interesting, this fanfic has some better things than the original story that has ended for now. Does anyone know of any other fanfic that has Mirko (rabbit) as the heroine of the main character, looking and I only found 1 that has Mirko (Rumi Usagiyama).
Your story is good. There are many errors in the text that interfere with reading and the mc is "dark". I think you are misleading many people by not adding the dark tag.
The 180° turnaround of Naruto's personality was way too fast. He was a loner who looked down on these weak-willed heroes. That wouldn't do. It was necessary to protect the public. And these children playing in heroes, not understanding the cost. Then he doesn't 180° round about an attitude and says he'll die for them. It just doesn't make sense. It may be something he would think, but it would not be something he would say. I don't even think it would be something.He would think not out loud.It may be part of his character. But it just rings hollow when he says it out loud so easily.
The character and the backstory are both incredibly good with a complex and dark Naruto. The author shows very well the complexity of the MHA world from a point of view that one can only see from the shadow of society. The point of view of the character may seem extreme but in such a world, it's clearly needed, think about it, if All for One had been killed instead of arrested, it would have been clearly better and safer because anyone can break into the jail but if All for One break out, he's nearly unstoppable (unless even after one hundred years of using powers, he still can't use them that well he shouldn't have lost to All Might...) The only problem I can see in the whole story is the title which clearly isn't suited and doesn't give justice to the jewel it is. Yes, there might be a slight harem part but it's clearly not even one percent of the story
Too many falshbacks, It breaks the pace of the story. It's better to advance the story and create a special arc to tell the past of the prota.
This story is hard for me to recommend. The writing quality is good and good character work. Problem is that it bored me to death. Emo Naruto is cool for 30-40 chapters, then you just stop caring. all the character development is done in flashbacks. There has been no harem nor romance as of 1/23/24
The first 25 chapters are super edgy and super dark and Naruto is very cold but not as a red pass chapter 60 is nice seeing him come out of its shell and being nice to other people. It's not completely cringe in regard to the overpowered MC but you can tell that he's strong.
If you can get over it's super edgy first 25 or so chapters, it's a great read. the author lets Naruto mellow out. He is still cold buthes not too cold you get bored with or is not interested in. You want to see Naruto open up and be healed from his past. it's pretty fast-paced so it's not going to be boring. Currently chapter 80
Honestly, your story is good, especially with the dark version of Naruto. It's just, sorry my friend... the MHA universe is rubbish to me, especially the logic they work in reminds me of the DC Universe.
Author seems dedicated to a slow burn harem that has just started sprouting as of CH.66 which is the current latest, very respectable. The Naruto and MHA universes are slightly AU but in a way that is actually entertaining and not lazy. Anti Hero Naruto is surprisingly interesting. Naruto reminds me of Beru from Ant King in MHA but if he actually followed the canon. I am looking forward to the updates and for the harem to actually form.
interesting concept and decently long chapters, which is easier to find a book with one page chapters, great writing just need to differ between he and her because in the first few chapters I didn't know if you decided to genderbend Iida or not which you didn't, its just the little things here and there, keep up the good work!
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ME GUSTA LA HISTORIA SOLO DIRE ESO EN GENERAL TIENE BUENA TRAMA Y NO ES CLICHE COMO MUCHAS OTRAS QUE EH VISTO EN ESTA PRATAFORMA. SOLO DIGO ESTO A NIVEL PERSONAL
Es una gran historia y muy bien escrita, el transfondo de Naruto se ve interesante aunque me preocupa que por sus acciones sea considerado luego un villano, que sea cazado por sus propios compañeros
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Los 37 caps subidos son buenos, Naruto necesita clones de sombra, donde están los clones de sombra 😵, sigue así autor, solo espero que no lo dejes caer como muchos en esta plataforma
histoire intéressante et bien réalisé, le nombre de sortie est plus que correct et j espère en lire plus, sinon je regrette de ne pas mieux connaitre l histoire des origine exact de naruto via un ou deux long chapitre de souvenir très explicite . merci chère auteur .
me encanta como va la historia la verdad ademas que hay mucho mas por descubrir del pasado del prota ahora espero con ansias lo que sigue solo espero que no pase nada muy malo xD
this is great book to read. i want thank your your hard work in make this story.
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I’ve enjoyed the story so far I’d think it would be interesting if he could awaken a quirk at some point.
Alright, please note that I mean no offence or insult to the author; he/she does show a lot of promise in writing. However, naruto is far too subservient towards the 'good guys' seemingly because they are the 'good guys' despite the hostile attitude and unlawful imprisonment done to him outside of a few 'all bark no bite' incidents, removing all agency from the MC in the story. If you wanted him to be alone to think over his actions, there could have been valid options outside of the government arresting him, such as him sealing himself away; this would have allowed him to bond with all might once he attempted to grab the Mc out of his self-imprisonment while maintaining his agency in this story. I would also recommend making his outward appearance to the world less subservient to the heroes, emo trauma or not; he is a trained Shinobi.
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I like it till now as you have combined the two anime quite well. Only problem I have is you apparantly not understanding the diffrence between boys and girls. One moment you call them him and the other her to the point where I don't know wheter you genderbent them or not, though I am fine with that.
The story so far is good, but a little slow. The au naruto still hasn’t revealed why he is all emo yet, but I’m sure he’ll reveal it sometime in the future (probably to his harem first lol)
The story is interesting, this fanfic has some better things than the original story that has ended for now. Does anyone know of any other fanfic that has Mirko (rabbit) as the heroine of the main character, looking and I only found 1 that has Mirko (Rumi Usagiyama).
Your story is good. There are many errors in the text that interfere with reading and the mc is "dark". I think you are misleading many people by not adding the dark tag.
The 180° turnaround of Naruto's personality was way too fast. He was a loner who looked down on these weak-willed heroes. That wouldn't do. It was necessary to protect the public. And these children playing in heroes, not understanding the cost. Then he doesn't 180° round about an attitude and says he'll die for them. It just doesn't make sense. It may be something he would think, but it would not be something he would say. I don't even think it would be something.He would think not out loud.It may be part of his character. But it just rings hollow when he says it out loud so easily.
The character and the backstory are both incredibly good with a complex and dark Naruto. The author shows very well the complexity of the MHA world from a point of view that one can only see from the shadow of society. The point of view of the character may seem extreme but in such a world, it's clearly needed, think about it, if All for One had been killed instead of arrested, it would have been clearly better and safer because anyone can break into the jail but if All for One break out, he's nearly unstoppable (unless even after one hundred years of using powers, he still can't use them that well he shouldn't have lost to All Might...) The only problem I can see in the whole story is the title which clearly isn't suited and doesn't give justice to the jewel it is. Yes, there might be a slight harem part but it's clearly not even one percent of the story
Too many falshbacks, It breaks the pace of the story. It's better to advance the story and create a special arc to tell the past of the prota.
This story is hard for me to recommend. The writing quality is good and good character work. Problem is that it bored me to death. Emo Naruto is cool for 30-40 chapters, then you just stop caring. all the character development is done in flashbacks. There has been no harem nor romance as of 1/23/24
The first 25 chapters are super edgy and super dark and Naruto is very cold but not as a red pass chapter 60 is nice seeing him come out of its shell and being nice to other people. It's not completely cringe in regard to the overpowered MC but you can tell that he's strong.
If you can get over it's super edgy first 25 or so chapters, it's a great read. the author lets Naruto mellow out. He is still cold buthes not too cold you get bored with or is not interested in. You want to see Naruto open up and be healed from his past. it's pretty fast-paced so it's not going to be boring. Currently chapter 80
Honestly, your story is good, especially with the dark version of Naruto. It's just, sorry my friend... the MHA universe is rubbish to me, especially the logic they work in reminds me of the DC Universe.
Author seems dedicated to a slow burn harem that has just started sprouting as of CH.66 which is the current latest, very respectable. The Naruto and MHA universes are slightly AU but in a way that is actually entertaining and not lazy. Anti Hero Naruto is surprisingly interesting. Naruto reminds me of Beru from Ant King in MHA but if he actually followed the canon. I am looking forward to the updates and for the harem to actually form.
interesting concept and decently long chapters, which is easier to find a book with one page chapters, great writing just need to differ between he and her because in the first few chapters I didn't know if you decided to genderbend Iida or not which you didn't, its just the little things here and there, keep up the good work!
Reveal Spoiler ME GUSTA LA HISTORIA SOLO DIRE ESO EN GENERAL TIENE BUENA TRAMA Y NO ES CLICHE COMO MUCHAS OTRAS QUE EH VISTO EN ESTA PRATAFORMA. SOLO DIGO ESTO A NIVEL PERSONAL
Es una gran historia y muy bien escrita, el transfondo de Naruto se ve interesante aunque me preocupa que por sus acciones sea considerado luego un villano, que sea cazado por sus propios compañeros
Reveal Spoiler Los 37 caps subidos son buenos, Naruto necesita clones de sombra, donde están los clones de sombra 😵, sigue así autor, solo espero que no lo dejes caer como muchos en esta plataforma
histoire intéressante et bien réalisé, le nombre de sortie est plus que correct et j espère en lire plus, sinon je regrette de ne pas mieux connaitre l histoire des origine exact de naruto via un ou deux long chapitre de souvenir très explicite . merci chère auteur .
me encanta como va la historia la verdad ademas que hay mucho mas por descubrir del pasado del prota ahora espero con ansias lo que sigue solo espero que no pase nada muy malo xD
this is great book to read. i want thank your your hard work in make this story.
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I’ve enjoyed the story so far I’d think it would be interesting if he could awaken a quirk at some point.
Alright, please note that I mean no offence or insult to the author; he/she does show a lot of promise in writing. However, naruto is far too subservient towards the 'good guys' seemingly because they are the 'good guys' despite the hostile attitude and unlawful imprisonment done to him outside of a few 'all bark no bite' incidents, removing all agency from the MC in the story. If you wanted him to be alone to think over his actions, there could have been valid options outside of the government arresting him, such as him sealing himself away; this would have allowed him to bond with all might once he attempted to grab the Mc out of his self-imprisonment while maintaining his agency in this story. I would also recommend making his outward appearance to the world less subservient to the heroes, emo trauma or not; he is a trained Shinobi.
Reveal Spoiler I like it till now as you have combined the two anime quite well. Only problem I have is you apparantly not understanding the diffrence between boys and girls. One moment you call them him and the other her to the point where I don't know wheter you genderbent them or not, though I am fine with that.
The story so far is good, but a little slow. The au naruto still hasn’t revealed why he is all emo yet, but I’m sure he’ll reveal it sometime in the future (probably to his harem first lol)