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I read up to chapter 18. And I can't resonate with the characters, especially the MC. This isn't for me either.
read 18 chapters so far and the MC basically just followed the main story of both worlds with little to no interaction or changes made. Which is impossible because of him being in the world. If I wanted to read about the two worlds story I will just add the subtitles on Netflix. what a wasted idea and a waste of time.
Reveal Spoiler
MC is like a thousand years old and still to hasty. and seriously Telling Others he's secret to Peggy And to the others stupid decision to make making his family All known to shield and to other hydra.
Not for me sorry… 10 wishes thats too much i rly hate overpowered protagonists
I love the main character especially after he isn’t just reacting to what others do or say Keep up the good work.
I'ma do you a favor mate, alright? Now don't take offence because all I'm about to say will help you. 1, Dialogue, when a character speaks, it requires two things, 1, it's closed quotations, examples "Hi, you look nice," said a man. The man said, "Hey, you look nice." "Hey you look nice." 2, it's own paragraph, each character speaking owns it's own paragraph, so one chracter can have two soeaking setences in one because thats their paragraph, but another character can't share that paragraph, example, "Hey man, you look good," the man said, "What perfume did you put on." "Thank you, I put on yada yada," Said the woman."Oh that's nice."This is something you should really know because any book and fic contains these examples.Another thing to help you, time period dialect. If you're character is in a modern day setting, they won't call their mother, mother, they'll call her, mom, but if they're in an ancient setting or an older setting like ww2 era, than instead of mom, it would be mother.Now since im going by the top of the dome, thats all I can think of. You can go on reddit and quora for more, but a recommendation is to use grammarly for grammar mistakes and the like. Another recommendation is to read heavily followed fics over on fanfictions of your choice because they're famous for reason, i.e, most definitely for their grammar and their storytelling. Anyway good day to you.
I sincerely hope you continue the story because it's an interesting mix of the two
I read up to chapter 18. And I can't resonate with the characters, especially the MC. This isn't for me either.
read 18 chapters so far and the MC basically just followed the main story of both worlds with little to no interaction or changes made. Which is impossible because of him being in the world. If I wanted to read about the two worlds story I will just add the subtitles on Netflix. what a wasted idea and a waste of time.
Reveal Spoiler MC is like a thousand years old and still to hasty. and seriously Telling Others he's secret to Peggy And to the others stupid decision to make making his family All known to shield and to other hydra.
Not for me sorry… 10 wishes thats too much i rly hate overpowered protagonists
I love the main character especially after he isn’t just reacting to what others do or say Keep up the good work.
I'ma do you a favor mate, alright? Now don't take offence because all I'm about to say will help you. 1, Dialogue, when a character speaks, it requires two things, 1, it's closed quotations, examples "Hi, you look nice," said a man. The man said, "Hey, you look nice." "Hey you look nice." 2, it's own paragraph, each character speaking owns it's own paragraph, so one chracter can have two soeaking setences in one because thats their paragraph, but another character can't share that paragraph, example, "Hey man, you look good," the man said, "What perfume did you put on." "Thank you, I put on yada yada," Said the woman."Oh that's nice."This is something you should really know because any book and fic contains these examples.Another thing to help you, time period dialect. If you're character is in a modern day setting, they won't call their mother, mother, they'll call her, mom, but if they're in an ancient setting or an older setting like ww2 era, than instead of mom, it would be mother.Now since im going by the top of the dome, thats all I can think of. You can go on reddit and quora for more, but a recommendation is to use grammarly for grammar mistakes and the like. Another recommendation is to read heavily followed fics over on fanfictions of your choice because they're famous for reason, i.e, most definitely for their grammar and their storytelling. Anyway good day to you.
I sincerely hope you continue the story because it's an interesting mix of the two