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I tried, I really did, because the story seemed interesting.. But the language really is just painful to read (And I am a guy who regularly reads MTL without any complaints). It honestly feels like it's written by some AI which was given the command: "Make it sound as flowery/fanciful as possible". I could still barely tolerate it if that tone was only used for the narration, but even all the characters speak like that. And this also makes it hard to even put a pin to the personality of the characters. NO ONE in real life speaks like that. And even in the TV show no one spoke like that. Elijah sounds the closest...but he was definitely not so cringey!!
my main gripe would be that it seems like the mc is roleplaying. like, there's literally no way he should feel attachment to his bio dad in this world. there's no attachment by being raised as he wasnt there... and mc is a reincarnated person, why would he care about the genetics of his bio dad in this world... he also seens to have BPD or something equally ill. his mood changes all the time, gaslights bonnie, goes crazy with magic to gain immortality. like.... theres just no consistency in the character.
I might be a little harsh, butt the writing lowers everything, and not because of the usual reasons. The real problem is not the language, but the sentence construction. The author is probably aiming for some kind of flowery prose, but it just doesn't work. Reading this is a decoding exercise. And it came to the point that most of the time, the sentences end up not making sense...
I thought he learned very quickly, but still very interesting story... It was only in chapters 1.16 and the following that I almost stopped reading... the story was like poetry, a little too much. But it went back to normal in the last few chapters. Waiting for the next update
Great work especially with the Orion Character. The way hes willing to delve into deeper parts of magic no matter how dark they may appear to be on top of being a werewolf. What's next becoming an Original Tribrid? that would be cool truly. I look forward to seeing how Orion continues to develop in his journey since he is quite the confident hybrid. :) UPDATE soon please.
man I fell the story is lacksome where interaction with the character (only 1 chapter of interaction)fells dull and acts as a briefing story that it .
Love the book, could be a bit less descriptive and repetitive with the word s bit its a great read. Very amazing. 5 stars all around
The story is really great, it shows that the author took his time to write it. The spelling is well done, the fluidity of development is good. The only bad thing for me (that doesn't mean it's the case for everyone) is the strong language throughout the story, the author doesn't express those feelings like someone normal, he is quite weird, robotic in his way of speaking. Even in the worst of times, he doesn't swear, he's so put together, not like noble brother Mikaelson and that makes him unfit to be with Bex. He misses this little sequence of cruelty that he should have had, the manipulation he should have done with his knowledge of the future for his good and that of his family. He does the manipulative actions but despite the fact that we are in his head we can look at him externally, he remains unknown to us reader and it's weird. Apart from that, everything's fine. I can't wait to read more
Good so far but you're praising on how he feels is getting repetitive you could have gotten further into the plot by now
The content of the story is excellent. The plot is both interesting and very captivating. It makes it impatient to wait for each next chapter to be updated. In addition, the design of the character is complete to say the least.
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Shameles author Review ✍️ !!!! This is my first story and took many days of thinking to come u with it. Hope you all like it!!!
Great writing and story but something that always makes me annoyed is that the protagonists always try to use their abilities as a child of which their bodies can’ t use it effectively and end up hurting themselves for dumb reasons.
Automatic five star review because of the writing quality also the fact that he’s a black supernatural. He acknowledges his world and the people close to him thinks carefully and sets reasonable goals. W author. Also don’t drop we need more black mc’s.
Woah, I had almost lost hope in finding a well written TVD SI but you pulled it off quite well. So far so good. This story is pretty interesting!
It's actually decent, but a few tips to help you, first, as you are doing a SI, the one rule you must follpw, is to never, ever, make your oc tell their secret of being a reincarnator. That's a huge red flag, second don't do Diologue like this. Nathan: something something. Do it like, Nathan said, "Yada yada" or something similair but never like if it were a script instead of a story. And finally, when you write the character, try to not only write them as the age they are when you write them, but also try to write them as hoe they acted in the show. But overall I like it so far.
This is a chore to read. Every single verb and noun used in every sentence has its very own adjective or adverb. Honestly, Shakespeare is easier to read than this.
I tried, I really did, because the story seemed interesting.. But the language really is just painful to read (And I am a guy who regularly reads MTL without any complaints). It honestly feels like it's written by some AI which was given the command: "Make it sound as flowery/fanciful as possible". I could still barely tolerate it if that tone was only used for the narration, but even all the characters speak like that. And this also makes it hard to even put a pin to the personality of the characters. NO ONE in real life speaks like that. And even in the TV show no one spoke like that. Elijah sounds the closest...but he was definitely not so cringey!!
my main gripe would be that it seems like the mc is roleplaying. like, there's literally no way he should feel attachment to his bio dad in this world. there's no attachment by being raised as he wasnt there... and mc is a reincarnated person, why would he care about the genetics of his bio dad in this world... he also seens to have BPD or something equally ill. his mood changes all the time, gaslights bonnie, goes crazy with magic to gain immortality. like.... theres just no consistency in the character.
I might be a little harsh, butt the writing lowers everything, and not because of the usual reasons. The real problem is not the language, but the sentence construction. The author is probably aiming for some kind of flowery prose, but it just doesn't work. Reading this is a decoding exercise. And it came to the point that most of the time, the sentences end up not making sense...
I thought he learned very quickly, but still very interesting story... It was only in chapters 1.16 and the following that I almost stopped reading... the story was like poetry, a little too much. But it went back to normal in the last few chapters. Waiting for the next update
Great work especially with the Orion Character. The way hes willing to delve into deeper parts of magic no matter how dark they may appear to be on top of being a werewolf. What's next becoming an Original Tribrid? that would be cool truly. I look forward to seeing how Orion continues to develop in his journey since he is quite the confident hybrid. :) UPDATE soon please.
man I fell the story is lacksome where interaction with the character (only 1 chapter of interaction)fells dull and acts as a briefing story that it .
Love the book, could be a bit less descriptive and repetitive with the word s bit its a great read. Very amazing. 5 stars all around
The story is really great, it shows that the author took his time to write it. The spelling is well done, the fluidity of development is good. The only bad thing for me (that doesn't mean it's the case for everyone) is the strong language throughout the story, the author doesn't express those feelings like someone normal, he is quite weird, robotic in his way of speaking. Even in the worst of times, he doesn't swear, he's so put together, not like noble brother Mikaelson and that makes him unfit to be with Bex. He misses this little sequence of cruelty that he should have had, the manipulation he should have done with his knowledge of the future for his good and that of his family. He does the manipulative actions but despite the fact that we are in his head we can look at him externally, he remains unknown to us reader and it's weird. Apart from that, everything's fine. I can't wait to read more
Good so far but you're praising on how he feels is getting repetitive you could have gotten further into the plot by now
The content of the story is excellent. The plot is both interesting and very captivating. It makes it impatient to wait for each next chapter to be updated. In addition, the design of the character is complete to say the least.
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Shameles author Review ✍️ !!!! This is my first story and took many days of thinking to come u with it. Hope you all like it!!!
Great writing and story but something that always makes me annoyed is that the protagonists always try to use their abilities as a child of which their bodies can’ t use it effectively and end up hurting themselves for dumb reasons.
Automatic five star review because of the writing quality also the fact that he’s a black supernatural. He acknowledges his world and the people close to him thinks carefully and sets reasonable goals. W author. Also don’t drop we need more black mc’s.
Woah, I had almost lost hope in finding a well written TVD SI but you pulled it off quite well. So far so good. This story is pretty interesting!
It's actually decent, but a few tips to help you, first, as you are doing a SI, the one rule you must follpw, is to never, ever, make your oc tell their secret of being a reincarnator. That's a huge red flag, second don't do Diologue like this. Nathan: something something. Do it like, Nathan said, "Yada yada" or something similair but never like if it were a script instead of a story. And finally, when you write the character, try to not only write them as the age they are when you write them, but also try to write them as hoe they acted in the show. But overall I like it so far.
This is a chore to read. Every single verb and noun used in every sentence has its very own adjective or adverb. Honestly, Shakespeare is easier to read than this.