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Hey! This is my first novel. Because English is not my native language, I am aware that I still have many shortcomings in grammar, writing techniques, and other areas. I hope you guys still able to enjoy it! Give me your feedback and comment on the shortcomings of my novel. Thank you so much!
at the beginning of the first 20 chapters the story was a bit boring, the story started to get interesting at the 30th chapter, I think this novel has a good future.
I am truly interested in this story, its interesting but something feels a bit off and i some parts feel unnecessary. I don't know why you stopped but i do hope you continue and good luck on it.
This Book has a lot of great Characters and I really have to commend the author for the good work, Seriously This is one of the greatest novels I ever read!
I've read 36 free chapters , the story is quite original, I haven't seen any stories with a similar plot yet , I'm really waiting for the next chapters to appear , the story has a chance to become very popular I wish good luck to the author, besides the webnovel , is it possible to read the story somewhere else ?
This is a really good and decent novel within this app. I don't know why it isn't popular. Those novels listed at the top, most of them are just trash only few are acceptable enough. I really pity this novel for not reaching the top or at least one of the top books. This is a gem yet only few discovered it... I just hope people will know and read this novel and the author to be successful. That's all...
This story really has potential... Though there might be errors on some chapters(e.g misspell, few grammatical error, and some unneeded stuff), it is still a wonderful one. I'm not really good at describing so I'll just let the other readers describe it on thier own... But all I can is that KEEP UP THE GOOD WORKššš
I really liked it not much to talk about the story was good and way better than how I would handle it...................................................
First experience of trying something different. But I think this is not what my mind prefer. I am a person who day dreams about romantic scenes. Such serious thinga are not for me. But that doesn't mean I dislise this. Actually I am kinda excited because I feel likw this kind of stories are good.So thanks to someone, I am gonn get interested in another genre. Anyways, I wish you with the competiton. I am keep voting you becsause I love this. Keep going author..
It has a good plot and storyline. This is definitely not a waste of time for the author. Though there's room for improvement Good work
This book is great, i enjoyed reading it. the narration is on point and you could feel the characters emotions. ill added to collectio[img=recommend][img=recommend]
I interested to the storyline you want to make, I want to know more about the mc. please update more frquently
A beautiful first attempt. Good work author. Thereās so much to look forward to here. Interesting plot and interesting characters to read about. A fantasy world to keep up with. From Review swap.
The story looks good, but there are a lot of repeating words and terms. You might want to look for synonyms or try using different subjects for repeats. As for the world-building and character-building, I got lost in it, due to it being complicated and a 'data-dump' for lack of a better word. Might want to spread out the info and better explain it. But overall good :)
Your book title is great, the plot is very strong, the Characters are well-organised, and your writing style is unique. waiting for the next chapters.
I had to read it a lot of times to try and understand the world, so I'd say try to improve on it. But the quality of the writing is very good, which at least gives a better understanding of the book.
I love the storyline of this novel and how you to describe the world is quite good for me, but you must improve your writing technique and grammar overall, i like it!
The novel concept seem solid so far and I hope the author continues to develop the story. I've always been a fan of big world and world building, so I wish the author the best of luck!
Your story is nice. The Building of it is nice. I hope the author can continue his work more and make his dream successful. I again say, the story is good. May the stars align for him.
The writing is nice, although there is room for development, such as with certain repeated words that could be replaced with alternatives, etc. Overall, though, I enjoyed reading it, and I would especially recommend this to readers who prefer thisĀ kind of novel.
A pretty interesting read overall, the writing is quite awesome though everyone has space to improve. The plot and storyline is amazing to be honest so great job Author ^.^! [img=recommend][img=update]
The plot is astonishing, and the characters and the situations have been written very well, This book is full of surprises! Good work author! Best of luck
The concept is a unique one and from the title my guess is that MC will be a puppeteer/necromancer? This alone has gotten me hooked and from how far I've read the author writing is great. Am looking to read on this story as it's quite interesting.
A promising plot and development. I'd say the few things are info overload. Sometimes I find my self getting a little lost with the descriptions of things because there's just so much technical information all at once. Grammar could be improved but I think the flow would be better as well once the info overload is sorted. Very promising, keep improving [img=recommend]
This is the first novel of this genre that I have ever read, and this actually made me interested in the storyline of this novel. Overall, I think this novel is good, but your writing technique should be improved. Keep it up! Good Luck![img=recommend]
Uww never read this kind of story before... Its kinda new to me and that's why l enjoyed reading it... Also l found the world background really cool... Author has really worked hard to build such a nice and unique story...All the best and keep writting...
nice plot and intriguing characters, over the story has great story and can't wait for more
The story has great potential, and I feel the author's hard work in writing this novel, the writing is fine, sure there's space for improvement like certain repeated words, you may use synonyms for that so on and so forth, overall I enjoyed reading I recommended this mostly to those who enjoy creatures thriller type of novel.
Hey! This is my first novel. Because English is not my native language, I am aware that I still have many shortcomings in grammar, writing techniques, and other areas. I hope you guys still able to enjoy it! Give me your feedback and comment on the shortcomings of my novel. Thank you so much!
at the beginning of the first 20 chapters the story was a bit boring, the story started to get interesting at the 30th chapter, I think this novel has a good future.
I am truly interested in this story, its interesting but something feels a bit off and i some parts feel unnecessary. I don't know why you stopped but i do hope you continue and good luck on it.
This Book has a lot of great Characters and I really have to commend the author for the good work, Seriously This is one of the greatest novels I ever read!
I've read 36 free chapters , the story is quite original, I haven't seen any stories with a similar plot yet , I'm really waiting for the next chapters to appear , the story has a chance to become very popular I wish good luck to the author, besides the webnovel , is it possible to read the story somewhere else ?
This is a really good and decent novel within this app. I don't know why it isn't popular. Those novels listed at the top, most of them are just trash only few are acceptable enough. I really pity this novel for not reaching the top or at least one of the top books. This is a gem yet only few discovered it... I just hope people will know and read this novel and the author to be successful. That's all...
This story really has potential... Though there might be errors on some chapters(e.g misspell, few grammatical error, and some unneeded stuff), it is still a wonderful one. I'm not really good at describing so I'll just let the other readers describe it on thier own... But all I can is that KEEP UP THE GOOD WORKššš
I really liked it not much to talk about the story was good and way better than how I would handle it...................................................
First experience of trying something different. But I think this is not what my mind prefer. I am a person who day dreams about romantic scenes. Such serious thinga are not for me. But that doesn't mean I dislise this. Actually I am kinda excited because I feel likw this kind of stories are good.So thanks to someone, I am gonn get interested in another genre. Anyways, I wish you with the competiton. I am keep voting you becsause I love this. Keep going author..
It has a good plot and storyline. This is definitely not a waste of time for the author. Though there's room for improvement Good work
This book is great, i enjoyed reading it. the narration is on point and you could feel the characters emotions. ill added to collectio[img=recommend][img=recommend]
I interested to the storyline you want to make, I want to know more about the mc. please update more frquently
A beautiful first attempt. Good work author. Thereās so much to look forward to here. Interesting plot and interesting characters to read about. A fantasy world to keep up with. From Review swap.
The story looks good, but there are a lot of repeating words and terms. You might want to look for synonyms or try using different subjects for repeats. As for the world-building and character-building, I got lost in it, due to it being complicated and a 'data-dump' for lack of a better word. Might want to spread out the info and better explain it. But overall good :)
Your book title is great, the plot is very strong, the Characters are well-organised, and your writing style is unique. waiting for the next chapters.
I had to read it a lot of times to try and understand the world, so I'd say try to improve on it. But the quality of the writing is very good, which at least gives a better understanding of the book.
I love the storyline of this novel and how you to describe the world is quite good for me, but you must improve your writing technique and grammar overall, i like it!
The novel concept seem solid so far and I hope the author continues to develop the story. I've always been a fan of big world and world building, so I wish the author the best of luck!
Your story is nice. The Building of it is nice. I hope the author can continue his work more and make his dream successful. I again say, the story is good. May the stars align for him.
The writing is nice, although there is room for development, such as with certain repeated words that could be replaced with alternatives, etc. Overall, though, I enjoyed reading it, and I would especially recommend this to readers who prefer thisĀ kind of novel.
A pretty interesting read overall, the writing is quite awesome though everyone has space to improve. The plot and storyline is amazing to be honest so great job Author ^.^! [img=recommend][img=update]
The plot is astonishing, and the characters and the situations have been written very well, This book is full of surprises! Good work author! Best of luck
The concept is a unique one and from the title my guess is that MC will be a puppeteer/necromancer? This alone has gotten me hooked and from how far I've read the author writing is great. Am looking to read on this story as it's quite interesting.
A promising plot and development. I'd say the few things are info overload. Sometimes I find my self getting a little lost with the descriptions of things because there's just so much technical information all at once. Grammar could be improved but I think the flow would be better as well once the info overload is sorted. Very promising, keep improving [img=recommend]
This is the first novel of this genre that I have ever read, and this actually made me interested in the storyline of this novel. Overall, I think this novel is good, but your writing technique should be improved. Keep it up! Good Luck![img=recommend]
Uww never read this kind of story before... Its kinda new to me and that's why l enjoyed reading it... Also l found the world background really cool... Author has really worked hard to build such a nice and unique story...All the best and keep writting...
nice plot and intriguing characters, over the story has great story and can't wait for more
The story has great potential, and I feel the author's hard work in writing this novel, the writing is fine, sure there's space for improvement like certain repeated words, you may use synonyms for that so on and so forth, overall I enjoyed reading I recommended this mostly to those who enjoy creatures thriller type of novel.