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Now that we won bronze in wpc harem contest, I again writing this comment. Well there may be some little grammatical errors here and there as I rarely proofread and edit. But, majority of it is a smooth read. Since its my first book that I am writing, I can only say the quality will keep getting better and better with future chapters😊😊
This story had so much potential there were many things that were yet to shown the author had yet to introduce different kinds of races powerful empires a good plot focused on academy life demon queens powerful goddess Dragoness a cultivation world an extremely advanced futuristic empire the plot about earth Gates and many more if author you ever decided to continue this story again I have given some plots you could use and to the readers untill he changes the ending do not read it. and a Note to author: [it's better to leave the story unfinished then to go oh it was just a dream way. This will make readers trust on you go away and i am sure no author wants that after who are they writing stories for us reader] I wrote all this just to vent my frustrations don't mind me.
Have you ever read a manhwa with a rush ending? This novel kinda shared the same prejudice but worse. Especially when MC still in the middle of the fight scene died and it was revealed that all his people that he had relations with were all dreams and then "The End" I'm not even joking. That's the ending. Not to mention there were several chapters near the ending that haven't been edited yet that hurt your eyes. Even when the author promised that he would edit those chapters, he still doesn't up until now.
loved the character and was excited to see where this was going, then abrupt ending where it was a dream and the story was thrown out the window. disappointing
A good novel for new novel reader's. But to old reader's like me, let's just say not that good. The way the MC make the heroines fall in love is to "..." how should I put into words? Just go read yourself you will understand. Everyone has their own taste. So I won't say anything more.
So much wasted potential, the first hundred chapters were great. If he just kept doing the same stuff, it would’ve been great, but in the last chapter, he suddenly decided it’s all a dream the end. He didn’t even bother to tie up loose ends. He basically stopped in the middle of the story and said it’s all a dream. I can’t describe how disappointed I am.
I waited and waited but I was just done at chapter 10. This is just forced bro, I m out. I should have just studied🤷
this was one of the best novels on the app, my only complaint is how it ended 😔
Wasted potential.The first arc was a cliché but entertaining story by a clearly inexperienced, albeit promising up-and-coming author.It followed the tried and true trope of a reincarnator having to steal a son of luck protagonist's fate, with a fairly standard cast of characters (and yes, there are yanderes).The end of the first arc was where the story truly started to come into its own and showed flashes of brilliance, very successfullly expanding the world and upping the stakes, starting to build up a confrontation with the antagonist towards the end of the story. Unfortunately, this webnovel never managed to get there, suddenly entering a hiatus that lasted for months. By the time the novel came back, it rushed into a forced ending, disregarding all events in the story up to that point and breaking one of the most basic taboos in storytelling (it was all a dream...)Also worth noting that towards the end of the story the author remembered he was homophobic and decided to never forget again by reminding the reader every other chapter, spouting some of the most atrocious takes I've read, particularly in the sidestory
i thought this story would go beyond 500 chapters the early ending was a shock.
in my opinion this is amazing but dear author why the last update is 5 months ago is this dropped??????
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The story is great and I used to eagerly wait for new chapters but it has been quite long since it has updated. Can anyone tell when it will get updated?
It was a very good novel and i really liked it very much. The plot, mc, heroines were well developed. Please continue to update the novel...
The story is pretty good. Though, the girl fallen way too easily, but I'm not complaining. The mc is a true villain, he will use both good and bad method to steal the girl, one thing that make this mc great is that, he doesn't complain about the protag false, he use manipulation to make the girl think of it themselves for the most part, and he only talk bad about the protag in a situation that the heroine are mentally unstable, which help him, even if what he said is not really what he really think. MC is not a hypocrite, and understand what kind of person he is, than why he doesn't complain about the protag much, as he is acting in a similar way. 1 complain though, is the second world, the mc steal an identity, used it to steal a childhood friend, but halfway through, the author scrape that trope without explaination, but the plot they written is good, so I bare with it. Just treat the childhood friend trope to not exist. second complain, is the protag act like a villain, which help the mc case here, but it feel too much like an easy mode. It make reader feel no guilt for stealing the heroine from the jerk protag.
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It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, no matter if the story is good or bad, no matter if it's about something that i know or not, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
i liked +5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5
i was waiting and hoarding chaps so that when you start uploding more chaps i could breeze my way and get chaps ever Day and i was waiting for a long time... i guess its time
Esto es una obra maestra, por fin encontré la maldad que tanto ansiaba ver, sigue y déjanos ver mas de esta gloriosa novela.
It is unexpectedly a good novel and the male lead is not Chinese-Korean-Japanese. The quality of the writing is good, the development of the story is entertaining to read.
This is an interesting story to read(since I've only read a few novels like this). The writing quality is good so far there is nothing to complain about and seems to be improving(how I see it) as the story progresses. For story development I won't lie it was a bit boring in the beginning. It did become interesting in the latter half of the story though but so far so good. The character design is good I like how the 2nd rate mcs of the novel don't follow the usual trope which was surprising and how all the characters developed whether true the 'eyes' being opened or by see how the 2nd rate mcs treats those around them a good twist. World building is like other novels with your higher and lower worlds but it isn't to big of a problem as I see it but others might think otherwise. I wouldn't know about the updating schedule since most chapters were out when I started reading but it doesn't seem to be an issue as I've seen so far.
Author I really love this pls don't drop this pls.And can u make the story progress a little faster
A little weird but hey it's still good nonetheless........................................................................................................................
an interesting start to a very vivid and colorful world. the details are so strong it makes me feel like I am there with the party of heros. I have only read seven chapters but I can truly tell this author has great talent. keep up the good work.
The overall plot off the novel is good but the updating parts is very bad since the wpc is over, the daily update is over. Which makes it very bad for the novel because it is a good novel but the author in doing the update is lackluster.
A great novel, whit a great Development this is nice piece of art. Just the development of the love of aushima an elandor the in the travel is very sudden, i recommend a rewrite whit a longer chapters, in that chapters elandor and aushima need to develop the relationship whit a distant start, elandor doing a slow brainwashing and the slow approximation between them, that it will be more realistic and better than the actual short. Ps: in need the link of the portrait. Ps 2.0: sorry for the bad English I'm an Argentinian :)
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It's a good novel, it has short chapters but has a fast update rate, just tries it maybe you would like it, Jejdjajfjekdkeosofjeosofdoti
Now that we won bronze in wpc harem contest, I again writing this comment. Well there may be some little grammatical errors here and there as I rarely proofread and edit. But, majority of it is a smooth read. Since its my first book that I am writing, I can only say the quality will keep getting better and better with future chapters😊😊
This story had so much potential there were many things that were yet to shown the author had yet to introduce different kinds of races powerful empires a good plot focused on academy life demon queens powerful goddess Dragoness a cultivation world an extremely advanced futuristic empire the plot about earth Gates and many more if author you ever decided to continue this story again I have given some plots you could use and to the readers untill he changes the ending do not read it. and a Note to author: [it's better to leave the story unfinished then to go oh it was just a dream way. This will make readers trust on you go away and i am sure no author wants that after who are they writing stories for us reader] I wrote all this just to vent my frustrations don't mind me.
Have you ever read a manhwa with a rush ending? This novel kinda shared the same prejudice but worse. Especially when MC still in the middle of the fight scene died and it was revealed that all his people that he had relations with were all dreams and then "The End" I'm not even joking. That's the ending. Not to mention there were several chapters near the ending that haven't been edited yet that hurt your eyes. Even when the author promised that he would edit those chapters, he still doesn't up until now.
loved the character and was excited to see where this was going, then abrupt ending where it was a dream and the story was thrown out the window. disappointing
A good novel for new novel reader's. But to old reader's like me, let's just say not that good. The way the MC make the heroines fall in love is to "..." how should I put into words? Just go read yourself you will understand. Everyone has their own taste. So I won't say anything more.
So much wasted potential, the first hundred chapters were great. If he just kept doing the same stuff, it would’ve been great, but in the last chapter, he suddenly decided it’s all a dream the end. He didn’t even bother to tie up loose ends. He basically stopped in the middle of the story and said it’s all a dream. I can’t describe how disappointed I am.
I waited and waited but I was just done at chapter 10. This is just forced bro, I m out. I should have just studied🤷
this was one of the best novels on the app, my only complaint is how it ended 😔
Wasted potential.The first arc was a cliché but entertaining story by a clearly inexperienced, albeit promising up-and-coming author.It followed the tried and true trope of a reincarnator having to steal a son of luck protagonist's fate, with a fairly standard cast of characters (and yes, there are yanderes).The end of the first arc was where the story truly started to come into its own and showed flashes of brilliance, very successfullly expanding the world and upping the stakes, starting to build up a confrontation with the antagonist towards the end of the story. Unfortunately, this webnovel never managed to get there, suddenly entering a hiatus that lasted for months. By the time the novel came back, it rushed into a forced ending, disregarding all events in the story up to that point and breaking one of the most basic taboos in storytelling (it was all a dream...)Also worth noting that towards the end of the story the author remembered he was homophobic and decided to never forget again by reminding the reader every other chapter, spouting some of the most atrocious takes I've read, particularly in the sidestory
i thought this story would go beyond 500 chapters the early ending was a shock.
in my opinion this is amazing but dear author why the last update is 5 months ago is this dropped??????
Reveal Spoiler The story is great and I used to eagerly wait for new chapters but it has been quite long since it has updated. Can anyone tell when it will get updated?
It was a very good novel and i really liked it very much. The plot, mc, heroines were well developed. Please continue to update the novel...
The story is pretty good. Though, the girl fallen way too easily, but I'm not complaining. The mc is a true villain, he will use both good and bad method to steal the girl, one thing that make this mc great is that, he doesn't complain about the protag false, he use manipulation to make the girl think of it themselves for the most part, and he only talk bad about the protag in a situation that the heroine are mentally unstable, which help him, even if what he said is not really what he really think. MC is not a hypocrite, and understand what kind of person he is, than why he doesn't complain about the protag much, as he is acting in a similar way. 1 complain though, is the second world, the mc steal an identity, used it to steal a childhood friend, but halfway through, the author scrape that trope without explaination, but the plot they written is good, so I bare with it. Just treat the childhood friend trope to not exist. second complain, is the protag act like a villain, which help the mc case here, but it feel too much like an easy mode. It make reader feel no guilt for stealing the heroine from the jerk protag.
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It's a hobby of mine to give other author story a 5 star rating, no matter if the story is good or bad, no matter if it's about something that i know or not, since as an author myself, i know how much joy does a good review brought to the writer. Also, as far as the story goes, it is good, but it's not my cup of tea.
i liked +5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5+5
i was waiting and hoarding chaps so that when you start uploding more chaps i could breeze my way and get chaps ever Day and i was waiting for a long time... i guess its time
Esto es una obra maestra, por fin encontré la maldad que tanto ansiaba ver, sigue y déjanos ver mas de esta gloriosa novela.
It is unexpectedly a good novel and the male lead is not Chinese-Korean-Japanese. The quality of the writing is good, the development of the story is entertaining to read.
This is an interesting story to read(since I've only read a few novels like this). The writing quality is good so far there is nothing to complain about and seems to be improving(how I see it) as the story progresses. For story development I won't lie it was a bit boring in the beginning. It did become interesting in the latter half of the story though but so far so good. The character design is good I like how the 2nd rate mcs of the novel don't follow the usual trope which was surprising and how all the characters developed whether true the 'eyes' being opened or by see how the 2nd rate mcs treats those around them a good twist. World building is like other novels with your higher and lower worlds but it isn't to big of a problem as I see it but others might think otherwise. I wouldn't know about the updating schedule since most chapters were out when I started reading but it doesn't seem to be an issue as I've seen so far.
Author I really love this pls don't drop this pls.And can u make the story progress a little faster
A little weird but hey it's still good nonetheless........................................................................................................................
an interesting start to a very vivid and colorful world. the details are so strong it makes me feel like I am there with the party of heros. I have only read seven chapters but I can truly tell this author has great talent. keep up the good work.
The overall plot off the novel is good but the updating parts is very bad since the wpc is over, the daily update is over. Which makes it very bad for the novel because it is a good novel but the author in doing the update is lackluster.
A great novel, whit a great Development this is nice piece of art. Just the development of the love of aushima an elandor the in the travel is very sudden, i recommend a rewrite whit a longer chapters, in that chapters elandor and aushima need to develop the relationship whit a distant start, elandor doing a slow brainwashing and the slow approximation between them, that it will be more realistic and better than the actual short. Ps: in need the link of the portrait. Ps 2.0: sorry for the bad English I'm an Argentinian :)
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It's a good novel, it has short chapters but has a fast update rate, just tries it maybe you would like it, Jejdjajfjekdkeosofjeosofdoti