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one of the most boring fanfics with really bad writing. I've lost hope of reading this
I don't know who copied who , the first 10 or so chapters I have read are exactly the same as a chinese fanfiction novel I have read a few days ago π
Fillers, fillers and fillers! The way the fanfic is written is like one of those Chinese mtls where the authors try to fill the word count. The plot is whimsical and lackadaisical, with the author writing everything to their convenient way. Otherwise, there are no glaring flaws and negatives. In fact, I can even say that the fanfic is 'good' but the author clearly needs to think things through and try to make some sense.
what can I say about this ff, it sucks, I tried to read up to 41 chapters despite being disgusted by this ff and the main character almost threw up from this ff
Muy buena la historia pero estoy viendo que lo vas dejar abandonado como las demΓ‘s historia Haci termina danmachi sigue el capΓtulo no la dejes abandonada
This is just a general question... why did you put a system into a danmachi world when there is one already ?
The story itself is decent and the main character isnβt completely cringey like most. The main issue is the dialogue between characters because it quite literally does not make sense half the time. I would recommend giving this book a try and seeing if you can make sense of the dialogue and completely random moments between the characters because if you can youβll probably enjoy it.
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i see genshin i go read ..........,.............................................................................................................
you haven't thought about making the character, you don't know how to give him a hero ability like bell cranel as if it were an ability of the king of heroes and also that as he grows up he becomes the light of the loky family that hero who inspires the strongest to be stronger and it has that aura that one can follow that it is the presentation of a hero of the hero era it would be good if danmachi oratory and the manga looks better than the anime even though the anime already surpassed the manga and also that ais is in the harem mc
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Esta historia es de lo mejor, entretiene demasiado y el entretenimiento es constante, cosa que no se ve mucho en las demΓ‘s historias de Webnovel. Espero que la historia siga asΓ de bien, autor, lo felicito por haber escrito una novela tan increΓble.
So I am giving this a 4.8 review, but really I want to give it 5 but there is still some problem in the writing quality, but that can be improved and it's not like it is not understandable. So this is a fanfic of Danmachi as the title says and I can say that this is one of my favorite fanfic of danmachi, and what I like about this fanfic is first the Mc joined the Loki Familia. Because you see other fanfic even though they reincarnated and know about the story and know that loki familia is a good familia they still choose the lower level familia and because of that the mc face problem. But it's not like I don't like that it's just you see if I was the Mc and I know the story I will join where I will have a good background and since I know loki familia is a friendly familia to it's member I will definitely join it, also back to where the other fanfic Mc chose the weak familia you can expect that Apolo familia will have a conflict with the mc because of Apolo taking A liking to Mc. So back to the review the story development I think it was pretty good I don't have a problem to it, and it also has some comedy on it that brings you laugh. In character design I also don't have a problem with the Mc but I will still wait for his further Character Development. In the world background even though I gave this five star it is because this is a fanfic and I think you got it right and cool, but I also expect you to add some mystery to it, I think that will hook more readers like is the mc randomly reincarnated or there is something happening that will make me have shivers after realising it. You see I read many good novels but only a few give this shiver after realising the plot so I am expecting something from you Author. Really good luck and wish you to continue this.
I really like this fanfiction it's interesting and fun to read sadly webnovel has forced us readers/author alike out of the site because of the force app download, I hope I see more when webnovel is fixed or you have moved out on a new platform.
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keep up the good work author love the novel, will you update your fanfic novel of geshin impact? please update more [img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]
This is a copy from a chinnense fanfic named ζ··θΏΉε¨ε°ιδΈηηειε€δΉ‘δΊΊ who had 620 chapter Is the same history he just change the name of mc the other are the same
Review as of Chapter 61! I am very invested with this Fanfic and its slow pace is exactly what i Like. It isnt snail pace so i can still enjoy it and i am gonna be honest i Love how the author focuses on the Characters Relations more than anything. Maybe the romantic aspects are also pulling me in but i have to say the Harem is Just the best so far! P.S It is Just starting but its already amazing how lucky Our MC is. Also Thanks for the hard Work Author i Love the Daily or bydaily Updates the lenght of the chapters is also Nice perfect for a read on the Bus or train.
interesting skills and effects, the main character's magic has some interesting effects as well, even some unsaid ones I noticed like his connection with nature, and by extension elfs, caused by Gaia All in all, many interesting points that I'll love to see how they'll develop
La historia es muy buena y todo sigue asΓ pero deberΓa agregar mΓ‘s lectura a cada capΓtulo para asΓ podamos ver mejor y sobre todo pensar que piensa los demΓ‘s de el su actuaciΓ³n etc como lo ven como un hΓ©roe
story progress is too slow for my liking and the system is kind of useless at least up to the chapter i read.the chapters are boring for me to read because i don't like slow development so you would probably enjoy the story if you like slow pace stories.
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The MC has both Earth and Star magic. He then spent no time studying these abilities. These abilities have almost no limits. The MC sees his Earth and Star abilities and goes " I guess I will copy this character and this character for these magics." That is the extent of him learning how to use his magic. If no effort is used in studying or using the magic then why not make yourself absorb stars and become an instant god or give yourself a giant c***. Why limit yourself if you have no limits. My complaint is not that he doesn't do these things instead it is how little effort it took to get his results.
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beautifully written fanfic, except for one thing: water. there's too much of it. it feels like I'm reading a Chinese novel about cultivation, which describes every day of his being in meditation for 100 years. too much unnecessary and not timely inserted information. information about the world itself stretched over sooooooooo many chapters. so there isn't much that's really new in this piece. read 20 chapters. I see no point in reading further. Google translate.
I didn't have much hope in it still gave it a try cause I enjoy Danmchi fics. But, it's a trash fic. Utter trash. Also, atm of me writing it's been 1yr since it's last updated, so I don't see any point of wasting time on this.
one of the most boring fanfics with really bad writing. I've lost hope of reading this
I don't know who copied who , the first 10 or so chapters I have read are exactly the same as a chinese fanfiction novel I have read a few days ago π
Fillers, fillers and fillers! The way the fanfic is written is like one of those Chinese mtls where the authors try to fill the word count. The plot is whimsical and lackadaisical, with the author writing everything to their convenient way. Otherwise, there are no glaring flaws and negatives. In fact, I can even say that the fanfic is 'good' but the author clearly needs to think things through and try to make some sense.
what can I say about this ff, it sucks, I tried to read up to 41 chapters despite being disgusted by this ff and the main character almost threw up from this ff
Muy buena la historia pero estoy viendo que lo vas dejar abandonado como las demΓ‘s historia Haci termina danmachi sigue el capΓtulo no la dejes abandonada
This is just a general question... why did you put a system into a danmachi world when there is one already ?
The story itself is decent and the main character isnβt completely cringey like most. The main issue is the dialogue between characters because it quite literally does not make sense half the time. I would recommend giving this book a try and seeing if you can make sense of the dialogue and completely random moments between the characters because if you can youβll probably enjoy it.
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i see genshin i go read ..........,.............................................................................................................
you haven't thought about making the character, you don't know how to give him a hero ability like bell cranel as if it were an ability of the king of heroes and also that as he grows up he becomes the light of the loky family that hero who inspires the strongest to be stronger and it has that aura that one can follow that it is the presentation of a hero of the hero era it would be good if danmachi oratory and the manga looks better than the anime even though the anime already surpassed the manga and also that ais is in the harem mc
(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€(β ββ β’β α΄β β’β ββ )β β€
Esta historia es de lo mejor, entretiene demasiado y el entretenimiento es constante, cosa que no se ve mucho en las demΓ‘s historias de Webnovel. Espero que la historia siga asΓ de bien, autor, lo felicito por haber escrito una novela tan increΓble.
So I am giving this a 4.8 review, but really I want to give it 5 but there is still some problem in the writing quality, but that can be improved and it's not like it is not understandable. So this is a fanfic of Danmachi as the title says and I can say that this is one of my favorite fanfic of danmachi, and what I like about this fanfic is first the Mc joined the Loki Familia. Because you see other fanfic even though they reincarnated and know about the story and know that loki familia is a good familia they still choose the lower level familia and because of that the mc face problem. But it's not like I don't like that it's just you see if I was the Mc and I know the story I will join where I will have a good background and since I know loki familia is a friendly familia to it's member I will definitely join it, also back to where the other fanfic Mc chose the weak familia you can expect that Apolo familia will have a conflict with the mc because of Apolo taking A liking to Mc. So back to the review the story development I think it was pretty good I don't have a problem to it, and it also has some comedy on it that brings you laugh. In character design I also don't have a problem with the Mc but I will still wait for his further Character Development. In the world background even though I gave this five star it is because this is a fanfic and I think you got it right and cool, but I also expect you to add some mystery to it, I think that will hook more readers like is the mc randomly reincarnated or there is something happening that will make me have shivers after realising it. You see I read many good novels but only a few give this shiver after realising the plot so I am expecting something from you Author. Really good luck and wish you to continue this.
I really like this fanfiction it's interesting and fun to read sadly webnovel has forced us readers/author alike out of the site because of the force app download, I hope I see more when webnovel is fixed or you have moved out on a new platform.
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keep up the good work author love the novel, will you update your fanfic novel of geshin impact? please update more [img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]
This is a copy from a chinnense fanfic named ζ··θΏΉε¨ε°ιδΈηηειε€δΉ‘δΊΊ who had 620 chapter Is the same history he just change the name of mc the other are the same
Review as of Chapter 61! I am very invested with this Fanfic and its slow pace is exactly what i Like. It isnt snail pace so i can still enjoy it and i am gonna be honest i Love how the author focuses on the Characters Relations more than anything. Maybe the romantic aspects are also pulling me in but i have to say the Harem is Just the best so far! P.S It is Just starting but its already amazing how lucky Our MC is. Also Thanks for the hard Work Author i Love the Daily or bydaily Updates the lenght of the chapters is also Nice perfect for a read on the Bus or train.
interesting skills and effects, the main character's magic has some interesting effects as well, even some unsaid ones I noticed like his connection with nature, and by extension elfs, caused by Gaia All in all, many interesting points that I'll love to see how they'll develop
La historia es muy buena y todo sigue asΓ pero deberΓa agregar mΓ‘s lectura a cada capΓtulo para asΓ podamos ver mejor y sobre todo pensar que piensa los demΓ‘s de el su actuaciΓ³n etc como lo ven como un hΓ©roe
story progress is too slow for my liking and the system is kind of useless at least up to the chapter i read.the chapters are boring for me to read because i don't like slow development so you would probably enjoy the story if you like slow pace stories.
Reveal Spoiler The MC has both Earth and Star magic. He then spent no time studying these abilities. These abilities have almost no limits. The MC sees his Earth and Star abilities and goes " I guess I will copy this character and this character for these magics." That is the extent of him learning how to use his magic. If no effort is used in studying or using the magic then why not make yourself absorb stars and become an instant god or give yourself a giant c***. Why limit yourself if you have no limits. My complaint is not that he doesn't do these things instead it is how little effort it took to get his results.
Reveal Spoiler ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
beautifully written fanfic, except for one thing: water. there's too much of it. it feels like I'm reading a Chinese novel about cultivation, which describes every day of his being in meditation for 100 years. too much unnecessary and not timely inserted information. information about the world itself stretched over sooooooooo many chapters. so there isn't much that's really new in this piece. read 20 chapters. I see no point in reading further. Google translate.
I didn't have much hope in it still gave it a try cause I enjoy Danmchi fics. But, it's a trash fic. Utter trash. Also, atm of me writing it's been 1yr since it's last updated, so I don't see any point of wasting time on this.