A new Rasa in Naruto world

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michael_copeland

great story so far! I love how you are diving in to his kekkai genkai. maybe he could learn some fuinjutsu as well, it goes incredibly well with magnet release. there are things like curse seals you could apply to weapons to keep enemy's bleeding or paralysing them, storage seals for more metal or chakra sealing for imprisoning shinobi after surrounding them with metal like iron sand or gold dust.

LV 11

dampsterHam

Don't listen to the bad reviews, if you could call them reviews in the first place, and read the ff for your discretion. Writing Quality: There are some mistakes here and there, but still readable. Story Development: Still only on chapter 8 so not a lot has happened yet, but it's going well, at least in my opinion. Character Design: The mc has common sense. Updating Stability: A bit funky, wish it'd be daily but I'm just a free reader. World Background: C'mon, it's Naruto.

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vagavegta368

I loved this fanfic, since it takes place as rasa and in suna, instead of always in konoha and some uchiha .......................................................................

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C0DA

>wow, what an interesting premise never tried before >'harem' Bye. (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes) (keystrokes)

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Thebestofall

I like the way the story goes. I just hope there will be several action scenes. It is most entertaining to have a good action scene in Naruto especially at the time when everything was bloodier and less peaceful. It would be nice if the FF described how everything was at that time unlike the Canon.

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DaoistpIwg0B

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maxphantom

braindead fanfic

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Daoist955003

Ideas para el desarrollo de la historia Industrializar el pais de la arena. El pais no tiene la capacidad de ser potencia militar con tan pocos recursos, mi idea para industrializarse es utilizar el campo magnético para minar minerales y metales de todo tipo en el pais y construir una industria pesada , Como el limite de sangre es escaso , Utilizar el jutsu prohibodo de sasori para utilizar chacra de los cuerpos por consiguiente el limite de sangre , Haciendo un cultivo de células para tener mas de estas y hacer mas titeres para que los ninjas promedios puedan ser explotados en la minería, para conseguir a los titeres en masa podes recurir a el pais ese que tiene la vena del dragón

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Doreon_Black

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you18q8mystery

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Valfren

its actually one off the better written naruto ff in here with great taste and a lot of room to improve keep up the great work

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A9B

so far a great story with deferent feel to it has a great potential.

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Nonamenoname

Fanfic very good story. I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story.[img=recommend][img=recommend]

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nacht

author don't know how to use she and he and her and him, for anything else is alright and I give the story 4 and 5 star for all categories but writing quality I give it one star because it look like good quality mtl.

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HellDeimoS

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Victor_7740

Is this dropped? I would genuinely do anything for u to pick this up again

LV 11

DogLickerGods

I suggest you change the cover of your book to something else. Rasa's face looks annoying and makes me lose interest in reading. But I'm giving this a good review because other people think it's good. I don't want to read it myself.

LV 13

Keisar

Will he stand on top or fall into despair and die. This and getting killed by a truck makes me not want to read a story.

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SilenceMute

CH 37: For now it is great story, more chps pleas [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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vagavegta368

a phenomenal story, which shows a different point of view of konoha always being a mega ultra cool village and superior to everything, showing a shallow MC wanting to change his village for the better