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Amigo si bien me facina este fanfic me decepcionรณ mucho este capitulo no valio la espera de tantos dรญas para solo esto esperaba algรบn giro de la trama pero no esperaba algo tan clichรฉ como que como es de una raza que solo generรณ femenino se ve ahora por descontrol emocional no pueda usar sus poderes y no vivirรก mucho creo que escuche eso en unos 4 fanfics con protas geniales pero fallan en su control emocional espero en el proximo capitulo te repongas y vuelvas a escribir asi de genial como lo hacรญas en los primeros 40 capรญtulos
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Una gran historia y con un gran desarrollo de la trama๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
This is the best Ben 10 fanfiction I've come across so far. The author has done an excellent job expanding the world and incorporating the Jack Friday family into the story. They've also made changes to the canon lore that makes more sense than the original version. The characters are well-developed and there's an interesting arc involving time travel and the first version of Ben 10k, which takes a darker turn. Overall, the story is very engaging. Though I do have to mention that there is a harem aspect to it. Despite this, I highly recommend giving it a read.
Sinceramente no e visto mucho Ben 10 por lo que en algunas partes me pierdo pero aun asรญ entiendo esta historia muy bien, me sorprende mucho lo muy bien redactado estรก esto junto que el desarrollo paso a paso del personaje es muy bueno el leer como constantemente Lex se vuelve fuerte hasta el momento es muy satisfactorio, aparte de que es un poco lento en actualizar no me puedo quejar de nada de esta historia y con mucho mi favorita que e leido hasta el momento.
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it's one of the best ben 10 stories in this app. The grammar needs a little more work, it's not bad but it needs work.
Me gustรณ mucho esta historia y la verdad es una de mis favoritas hasta ahora espero que sigas asรญ porque cada que subes un nuevo capitulo un jueves o lunes me alegro
Reveal Spoiler Me gusta la historia en sรญ tienes muy buenas ideas como los sueros y extraรฑamente tiene sentido Eres muy bueno y espero que no dejes la historia porque asta ahora es mi historia favorita
Es una historia con una muy buena trama puesta en acciรณn y si eres fan de ben 10 tanto de la serie original como fuerza alienรญgena sabes que esperar, pero tambiรฉn hay cosas que te sorprenden y no esperarรญas
Thanks for this amazing story and keep up the good work.๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Umm Mr Zeckyll11 are you still alive...I'm sorry but could please update sooner...and more chapters as well...as you could see I've been waiting for new chapters for more than a week but you are not updating and what's with your health,how could you get ill for so many times...please consult a good doctor rather than some quacks...sarcasm aside,please get well soon and update more than one chapter per day and regularly.
if you are going to change the site let me know because I will not read the site anymore๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ
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I didn't get to chapter 2 and I could feel the Cringe. It's probably better since it has more than 100 chapters. But I didn't like the first impression.
yeah, need work grammar wise........................................................................................................................
I completed it till the chapters present....here u deserve this 5 star............................. .............................................................................................................................. .
Good job author-san (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ.......................................................................................
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This is an awesome story.I loved it the moment i first read it . I love it and this is one of the few good Ben ten fanfiction out there.๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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though most wont like it its probably the best ben 10 fanfic on this platforms and it still uploads chapters[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Everything is good but since the mc is intelligent and an excellent engineer so instead of primus why doesnโt the mc develop codon stream inside his omnitrix as well as develop his omnitrix through analyzing all the alternating timeline Ben's omnitrix's like alien force omnitrix,ultimatrix,omnitrix from Ben 10 omniverse,nemetrix,omnitrix from Ben 10 (2016) and all their forms like omni-enhanced,omni-kix,omni-naut etcetra forms and kevin's omnitrix also throughout all this series we see Ben 10,000 who has different omnitrix and capabilities like in the main show in Grandpa's birthday in the future Ben 10000's aliens look way different and much more cool and powerful,then during Ultimatrix Ben 10000 has the ability to get the abilities of his aliens without transforming,during Omniverse Ben 10000 has an omnitrix that can mix his different alien forms like atomic-x and also (2016) meaning the reboot Ben 10000 also has his unique and special omnitrix.So,please let our mc analyse their omnitrix's and incorporate and develop his own omnitrix as well as copy their aliens.Also Lex should collect some DNA of powerful aliens like malware,erase corruption from It and incorporate that with his galvanic mechamorph or Upgrade alien,I think something amazing will happen.I know alternate Ben's would resist but please let mc copy their aliens and omnitrix's.Also,as we all know Lex has created a giand gundam/pacific rim robot for his grandpa then why not create Transformers as in Optimus Prime,Bumble Bee,Arcee and turn some other vehicles like plane,helicopter,ship,submarine,spaceship etc.
Idk man just so many grammar errors and inconsistencies. I really can't stand this novel but I'm glad you're happy to write it as I'm an old Ben 10 fan. Maybe just re-read it and fix the spelling and grammar mistakes.
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It started ok, but gets worse. The whole story is about doing a mistake, self loathing, and then correcting the mistake. The whole Ai thing is too weird too. like technically mc created it so in a way he created his daughter in the image to be a wife๐คฎ. Gven too. It would have been a much better story if the writer gave up the harem, sticked with charmcaster, removed the over sentience of the Ai, used the wishes properly!!!! The current situation is also weird since as a perfect body no bloodline should affect his mentality and emotions. overall not the best read but still readable since its one of few ben 10 fanfics. Be warned though, its gonna be really annoying.
Reveal Spoiler Amigo si bien me facina este fanfic me decepcionรณ mucho este capitulo no valio la espera de tantos dรญas para solo esto esperaba algรบn giro de la trama pero no esperaba algo tan clichรฉ como que como es de una raza que solo generรณ femenino se ve ahora por descontrol emocional no pueda usar sus poderes y no vivirรก mucho creo que escuche eso en unos 4 fanfics con protas geniales pero fallan en su control emocional espero en el proximo capitulo te repongas y vuelvas a escribir asi de genial como lo hacรญas en los primeros 40 capรญtulos
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This is the best Ben 10 fanfiction I've come across so far. The author has done an excellent job expanding the world and incorporating the Jack Friday family into the story. They've also made changes to the canon lore that makes more sense than the original version. The characters are well-developed and there's an interesting arc involving time travel and the first version of Ben 10k, which takes a darker turn. Overall, the story is very engaging. Though I do have to mention that there is a harem aspect to it. Despite this, I highly recommend giving it a read.
Sinceramente no e visto mucho Ben 10 por lo que en algunas partes me pierdo pero aun asรญ entiendo esta historia muy bien, me sorprende mucho lo muy bien redactado estรก esto junto que el desarrollo paso a paso del personaje es muy bueno el leer como constantemente Lex se vuelve fuerte hasta el momento es muy satisfactorio, aparte de que es un poco lento en actualizar no me puedo quejar de nada de esta historia y con mucho mi favorita que e leido hasta el momento.
Reveal Spoiler For glob ,Good gob boy[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]
it's one of the best ben 10 stories in this app. The grammar needs a little more work, it's not bad but it needs work.
Me gustรณ mucho esta historia y la verdad es una de mis favoritas hasta ahora espero que sigas asรญ porque cada que subes un nuevo capitulo un jueves o lunes me alegro
Reveal Spoiler Me gusta la historia en sรญ tienes muy buenas ideas como los sueros y extraรฑamente tiene sentido Eres muy bueno y espero que no dejes la historia porque asta ahora es mi historia favorita
Es una historia con una muy buena trama puesta en acciรณn y si eres fan de ben 10 tanto de la serie original como fuerza alienรญgena sabes que esperar, pero tambiรฉn hay cosas que te sorprenden y no esperarรญas
Thanks for this amazing story and keep up the good work.๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Umm Mr Zeckyll11 are you still alive...I'm sorry but could please update sooner...and more chapters as well...as you could see I've been waiting for new chapters for more than a week but you are not updating and what's with your health,how could you get ill for so many times...please consult a good doctor rather than some quacks...sarcasm aside,please get well soon and update more than one chapter per day and regularly.
if you are going to change the site let me know because I will not read the site anymore๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ๐คฌ
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Essa รฉ de cria โ_ใฝ ๏ผผ๏ผผ ๏ผผ( อกยฐ อส อกยฐ) > โใฝ / ใธ๏ผผ / / ๏ผผ๏ผผ ๏พ ใ ใฝ_ใค / / / /| ( (ใฝ | |ใ๏ผผ | ไธฟ ๏ผผ โ) | | ) / ใ ) L๏พ (_๏ผ
I didn't get to chapter 2 and I could feel the Cringe. It's probably better since it has more than 100 chapters. But I didn't like the first impression.
yeah, need work grammar wise........................................................................................................................
I completed it till the chapters present....here u deserve this 5 star............................. .............................................................................................................................. .
Good job author-san (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ (โ๏พใฎ๏พ)โ.......................................................................................
please allow him to get raven booty -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
This is an awesome story.I loved it the moment i first read it . I love it and this is one of the few good Ben ten fanfiction out there.๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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though most wont like it its probably the best ben 10 fanfic on this platforms and it still uploads chapters[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
Everything is good but since the mc is intelligent and an excellent engineer so instead of primus why doesnโt the mc develop codon stream inside his omnitrix as well as develop his omnitrix through analyzing all the alternating timeline Ben's omnitrix's like alien force omnitrix,ultimatrix,omnitrix from Ben 10 omniverse,nemetrix,omnitrix from Ben 10 (2016) and all their forms like omni-enhanced,omni-kix,omni-naut etcetra forms and kevin's omnitrix also throughout all this series we see Ben 10,000 who has different omnitrix and capabilities like in the main show in Grandpa's birthday in the future Ben 10000's aliens look way different and much more cool and powerful,then during Ultimatrix Ben 10000 has the ability to get the abilities of his aliens without transforming,during Omniverse Ben 10000 has an omnitrix that can mix his different alien forms like atomic-x and also (2016) meaning the reboot Ben 10000 also has his unique and special omnitrix.So,please let our mc analyse their omnitrix's and incorporate and develop his own omnitrix as well as copy their aliens.Also Lex should collect some DNA of powerful aliens like malware,erase corruption from It and incorporate that with his galvanic mechamorph or Upgrade alien,I think something amazing will happen.I know alternate Ben's would resist but please let mc copy their aliens and omnitrix's.Also,as we all know Lex has created a giand gundam/pacific rim robot for his grandpa then why not create Transformers as in Optimus Prime,Bumble Bee,Arcee and turn some other vehicles like plane,helicopter,ship,submarine,spaceship etc.
Idk man just so many grammar errors and inconsistencies. I really can't stand this novel but I'm glad you're happy to write it as I'm an old Ben 10 fan. Maybe just re-read it and fix the spelling and grammar mistakes.
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It started ok, but gets worse. The whole story is about doing a mistake, self loathing, and then correcting the mistake. The whole Ai thing is too weird too. like technically mc created it so in a way he created his daughter in the image to be a wife๐คฎ. Gven too. It would have been a much better story if the writer gave up the harem, sticked with charmcaster, removed the over sentience of the Ai, used the wishes properly!!!! The current situation is also weird since as a perfect body no bloodline should affect his mentality and emotions. overall not the best read but still readable since its one of few ben 10 fanfics. Be warned though, its gonna be really annoying.
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