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Its not the best, but it isn't terrible either. I have found that post being re-written it has improved in where I previously found it to be bland.
This would be a decent story, if the MC wasn't so cringe. The MC's personality is so cringe/borderline bipolar autistic. Something a 13 year old would make. Plus character personalities are two dimensional. On a personal preference, after the last chapter I read I hope this story ends.
I really enjoyed reading it, however when I came back to reread it all of the chapters were gone, and I think it would have been easier to keep this story posted and just make the updated version its own book.
Grammar suck, character development is bad and his personality is so-so. Long paragraph adding it with bad grammar, mix dialogue and thought, make your eyes hurt. Personality is sucked I don't know what to say but I don't like his personality. I honestly cannot recommend this There is nothing to speak off
il summarize, mg has little man syndrome, author is partially illiterate and doesn't know how to structure a sentence, characters are so bland it's just noticable, mc has nerfed meliodas powers , has the cringe troubled past background cuz of the author's Naruto fetish and it's just straight up boring
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hm i dont like how the mc was a nice person and sudenly hates everything and yells at someone that sounds like saved them but i cant do any better this is just my opinion dont take it to heart bye
Just pathetic and a wimp mc, writing quality is like 4th grader and story basically sucks. Logic is thrown away and plotholes are everywhere. Thanks for wasting my time 😒
The MC is quite annoying to read about. He is self-contradictory, rude,and cringy. It’s overall a bad combo for a personality. 눈_눈 …………….
Its unique that you got all of them on 4 star from me. Wow, though there are grammatical errors as well as punctuational errors but overall; I RECOMMEND THIS STORY. Goo plot, atleast original as far as DxD plots for SI MC goes. Etc
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The novel's title is a straight up lie: He's not reborn as a fallen angel at all, he would have been if he didn't straight up wish for Meliodas' bloodline before even reincarnating (transmigrating) which not only fused and altered the 'fallen angel half' of his bloodline, it even removed him fron heaven's system before being born. (Novel should be called: "Generic Young Master in DxD with nerfed Meliodas' powers") It's an abhorrent mess, the wishes are pretty weak (the dude spends two wishes on Meliodas' bloodline and his version of fullcounter and gets threatened by the ROB to have his soul destroyed due to them being 'op' despite completely nerfing and altering them, Divine Dividing and Boost would be better than what he's left with here.) He wakes up (not as a baby so reincarnation is already iffy here as it's more like transmigration) in a bed with no memories and starts shouting and talking down to the first person he sees (A very polite maid, possibly Grayfia though as I couldn't stomach this trainwreck any further I never found out her name) He acts like a typical xianxia young master that gets murdered every chapter. (Here's an example of mc's 'personality' when interacting with people: "oi maid I'm done so bring me to a bathroom that has a mirror") On the bright side the author is pretty good at having his mc elicit emotions from the readers, as I for one whenever reading any line that the mc says get the urge to punch someone.
Wow OK! so your English is impossible to read and makes the story hard to read! The story over all has a lot of good things going for it but you need to fix the flow of the tale!!!!! Good Luck!!!!
Grammar suck, character development is bad and his personality is so-so. Long paragraph adding it with bad grammar, mix dialogue and thought, make your eyes hurt. Personality is sucked I don't know what to say but I don't like his personality. Hating being a slave because of losing his humanity but he wished a demon bloodline what kind of hypocrite is that. Anyway, there's more but I dropped this in chapter2, so it's up to you to read this.
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MC changes his character so many times, he is quick-tempered, sometimes irritable, sometimes soft, sometimes domineering, sometimes tough and it is very annoying. Besides, there are all clichés and a lot of stupid moments.
Grammar is bad and its hard to read. Character design and story development are bland. its a nice try from the author but its badly designed.
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hmm...this is interesting I will be honest the plot is good and executions is also well done,grammar is sometimes off but nothing major that couldn't be handled now the best thing would be its humor and a touch of romance which makes I quite exotic well ready it yourself nothing much to say
awful writing. the mistakes are all over that place. this also has bad character design, he's half human-half fallen angel yet has meliodas' bloodline(a demon). the god/rob over reacted and became angry because mc wished for meliodas' full counter, not including estarossa's full counter...
Неплохой фанфик.Мне понравился,а граматику можно потерпеть если история интересная.С нетерпением жду продолжения.Большое спасибо автору за него и вдохновения ему!
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I honestly cannot recommend this There is nothing to speak off character is bland boring just plain and Simple I dont know what writer wanted to do bit it came out as mix of everything and it doesnt make any sense whatsoever writing quality is really bad so bad that i cannot understand what is written or what was intended most of Time There is nothing about The World and you need preknowledge to understand anything for now i havent seen this writer create anything that wasnt based on something before characters not described as they should be nothing on them when it matter really not The worst ive read but at The same Time way below what i Could consider "barely passable if your borednout od your mind and have nothing at all you can do other than this"
This seems to be a solid story story so far. The thing that keeps it down is the grammar and writing quality. I would recommend that the Author get a beta to look over the story to proof read and correct mistakes.
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Its good. Very good. Could he have a sacred gear for his wings or his darkness like meliodas so it would be half fallen/half demon wing. When is the next chapter coming out.
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just want to say. don't use reborn if u r transmigrated to a 10 year old body. reborn must begin from start as a baby........................
grayfia is she not Lucifer's wife? I don't understand how she is a maid who helps him I was a little confused why then she showed up with Lucifer
Its not the best, but it isn't terrible either. I have found that post being re-written it has improved in where I previously found it to be bland.
This would be a decent story, if the MC wasn't so cringe. The MC's personality is so cringe/borderline bipolar autistic. Something a 13 year old would make. Plus character personalities are two dimensional. On a personal preference, after the last chapter I read I hope this story ends.
I really enjoyed reading it, however when I came back to reread it all of the chapters were gone, and I think it would have been easier to keep this story posted and just make the updated version its own book.
Grammar suck, character development is bad and his personality is so-so. Long paragraph adding it with bad grammar, mix dialogue and thought, make your eyes hurt. Personality is sucked I don't know what to say but I don't like his personality. I honestly cannot recommend this There is nothing to speak off
il summarize, mg has little man syndrome, author is partially illiterate and doesn't know how to structure a sentence, characters are so bland it's just noticable, mc has nerfed meliodas powers , has the cringe troubled past background cuz of the author's Naruto fetish and it's just straight up boring
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hm i dont like how the mc was a nice person and sudenly hates everything and yells at someone that sounds like saved them but i cant do any better this is just my opinion dont take it to heart bye
Just pathetic and a wimp mc, writing quality is like 4th grader and story basically sucks. Logic is thrown away and plotholes are everywhere. Thanks for wasting my time 😒
The MC is quite annoying to read about. He is self-contradictory, rude,and cringy. It’s overall a bad combo for a personality. 눈_눈 …………….
Its unique that you got all of them on 4 star from me. Wow, though there are grammatical errors as well as punctuational errors but overall; I RECOMMEND THIS STORY. Goo plot, atleast original as far as DxD plots for SI MC goes. Etc
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The novel's title is a straight up lie: He's not reborn as a fallen angel at all, he would have been if he didn't straight up wish for Meliodas' bloodline before even reincarnating (transmigrating) which not only fused and altered the 'fallen angel half' of his bloodline, it even removed him fron heaven's system before being born. (Novel should be called: "Generic Young Master in DxD with nerfed Meliodas' powers") It's an abhorrent mess, the wishes are pretty weak (the dude spends two wishes on Meliodas' bloodline and his version of fullcounter and gets threatened by the ROB to have his soul destroyed due to them being 'op' despite completely nerfing and altering them, Divine Dividing and Boost would be better than what he's left with here.) He wakes up (not as a baby so reincarnation is already iffy here as it's more like transmigration) in a bed with no memories and starts shouting and talking down to the first person he sees (A very polite maid, possibly Grayfia though as I couldn't stomach this trainwreck any further I never found out her name) He acts like a typical xianxia young master that gets murdered every chapter. (Here's an example of mc's 'personality' when interacting with people: "oi maid I'm done so bring me to a bathroom that has a mirror") On the bright side the author is pretty good at having his mc elicit emotions from the readers, as I for one whenever reading any line that the mc says get the urge to punch someone.
Wow OK! so your English is impossible to read and makes the story hard to read! The story over all has a lot of good things going for it but you need to fix the flow of the tale!!!!! Good Luck!!!!
Grammar suck, character development is bad and his personality is so-so. Long paragraph adding it with bad grammar, mix dialogue and thought, make your eyes hurt. Personality is sucked I don't know what to say but I don't like his personality. Hating being a slave because of losing his humanity but he wished a demon bloodline what kind of hypocrite is that. Anyway, there's more but I dropped this in chapter2, so it's up to you to read this.
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MC changes his character so many times, he is quick-tempered, sometimes irritable, sometimes soft, sometimes domineering, sometimes tough and it is very annoying. Besides, there are all clichés and a lot of stupid moments.
Grammar is bad and its hard to read. Character design and story development are bland. its a nice try from the author but its badly designed.
Reveal Spoiler hmm...this is interesting I will be honest the plot is good and executions is also well done,grammar is sometimes off but nothing major that couldn't be handled now the best thing would be its humor and a touch of romance which makes I quite exotic well ready it yourself nothing much to say
awful writing. the mistakes are all over that place. this also has bad character design, he's half human-half fallen angel yet has meliodas' bloodline(a demon). the god/rob over reacted and became angry because mc wished for meliodas' full counter, not including estarossa's full counter...
Неплохой фанфик.Мне понравился,а граматику можно потерпеть если история интересная.С нетерпением жду продолжения.Большое спасибо автору за него и вдохновения ему!
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I honestly cannot recommend this There is nothing to speak off character is bland boring just plain and Simple I dont know what writer wanted to do bit it came out as mix of everything and it doesnt make any sense whatsoever writing quality is really bad so bad that i cannot understand what is written or what was intended most of Time There is nothing about The World and you need preknowledge to understand anything for now i havent seen this writer create anything that wasnt based on something before characters not described as they should be nothing on them when it matter really not The worst ive read but at The same Time way below what i Could consider "barely passable if your borednout od your mind and have nothing at all you can do other than this"
This seems to be a solid story story so far. The thing that keeps it down is the grammar and writing quality. I would recommend that the Author get a beta to look over the story to proof read and correct mistakes.
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Its good. Very good. Could he have a sacred gear for his wings or his darkness like meliodas so it would be half fallen/half demon wing. When is the next chapter coming out.
Reveal Spoiler just want to say. don't use reborn if u r transmigrated to a 10 year old body. reborn must begin from start as a baby........................
grayfia is she not Lucifer's wife? I don't understand how she is a maid who helps him I was a little confused why then she showed up with Lucifer
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