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Write a reviewPlease continue with this as the other guy put this is the best thing because there isnโt anything else like this and itโs the best
Reveal SpoilerPlease Please Please make ch 25 ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ๐
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Amazing, I really liked the plot and the story is very interesting, the two characters personality is great and the protagonist is amazing, and his quest for power is the best part, the harem only has one And I liked her so far I really hope the development of two female characters or heroines
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Hey author san when is the next chapter coming it been long time come on man u are torturing me without releasing the next chapter and please don't think about dropping or put hiatus please hurry up and release the chapters this time plz update chapters daily as it boring to wait for such treasure as this novel
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rus ััะพั ัะพะผะฐะฝ ะดะพะฒะพะปัะฝะพ ั ะพัะพั. ะฟะตััะพะฝะฐะถะธ ะธ ััะถะตั ะพัะปะธัะฝัะน.ะฝะพ ะพะฑะฝะพะฒะปะตะฝะธั ะพัะตะฝั ัะตะดะบะธ ---------------------------------------------------------------------
Es bastante bueno, el รบnico problema es la velocidad de las actualizaciones, lo รบnico lamentable es que no vamos a poder ver a ban y escanor ya que ellos nacen 3mil aรฑos despuรฉs.
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story is too slow for me....... ..... .... .... ...... ... .... .... ..... ..... ..... ..... ... ..... ..... .... ..... .... .... ...... .....
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The story is one of the best Iโve read and enjoyed completely. There is always room to improve but your doing great with this story. The only thing that really needs an upgrade is Update stability.
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More more more more more more more ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คซ๐ค๐ฅฒ๐ค๐คญ๐คซ๐ค๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐๐ค๐คซ๐ค๐คญโบ๐๐๐ด๐๐ด๐คฎ๐คค๐ค๐ช๐ค๐คง๐คข๐ด๐ง๐ฏ๐จ๐ฒ๐จ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฏ๐๐ฎ๐ง๐๐คฌ๐๐๐๐ป๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐๐ผ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คค๐๐๐๐๐คจ๐คญ๐คจ๐คญ๐๐คซ๐๐คญ๐คชMore more more more more more more ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คซ๐ค๐ฅฒ๐ค๐คญ๐คซ๐ค๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐๐ค๐คซ๐ค๐คญโบ๐๐๐ด๐๐ด๐คฎ๐คค๐ค๐ช๐ค๐คง๐คข๐ด๐ง๐ฏ๐จ๐ฒ๐จ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฏ๐๐ฎ๐ง๐๐คฌ๐๐๐๐ป๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐๐ผ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คค๐๐๐๐๐คจ๐คญ๐คจ๐คญ๐๐คซ๐๐คญ๐คช
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Pretty nice I like how you center the beginning part of the story towards Meliodas training this story is pretty rare since there are a small amount of seven Deadly sins Fanfic that are actually good.
I give you 5 star in everything not because I read or anything like that... NO! because it's a Meliodas fic! .
pretty solid, there's room for improvement but its pretty nice, there may be a little plot holes but even the original had plot holes so its not that big of a deal, the only thing Im looking to forward to him you do the 3000 year timeskip and how itl include the wives besides Elizabeth
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Reveal SpoilerOverall, this is fine, you overuse the word โasโ and what you say is scrambled, an unorganised writing but other then that you have potential as a writer
Please continue with this as the other guy put this is the best thing because there isnโt anything else like this and itโs the best
Reveal SpoilerPlease Please Please make ch 25 ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ๐
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Amazing, I really liked the plot and the story is very interesting, the two characters personality is great and the protagonist is amazing, and his quest for power is the best part, the harem only has one And I liked her so far I really hope the development of two female characters or heroines
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Hey author san when is the next chapter coming it been long time come on man u are torturing me without releasing the next chapter and please don't think about dropping or put hiatus please hurry up and release the chapters this time plz update chapters daily as it boring to wait for such treasure as this novel
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rus ััะพั ัะพะผะฐะฝ ะดะพะฒะพะปัะฝะพ ั ะพัะพั. ะฟะตััะพะฝะฐะถะธ ะธ ััะถะตั ะพัะปะธัะฝัะน.ะฝะพ ะพะฑะฝะพะฒะปะตะฝะธั ะพัะตะฝั ัะตะดะบะธ ---------------------------------------------------------------------
Es bastante bueno, el รบnico problema es la velocidad de las actualizaciones, lo รบnico lamentable es que no vamos a poder ver a ban y escanor ya que ellos nacen 3mil aรฑos despuรฉs.
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story is too slow for me....... ..... .... .... ...... ... .... .... ..... ..... ..... ..... ... ..... ..... .... ..... .... .... ...... .....
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The story is one of the best Iโve read and enjoyed completely. There is always room to improve but your doing great with this story. The only thing that really needs an upgrade is Update stability.
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More more more more more more more ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คซ๐ค๐ฅฒ๐ค๐คญ๐คซ๐ค๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐๐ค๐คซ๐ค๐คญโบ๐๐๐ด๐๐ด๐คฎ๐คค๐ค๐ช๐ค๐คง๐คข๐ด๐ง๐ฏ๐จ๐ฒ๐จ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฏ๐๐ฎ๐ง๐๐คฌ๐๐๐๐ป๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐๐ผ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คค๐๐๐๐๐คจ๐คญ๐คจ๐คญ๐๐คซ๐๐คญ๐คชMore more more more more more more ๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คซ๐ค๐ฅฒ๐ค๐คญ๐คซ๐ค๐๐๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐ฅฐ๐๐๐๐คฉ๐๐๐ค๐คซ๐ค๐คญโบ๐๐๐ด๐๐ด๐คฎ๐คค๐ค๐ช๐ค๐คง๐คข๐ด๐ง๐ฏ๐จ๐ฒ๐จ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฏ๐๐ฎ๐ง๐๐คฌ๐๐๐๐ป๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐๐ผ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คค๐๐๐๐๐คจ๐คญ๐คจ๐คญ๐๐คซ๐๐คญ๐คช
โโโ โโโโ โโโโโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ
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Pretty nice I like how you center the beginning part of the story towards Meliodas training this story is pretty rare since there are a small amount of seven Deadly sins Fanfic that are actually good.
I give you 5 star in everything not because I read or anything like that... NO! because it's a Meliodas fic! .
pretty solid, there's room for improvement but its pretty nice, there may be a little plot holes but even the original had plot holes so its not that big of a deal, the only thing Im looking to forward to him you do the 3000 year timeskip and how itl include the wives besides Elizabeth
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Overall, this is fine, you overuse the word โasโ and what you say is scrambled, an unorganised writing but other then that you have potential as a writer