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webnovels may not be home to English speaker, but as they are writing in English, they should do English properly. many authors don't understand that first impressions are everything, so when I start reading the first chapters and the words are all jumbled up and I have to look back at the sentence to see if it made sense and it doesn't, I'm sure you understand why I have such gripes with this book, look over your work my dude. because this book doesn't deserve such ratings if it can't even fix it's first chapters
it might just be me but i swear the cover is from far cry new dawn. Like i swear i look just like a location in the game and the animal is im sure from the game....so i not sure how original this is.
I wanted to give it go though I dont really enjoy novels that dont have romance in it so if it possible could you tell me if there is romance or not pls?
ah i see the book cover be far cry new dawn (game) i recognize that anywhere after all i have well *cough* a lot of time on it a bit too much time...
It's a refreshing idea and a rather balanced one till now but I feel like a lot is going to come at us in the future and fast. I can already see it start to take shape
The story is well written. I'd probably put just a bit more time into describing the characters. You do a good job of building tension. The background seems solid. I like the role that the animals have in the story and it is well formatted. I've still got more to explore, but bravo.
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It's really interesting and I was not sure how I would like this because romance always ruins things for me but there is actually not even a hint of it there so it was a really fun read. I'll look forward to Vol 2 very much.
At first i was like- ooo nooo, aaahh, what? OMG! U can guess it, the plot caught me off guard every single time! Amazing plot nicely written keeping going author
Just really enjoying this story and the upload stability is really good for this young a story but I really need more if possible and I need it fast
Really good overall story telling and really engaging too. I like if a lot and won't mind more of this at all if you updated more and at a faster pace than your current one
I really like the summary and the first few chapters so I'll be reading more but this really suits my taste quite well and actually details out things which is always good
I had skipped the synopsis and dived right in. At first I thought it was going to be a "Sailor Moon"-esque stuff so the twist was rather refreshing. There are more than enough spots where, what I suspect to be auto-correct ( or may be auto-fill) messes it up so I suggest thorough proofreading. IIRC there's a movie coming out this year about a NPC in a MMO game becoming self-aware. You might wanna check that out and pick up one or two interesting ideas and elements to adopt into your story.
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It's so realistic that I felt I was in the book! Great work author! If I didn't read the synopsis I would never know by reading first chapters that the MC is in a game. Synopsis is quite interesting and plot is really well defined. I really hooked up to the book! Keep it up! I cheer you!
Writing quality is 5- because it's understandable and have very little grammatical mistake. Story development is 4 star- because the pace is a little slow for the exciting things to happen.(chapter 7) but, not not bac because the flow is smooth and clean. character design is 5 star- The characters has different personalities that makes them human. It's a good quality writing I must say. updating stability is 5 stars because I'm generous. i give world background 5 stars. I don't know what to say. the writing is good, and we have good understanding of what the author is showing to us about the background with the appearance of mysterious guy, Liam Overall, this story is good action, character buildup, nice flow and good pacing. I do wish you would put any character that's lively, a troublemaker, like Mark but more so the story looks livelier. Even animal that's so naughty and always create trouble is okay. just my opinion though. ššš
I love male perspective books but struggle to write one myself, so Kudos to the author for writing this so well. The plot is very interesting, and I cannot wait to read more.
A nice twisted story. Making the world turned upside down when the MC knew the reality of things. Nice setup of scenes and arcs author. It was splendidly planned ahead and was not expecting to have such a plot twist. Kudos!
This story is so interesting and intriguing! I am amazed, this is written so superbly and i absolutely enjoyed reading from a male perspective, the whole book is written really very nicely and worth reading! ā¤ļøā¤ļø
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Mark feels like a sweetheart. But i know the silent one's are the most violent one. The story is going good so far. Please keep writing and updating,
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With just a few chapters, your story seems really interesting! Male lead stories really do take my interests a lot so I am adding it to library and will be waiting for updates! Fighting!
Really good. I really like this a lot and I don't tend to like a lot which is saying much. Please do more of this so that I can read more too.
Somehow, the story seemed to be getting even more interesting now. I just hoped you'd update more frequently though. It's getting so interesting right now
Generally I don't review so early but I will here because I really .Ike where the story is headed. The unpredictibility is one thing that keeps me coming back for more right now so keep it up if you can
Seems really interesting so I'll keep an eye out. Besides, the idea of living in a game without realusing it seems really fascinating to me soimight keep an eye out for such things here
This seemed interesting so I checked it out too. Glad I did. It's not too far for me to follow but I'll wait a little more for it to develop a little more before I actually start
The world seems really interesting as well as unique in making. Not my first take on such a concept but a well defined one none the less. I'm interested where it will progress
Really well written till here so I'm interested in further development of the story. Though the direction it's going seems alright to me. Mark though seems really hot headed and Liam is just shady too. I won't trust him too with things like that at all
This was a really fun read and an unexpected one from you. But I'm happy to see this none the less. Give me all the slowbuild you want but it better be worth it in the end
Really good writing and really entertaining story till now. Now if only this had more chapters added to it then it would be great too. I'll add this to my collection for the time being and see where you take it further to
Please give this story a chance and leave feedback for me to enjoy. I'll look forward to all your replies here. Also, I'll try to reply to as many suggessions as I can so please let me know if you find any mistakes here too.
webnovels may not be home to English speaker, but as they are writing in English, they should do English properly. many authors don't understand that first impressions are everything, so when I start reading the first chapters and the words are all jumbled up and I have to look back at the sentence to see if it made sense and it doesn't, I'm sure you understand why I have such gripes with this book, look over your work my dude. because this book doesn't deserve such ratings if it can't even fix it's first chapters
it might just be me but i swear the cover is from far cry new dawn. Like i swear i look just like a location in the game and the animal is im sure from the game....so i not sure how original this is.
I wanted to give it go though I dont really enjoy novels that dont have romance in it so if it possible could you tell me if there is romance or not pls?
ah i see the book cover be far cry new dawn (game) i recognize that anywhere after all i have well *cough* a lot of time on it a bit too much time...
It's a refreshing idea and a rather balanced one till now but I feel like a lot is going to come at us in the future and fast. I can already see it start to take shape
The story is well written. I'd probably put just a bit more time into describing the characters. You do a good job of building tension. The background seems solid. I like the role that the animals have in the story and it is well formatted. I've still got more to explore, but bravo.
What power does the mc have? ā¦ā¦,,,,,,,,,,,,ā¦.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
It's really interesting and I was not sure how I would like this because romance always ruins things for me but there is actually not even a hint of it there so it was a really fun read. I'll look forward to Vol 2 very much.
At first i was like- ooo nooo, aaahh, what? OMG! U can guess it, the plot caught me off guard every single time! Amazing plot nicely written keeping going author
Just really enjoying this story and the upload stability is really good for this young a story but I really need more if possible and I need it fast
Really good overall story telling and really engaging too. I like if a lot and won't mind more of this at all if you updated more and at a faster pace than your current one
I really like the summary and the first few chapters so I'll be reading more but this really suits my taste quite well and actually details out things which is always good
I had skipped the synopsis and dived right in. At first I thought it was going to be a "Sailor Moon"-esque stuff so the twist was rather refreshing. There are more than enough spots where, what I suspect to be auto-correct ( or may be auto-fill) messes it up so I suggest thorough proofreading. IIRC there's a movie coming out this year about a NPC in a MMO game becoming self-aware. You might wanna check that out and pick up one or two interesting ideas and elements to adopt into your story.
Reveal Spoiler It's so realistic that I felt I was in the book! Great work author! If I didn't read the synopsis I would never know by reading first chapters that the MC is in a game. Synopsis is quite interesting and plot is really well defined. I really hooked up to the book! Keep it up! I cheer you!
Writing quality is 5- because it's understandable and have very little grammatical mistake. Story development is 4 star- because the pace is a little slow for the exciting things to happen.(chapter 7) but, not not bac because the flow is smooth and clean. character design is 5 star- The characters has different personalities that makes them human. It's a good quality writing I must say. updating stability is 5 stars because I'm generous. i give world background 5 stars. I don't know what to say. the writing is good, and we have good understanding of what the author is showing to us about the background with the appearance of mysterious guy, Liam Overall, this story is good action, character buildup, nice flow and good pacing. I do wish you would put any character that's lively, a troublemaker, like Mark but more so the story looks livelier. Even animal that's so naughty and always create trouble is okay. just my opinion though. ššš
I love male perspective books but struggle to write one myself, so Kudos to the author for writing this so well. The plot is very interesting, and I cannot wait to read more.
A nice twisted story. Making the world turned upside down when the MC knew the reality of things. Nice setup of scenes and arcs author. It was splendidly planned ahead and was not expecting to have such a plot twist. Kudos!
This story is so interesting and intriguing! I am amazed, this is written so superbly and i absolutely enjoyed reading from a male perspective, the whole book is written really very nicely and worth reading! ā¤ļøā¤ļø
Reveal Spoiler Mark feels like a sweetheart. But i know the silent one's are the most violent one. The story is going good so far. Please keep writing and updating,
Reveal Spoiler With just a few chapters, your story seems really interesting! Male lead stories really do take my interests a lot so I am adding it to library and will be waiting for updates! Fighting!
Really good. I really like this a lot and I don't tend to like a lot which is saying much. Please do more of this so that I can read more too.
Somehow, the story seemed to be getting even more interesting now. I just hoped you'd update more frequently though. It's getting so interesting right now
Generally I don't review so early but I will here because I really .Ike where the story is headed. The unpredictibility is one thing that keeps me coming back for more right now so keep it up if you can
Seems really interesting so I'll keep an eye out. Besides, the idea of living in a game without realusing it seems really fascinating to me soimight keep an eye out for such things here
This seemed interesting so I checked it out too. Glad I did. It's not too far for me to follow but I'll wait a little more for it to develop a little more before I actually start
The world seems really interesting as well as unique in making. Not my first take on such a concept but a well defined one none the less. I'm interested where it will progress
Really well written till here so I'm interested in further development of the story. Though the direction it's going seems alright to me. Mark though seems really hot headed and Liam is just shady too. I won't trust him too with things like that at all
This was a really fun read and an unexpected one from you. But I'm happy to see this none the less. Give me all the slowbuild you want but it better be worth it in the end
Really good writing and really entertaining story till now. Now if only this had more chapters added to it then it would be great too. I'll add this to my collection for the time being and see where you take it further to
Please give this story a chance and leave feedback for me to enjoy. I'll look forward to all your replies here. Also, I'll try to reply to as many suggessions as I can so please let me know if you find any mistakes here too.