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This fanfic is one of the best I’ve read. The characters feel fleshed out, and the story has its twists and its own little OC plot. The author does an amazing job bringing new ideas while staying true to the original books.
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Dear Author, your fanfic is awesome. But your updates are like living in hell. please upgrade your updates, pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.
Trash novel, writing is childish. the characters has no brain, reading this fic make me want to vomit very awful.
I like this book. I like the mysteries and foreshadowing. I like how totally clueless Ethan is. I love how he made Luna a popular girl with many friends. I like that Ron isn't an idiot. Please keep writing this.
This is such a fun book! There are mysteries and plot changes that fight the plot Armor! This book is keeping me up at night!
I like this book. I'm only a few chapters in, but I've added it into my llibrary. I like the character and where the story is going.
First chapter was great, next chapters were awful. 100 chapters in and I lost all my time reading this fic Writing: MTL quality, I don't mind authors starting with bad English but after 100 chapters and still having the same issues as chapter 1 makes the story just hard to read. Update: good, but slowing it down for better quality cpuld be better. Story Development: Had potential but the author decided to write blandly, not using the vasics such as Chekov's gun, the words read end up being worthless drivel since not a single bit of information shows any value. Things end up happening spontaneously or "Just Because". Character Design: THERE IS A WIKI, ALL YOU NEED TO SO IS READ IT TO UNDERSTAND A BIT OF PERSONALITY. Characters end up bland, the MC... gas no personality, its like every experience he has does nothing to him. He's perfect, he knows all, if he does not agree then it is wrong. I've read a lot and this character design follows the amateur method of, "Do something, explain later". Please, remeber that its vetter to show not tell. Show a person get emotional, act on that emotion then commit an action. Don't make a character commit an action THEN explain why he did that. It only works in anime and manga or VISUAL works since we could SEE whats happening. World Background: Mystery is good but writing exposition should only be done to reveal a mystery. Don't make an exposition and hold back to contain mystery. If you want to keep things secret then keep it secret. Also, don't make us read the MC's thoughts. The MC works on conjecture, he believes his truth so just make him learn what he knows, reveal what needs to be revealed fully when you are ready, don't edge, that just makes the story less mysterious and more stupid. A good premise, had potential but qith failed execution. Rewriting of the story is possible, pre hogwarts arc cpuld be shortened to 1 chapter, remove all useless exposition. Keep the MC's thoughts on magic and the world to himself. Make him OP, it doesn't matter, but write it in a way that makes readers want to k ow why he is so strong. How he got so strong and do this by making MC correct his understanding on magic. This way you have a GOOD reason why an OP MC is going to Hogwarts. Hope this helps
3.6 This HP FF should be read with your brain shut off. Or else you'll be having a war of logic with your own brain. that's why I stopped reading after a few chapters. lol
Perfeição, ansiosa pelos proximos capítulos. Eu olho todos o dias pra ver se os novos capítulos chegaram e estou ansiosa pelo romance com a Luna
Worst fic i’ve read in a while lol. Its a cringefest and the author basically just gives the MC anything without thorough explanation and its a bit xianxia like too. Must be why its bad
Bueno la historia tiene una gran trama,desarrollo y los personajes como el prota y su familia son muy interesantes llegando a amarlos desde el principio, me encanta como el prota ha estado relacionandose con todos y por supuesto como ha manejado la historia canon y cambiado ciertas cosas , creo que mi unica queja que es mas algo de gusto personal no me gusta el triángulo amoroso que se esta formando y como el prota a pesar de su habilidad aun no se da cuenta de nada de esto y por ultimo #lunaforever❤️, eso en fin me gusta mucho la historia espero seguir leyendola ahora al dia 😎
The story is good with the charismatic and fun MC, but this loses a lot of value compared to the clear lack of action, transforming the story into a pure slice of life
I started off very well with the MC as a playful and positive character with Unique power but gradually it became boring as he is carrying the world on his shoulders and also trying to keep the plot as it is and being the careful character he is he always ignores his weird dreams by putting the important things back of his mind. The story would have been better if it continues a playful MC who understands his power
Really, and I mean really great story. Good plot, enough deviation from the original HP to not make it boring and repetitive, amazing cliffhangers and mysteries tthat make you want to read more & really great characters PS: I hope Ethan can be in a polygamous relationship with Luna & fleur
love most of it so far I don't like how author is trying to maybe setup a Harem. PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM
As of chapter 432, this is a well made fan-fic (i guess because idk how to diferentiate), The character design is pretty good and reasonable, World background is very well explained (Considering me as a Harry Potter fan, so maybe not that well for newcomers), Writing Quality is incredibly good only some errors that are very rare, Story development is also nice (didnt like some of the added stuff, not all of them just some) , Overall a really good read that hooks the reader.
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Buena historia toca esperar que si continúe 5/5 .............................................................. .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I have to say. . . this is hard to read. Especially at the beginning because this is as far as I go despite my OCD desire to finish what I have started. Some stories are cringy but they are like falling down a slope with an incline where you don't lose much momentum. This is so hard to read (at least in the beginning) where the slope of the reading is like hitting flat ground every time there is some trash writing which is every other paragraph. It stops the flow of the story every time I physically cringe and start scratching my face like a trashed junkie.
An excellent Harry Potter novel with a good storyline and World Background. Please continue the novel. The stability of Updates should be much better.
It starts pretty good and fast paced, although the MC's rapid progress doesn't have a great explanation and feels unjustified. But the big problem comes the moment he starts at Hogwarts. The story just slows down to a crawl with unnecessary excruciatingly detailed explanations of every little thing the MC does. 50 chapters of nothing interesting happening and little to no progress in the story becomes normal. The MC also seems to also loose his motivations to become stronger like protecting his family or changing the wizard world to stop discrimination and he basically becomes a normal slightly more talented student who doesn't train much and barely has any progress in his abilities. If you want to read a slice of life novel without much action in the HP world you might still like this one but if you expect anything to happen you will probably be dissapointed.
Enjoyable read, excellent characters, full of excellent references and jokes. So far one of the best Harry Potter fics
i like it but the mystery about the beast magic he has is more annoying then intriguing. he cant use it. Its actually hindering him more then helping him. And it only com up twice ij 200 chapters.... thats too long to stretch a mystery. Without clues. or explanation. or resolution. 200 chapters makes it annoying every time you bring it up. Just focus on the story cause your characters beast power sucks.
As a shameless author... Or very smart and cunning, I'm giving myself five stars, just because I can, and because that might be the only one I'll get... Sniff. (Feel sorry for me and give me five stars, hehe). I hope my story pleases you all, just as many of the stories here please and cheer me. :) I would also like you to tell me what I can improve on the fanfic, because it would improve the experience for you guys, and it would help me to write better (And learn English). But please, when commenting, be respectful. I would love to receive a negative review to help me improve, but I would be very disappointed (and perhaps annoyed) if I were only given name-calling and mockery. But I still hope you have fun reading and commenting, just as I had fun writing. Thanks Se7en! :)
WebNovel has decided that the site's readers should be forced to use the app to read the stories they like, and because of that I've decided that I will post my fanfic on other sites as well. I myself am one of the readers who uses the site, because I translate the stories with Google Translate, but fortunately now I can read some texts in English, but the feeling is not the same. I'll start posting on the sites: FanFiction.Net, RoyalRoad and ScribbleHub. If you know other good sites, let me know.
This fanfic is one of the best I’ve read. The characters feel fleshed out, and the story has its twists and its own little OC plot. The author does an amazing job bringing new ideas while staying true to the original books.
All I have to say is _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ for the love of God man you're killing me smalls
Dear Author, your fanfic is awesome. But your updates are like living in hell. please upgrade your updates, pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.
Trash novel, writing is childish. the characters has no brain, reading this fic make me want to vomit very awful.
I like this book. I like the mysteries and foreshadowing. I like how totally clueless Ethan is. I love how he made Luna a popular girl with many friends. I like that Ron isn't an idiot. Please keep writing this.
This is such a fun book! There are mysteries and plot changes that fight the plot Armor! This book is keeping me up at night!
I like this book. I'm only a few chapters in, but I've added it into my llibrary. I like the character and where the story is going.
First chapter was great, next chapters were awful. 100 chapters in and I lost all my time reading this fic Writing: MTL quality, I don't mind authors starting with bad English but after 100 chapters and still having the same issues as chapter 1 makes the story just hard to read. Update: good, but slowing it down for better quality cpuld be better. Story Development: Had potential but the author decided to write blandly, not using the vasics such as Chekov's gun, the words read end up being worthless drivel since not a single bit of information shows any value. Things end up happening spontaneously or "Just Because". Character Design: THERE IS A WIKI, ALL YOU NEED TO SO IS READ IT TO UNDERSTAND A BIT OF PERSONALITY. Characters end up bland, the MC... gas no personality, its like every experience he has does nothing to him. He's perfect, he knows all, if he does not agree then it is wrong. I've read a lot and this character design follows the amateur method of, "Do something, explain later". Please, remeber that its vetter to show not tell. Show a person get emotional, act on that emotion then commit an action. Don't make a character commit an action THEN explain why he did that. It only works in anime and manga or VISUAL works since we could SEE whats happening. World Background: Mystery is good but writing exposition should only be done to reveal a mystery. Don't make an exposition and hold back to contain mystery. If you want to keep things secret then keep it secret. Also, don't make us read the MC's thoughts. The MC works on conjecture, he believes his truth so just make him learn what he knows, reveal what needs to be revealed fully when you are ready, don't edge, that just makes the story less mysterious and more stupid. A good premise, had potential but qith failed execution. Rewriting of the story is possible, pre hogwarts arc cpuld be shortened to 1 chapter, remove all useless exposition. Keep the MC's thoughts on magic and the world to himself. Make him OP, it doesn't matter, but write it in a way that makes readers want to k ow why he is so strong. How he got so strong and do this by making MC correct his understanding on magic. This way you have a GOOD reason why an OP MC is going to Hogwarts. Hope this helps
3.6 This HP FF should be read with your brain shut off. Or else you'll be having a war of logic with your own brain. that's why I stopped reading after a few chapters. lol
Perfeição, ansiosa pelos proximos capítulos. Eu olho todos o dias pra ver se os novos capítulos chegaram e estou ansiosa pelo romance com a Luna
Worst fic i’ve read in a while lol. Its a cringefest and the author basically just gives the MC anything without thorough explanation and its a bit xianxia like too. Must be why its bad
Bueno la historia tiene una gran trama,desarrollo y los personajes como el prota y su familia son muy interesantes llegando a amarlos desde el principio, me encanta como el prota ha estado relacionandose con todos y por supuesto como ha manejado la historia canon y cambiado ciertas cosas , creo que mi unica queja que es mas algo de gusto personal no me gusta el triángulo amoroso que se esta formando y como el prota a pesar de su habilidad aun no se da cuenta de nada de esto y por ultimo #lunaforever❤️, eso en fin me gusta mucho la historia espero seguir leyendola ahora al dia 😎
The story is good with the charismatic and fun MC, but this loses a lot of value compared to the clear lack of action, transforming the story into a pure slice of life
I started off very well with the MC as a playful and positive character with Unique power but gradually it became boring as he is carrying the world on his shoulders and also trying to keep the plot as it is and being the careful character he is he always ignores his weird dreams by putting the important things back of his mind. The story would have been better if it continues a playful MC who understands his power
Really, and I mean really great story. Good plot, enough deviation from the original HP to not make it boring and repetitive, amazing cliffhangers and mysteries tthat make you want to read more & really great characters PS: I hope Ethan can be in a polygamous relationship with Luna & fleur
love most of it so far I don't like how author is trying to maybe setup a Harem. PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM
As of chapter 432, this is a well made fan-fic (i guess because idk how to diferentiate), The character design is pretty good and reasonable, World background is very well explained (Considering me as a Harry Potter fan, so maybe not that well for newcomers), Writing Quality is incredibly good only some errors that are very rare, Story development is also nice (didnt like some of the added stuff, not all of them just some) , Overall a really good read that hooks the reader.
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Buena historia toca esperar que si continúe 5/5 .............................................................. .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I have to say. . . this is hard to read. Especially at the beginning because this is as far as I go despite my OCD desire to finish what I have started. Some stories are cringy but they are like falling down a slope with an incline where you don't lose much momentum. This is so hard to read (at least in the beginning) where the slope of the reading is like hitting flat ground every time there is some trash writing which is every other paragraph. It stops the flow of the story every time I physically cringe and start scratching my face like a trashed junkie.
An excellent Harry Potter novel with a good storyline and World Background. Please continue the novel. The stability of Updates should be much better.
It starts pretty good and fast paced, although the MC's rapid progress doesn't have a great explanation and feels unjustified. But the big problem comes the moment he starts at Hogwarts. The story just slows down to a crawl with unnecessary excruciatingly detailed explanations of every little thing the MC does. 50 chapters of nothing interesting happening and little to no progress in the story becomes normal. The MC also seems to also loose his motivations to become stronger like protecting his family or changing the wizard world to stop discrimination and he basically becomes a normal slightly more talented student who doesn't train much and barely has any progress in his abilities. If you want to read a slice of life novel without much action in the HP world you might still like this one but if you expect anything to happen you will probably be dissapointed.
Enjoyable read, excellent characters, full of excellent references and jokes. So far one of the best Harry Potter fics
i like it but the mystery about the beast magic he has is more annoying then intriguing. he cant use it. Its actually hindering him more then helping him. And it only com up twice ij 200 chapters.... thats too long to stretch a mystery. Without clues. or explanation. or resolution. 200 chapters makes it annoying every time you bring it up. Just focus on the story cause your characters beast power sucks.
As a shameless author... Or very smart and cunning, I'm giving myself five stars, just because I can, and because that might be the only one I'll get... Sniff. (Feel sorry for me and give me five stars, hehe). I hope my story pleases you all, just as many of the stories here please and cheer me. :) I would also like you to tell me what I can improve on the fanfic, because it would improve the experience for you guys, and it would help me to write better (And learn English). But please, when commenting, be respectful. I would love to receive a negative review to help me improve, but I would be very disappointed (and perhaps annoyed) if I were only given name-calling and mockery. But I still hope you have fun reading and commenting, just as I had fun writing. Thanks Se7en! :)