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This is a great story that should deserve 5 stars. The issue with it is that the chapters seem to get shorter and shorter but cost the same. It feels like a money grab. Most authors use the authors note tab to leave notices to readers but this story uses the announcements in the actual story to fill out the word count. I read it for the daily limited free which allowed me to make it to chapter 130ish and I started unlocking chapters with coins up to around 270ish. It is a great story but I actually started skipping chapters to save coins because the ones I skipped didn't have much substance to them. It felt like the announcements were equal to 1/6th of the actual story we were getting each chapter. Too bad I would have liked to keep reading but I can't justify spending my money for hardly anything in return.
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a bit spoiler Ahem! Ahem! as I continue to read this I consider myself stopping it as I really hate how he take Selena with him, but as I read more chapters and also think about klautz pov, I started to enjoy this more than I can think, like why hate a woman if you know that she will not betray you while also do willingly what you command to her. I hate the part where Verona interfere when klautz was fighting with Eli, but thinking about it, it was really necessary to do that part as we need it to do some character development as it was boring if she suddenly became survibedient to him. so for that part you really great author. For the lemon part, you also do great at that author that I begun to think if it was based on experience GHAHHAHA but if my hunch is true can you kindly teach me sensei! There was some typo but it was so little that you will not care about it. I also like how thick skinned our mc when they were in that secret room where they first met Verona on the bonus stage. where he do the deed with Selena even she was at that room GAHHAHHA it really turn me on GHAHAHHA and from that part I know that something within Verona will be going to awaken GHAHAHHAH I'm still at the 80s chapters and it was already awesome so I expect that it was more going to get interesting when I caught up
Short chapters. it would've been fine if it weren't for fillers taking most of the chapters. the story is decent but again, there's too many fillers for the story to progress
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To be honest I like this story alot, what I didn't like is the forced deaths when he did the trial of control, Kristie didn't really need to die, his death was unnecessary, if the author really only wanted one to survive he could've let Kristie and Brett die together at the next stage, but other than that awesome story
WQ: (5/5). US: (5/5). SD: (5/5). CD: (4/5). WB: (5/5). 30 chapters in and can say with confidence that Im defintley going beyond those paid chapters. Concept is done in an intriguing way. So far, the MC holds the story together for me. I like the lone wolf/morally grey types of characters. They can repetitive but when written right, theyre pretty kino. Ive been looking around the site for a while for a good story to read since I joined, and Im glad this is the first one to stick with me. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
For a first try quite good. Normally I would give you 6/10 but I see that's get better with time soo 10/10. Keep it up [img=recommend] ...
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A good novel. However, there's various points needed to be mentioned. 1- Early wall pay chapters, with only 31 chapters being able to decide whether you like the story or not. This isn't a problem itself If it weren't for the short chapters. The chapter are too short for what the novels need. 2- This point is related with the previous one, due to short chaps, there isn't a feeling of development with every chapter, you need to start lengthen the chaps or at least rethink about how you will build each chapter, please don't fall under the premise of spamming chapters for small events that could be easily be fixed with a length of 1.800k to 2k words length. 3- The early chaps really need to be extended to at least 3k words to explain your new readers where they are and let everything set go for the walled chaps, where you could put the story on. Nonetheless, the novel have an interesting premise, a good world building and background and the MC is interesting. What I liked more about this novel is the ground to improvement with the MC personality, as having a new chance to experiment things he couldn't in his previous life could lead to interesting plots. The females characters are well portrayed as the side characters personalities too.
This novel is ok as at chapter 103, the world background was ok,the story is good. But... There is alot of problems with the writing quality, alot of errors with the writing plus the story lacks detail in a lot of ways either with the quests, classes, equipments and even the story plots. For instance how long did the tutorial last. MC made a comment to the new initiates dying of thirst in the early chapters but we never saw this happen. The quest for water was a total flop, the group went out once and that was it no further updates. Though I assume it was a failure but after that was another plot and then the end. In shot Author needs to develop story better - more details.
Reviewed at chp93: WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough. SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla. CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown. US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience. WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there. In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't. The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.
Very good! Author got a good story going on here. I just hope the MC can lighten up a little over time as he meets more people. I know it should take some time because of his past but some girls or friends should make him change eventually. [img=recommend]
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Everything so far in this novel is very good, I am impressed !! keep up the great work, author-san! =) <3333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
it has a lot of fillers but it is really good, the world building is extensive and it has a nice plot and finally for all men of culture 😏, the s*x scenes are really good.
overall good novel but i see some similarities to a korean novel/manwha by the name memorize. Did you get the inspiration from that said novel?. i only read up to chap 4 and i enjoy it quite far... Cheers!
can anyone suggest me similar novel???? ???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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Story starts off great, but... I came and saw the tags, such as #harem. I can say from the start when I started reading till chapter 17 that it should focus more on the MC because some readers just want to know on how the harem would usually start until it really becomes a 'harem'. This strange thought came to my mind that the male side characters were the harem of the MC, because the early chapters already started simultaneously detailing and focusing on the MC and the Side characters. Introduction of side characters came out quicker than what I thought, you could've just started slow with one. Other side characters at the start doesn't really give that much support in the start story of the MC. The story hooked me but stopped me from reading when the 2 male side characters started showing up, what is this? is this drama where a love triangle starts then goes to pentagon then octagon, so on... I just skimmed and scanned and was too lazy to actually read because wherever I stop and try to actually read, it starts in a place where the side character shows up. This gives vibes of Western and Eastern novel mixed together, that it makes me irritated when I think the about the negative points of both types of novel in one novel. I would like to continue reading, but giving this review, it's time for me to move on and go to other novels. - Still rooting for improvement 😊 -
Hi! This is kerawood, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry
the book has a good plot, interesting and catchy lines and a smooth flow of the story. it kept me hooked and I read all the chapters at once, please do update soon.
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To be honest i don’t read action novels, but when i read its first chap i like the plot and the way its writer explained the every single detail was very good 👍👍 A must read for Action lovers
Guys add it to your gallery if you are into reincarnation themed stories . If you are not into reincarnation , read it once . it's one hell of a story! major recommended 🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡
This Book is very attractive. Fascinating from thoughts, extreme pickups of words that even surprised me. It's too good that I hate to take a break. it is a masterpiece of writing. Excellent work author. Way to Goooooo!!! This MC has a good fitting in the book and strong desire. I like this kind. Awesome selection. Keep going author. Write out stuff that blows our minds! I recommend to all this book. It's too great. Hot while reading. Burning while thinking! Excellent art piece Go author GO
This author basically plagiarized “The king of the Battlefield”. Changed a few but alot of it are the same word per word
This is a great story that should deserve 5 stars. The issue with it is that the chapters seem to get shorter and shorter but cost the same. It feels like a money grab. Most authors use the authors note tab to leave notices to readers but this story uses the announcements in the actual story to fill out the word count. I read it for the daily limited free which allowed me to make it to chapter 130ish and I started unlocking chapters with coins up to around 270ish. It is a great story but I actually started skipping chapters to save coins because the ones I skipped didn't have much substance to them. It felt like the announcements were equal to 1/6th of the actual story we were getting each chapter. Too bad I would have liked to keep reading but I can't justify spending my money for hardly anything in return.
Great work Keep it up 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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a bit spoiler Ahem! Ahem! as I continue to read this I consider myself stopping it as I really hate how he take Selena with him, but as I read more chapters and also think about klautz pov, I started to enjoy this more than I can think, like why hate a woman if you know that she will not betray you while also do willingly what you command to her. I hate the part where Verona interfere when klautz was fighting with Eli, but thinking about it, it was really necessary to do that part as we need it to do some character development as it was boring if she suddenly became survibedient to him. so for that part you really great author. For the lemon part, you also do great at that author that I begun to think if it was based on experience GHAHHAHA but if my hunch is true can you kindly teach me sensei! There was some typo but it was so little that you will not care about it. I also like how thick skinned our mc when they were in that secret room where they first met Verona on the bonus stage. where he do the deed with Selena even she was at that room GAHHAHHA it really turn me on GHAHAHHA and from that part I know that something within Verona will be going to awaken GHAHAHHAH I'm still at the 80s chapters and it was already awesome so I expect that it was more going to get interesting when I caught up
Short chapters. it would've been fine if it weren't for fillers taking most of the chapters. the story is decent but again, there's too many fillers for the story to progress
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To be honest I like this story alot, what I didn't like is the forced deaths when he did the trial of control, Kristie didn't really need to die, his death was unnecessary, if the author really only wanted one to survive he could've let Kristie and Brett die together at the next stage, but other than that awesome story
WQ: (5/5). US: (5/5). SD: (5/5). CD: (4/5). WB: (5/5). 30 chapters in and can say with confidence that Im defintley going beyond those paid chapters. Concept is done in an intriguing way. So far, the MC holds the story together for me. I like the lone wolf/morally grey types of characters. They can repetitive but when written right, theyre pretty kino. Ive been looking around the site for a while for a good story to read since I joined, and Im glad this is the first one to stick with me. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
For a first try quite good. Normally I would give you 6/10 but I see that's get better with time soo 10/10. Keep it up [img=recommend] ...
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A good novel. However, there's various points needed to be mentioned. 1- Early wall pay chapters, with only 31 chapters being able to decide whether you like the story or not. This isn't a problem itself If it weren't for the short chapters. The chapter are too short for what the novels need. 2- This point is related with the previous one, due to short chaps, there isn't a feeling of development with every chapter, you need to start lengthen the chaps or at least rethink about how you will build each chapter, please don't fall under the premise of spamming chapters for small events that could be easily be fixed with a length of 1.800k to 2k words length. 3- The early chaps really need to be extended to at least 3k words to explain your new readers where they are and let everything set go for the walled chaps, where you could put the story on. Nonetheless, the novel have an interesting premise, a good world building and background and the MC is interesting. What I liked more about this novel is the ground to improvement with the MC personality, as having a new chance to experiment things he couldn't in his previous life could lead to interesting plots. The females characters are well portrayed as the side characters personalities too.
This novel is ok as at chapter 103, the world background was ok,the story is good. But... There is alot of problems with the writing quality, alot of errors with the writing plus the story lacks detail in a lot of ways either with the quests, classes, equipments and even the story plots. For instance how long did the tutorial last. MC made a comment to the new initiates dying of thirst in the early chapters but we never saw this happen. The quest for water was a total flop, the group went out once and that was it no further updates. Though I assume it was a failure but after that was another plot and then the end. In shot Author needs to develop story better - more details.
Reviewed at chp93: WQ(3/5) - There are some mistakes(typos, extra words, wrong sentence structures) but it's few and far in between. Nothing amazing but it's readable enough. SD(2/5) - I'm not a huge fan of the pacing of the story. It feels very "jerky". Like a car shifting gears too quick. The plot progression so far has been lacklustre in my opinion. The premise is interesting enough but can't raise the score above a solid 3. Now for the "plot" for those who care, pretty alright. It's decent but not ground-breaking. So far we have a few chps of Selena and MC. It mostly depends on your preference, pretty rough but still quite vanilla. CD(3/5) - I'm torn on this. The MC is interesting enough though frustrating at times. The issue is that the way the author introduces us to him as a character, there are far too many perspective shifts, it's told through flashbacks and having too many in any medium is never a good idea. It's fine to be used sparingly to show past events but thats the issue, here it's used as a tool to convey the MC's char to readers, even worse is it's in parts. It might contribute to that "jerky" feeling I get when reading. Now I commend the author for actually building side characters. For example, Selena and Verona are given a fair bit of screentime and inner monologues to give us an idea of their thoughts and character. This can be a double-edged sword however, as focus might be shifted off the MC. But I'm glad to say the author divided the focus quite well. Now why I'm torn on this is the fact I like the side char building but absolutely abhor the MC's char building itself. It feels inorganic and doesn't flow well compared to how the side chars are shown. US(4/5) - The author seems pretty consistent in his updates and actually responds to his audience. WB(4/5) - The world itself is slowly being built and honestly it would be a solid 3, I gave it a 4 just because it's piqued my interest and is genuinely interesting. The world the author is writing seems mysterious and intriguing, u can't help but think there are far deeper secrets due to the hints here and there. In conclusion, a decent but rough read. The idea is solid but the execution isn't. The pacing and plot of the story needs quite a fair bit of work, especially with the MC's char building. It just feels completely inorganic to show the character like this. But here's the great kicker, premium chps are locked at chp30. That is going to greatly hurt the exposure this novel is going to get. For the word count of chps, it's just not worth it. I might return to this novel in the future but so far it doesn't look too promising. All the best author and I hope this review helps.
Very good! Author got a good story going on here. I just hope the MC can lighten up a little over time as he meets more people. I know it should take some time because of his past but some girls or friends should make him change eventually. [img=recommend]
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Everything so far in this novel is very good, I am impressed !! keep up the great work, author-san! =) <3333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
it has a lot of fillers but it is really good, the world building is extensive and it has a nice plot and finally for all men of culture 😏, the s*x scenes are really good.
overall good novel but i see some similarities to a korean novel/manwha by the name memorize. Did you get the inspiration from that said novel?. i only read up to chap 4 and i enjoy it quite far... Cheers!
can anyone suggest me similar novel???? ???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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Story starts off great, but... I came and saw the tags, such as #harem. I can say from the start when I started reading till chapter 17 that it should focus more on the MC because some readers just want to know on how the harem would usually start until it really becomes a 'harem'. This strange thought came to my mind that the male side characters were the harem of the MC, because the early chapters already started simultaneously detailing and focusing on the MC and the Side characters. Introduction of side characters came out quicker than what I thought, you could've just started slow with one. Other side characters at the start doesn't really give that much support in the start story of the MC. The story hooked me but stopped me from reading when the 2 male side characters started showing up, what is this? is this drama where a love triangle starts then goes to pentagon then octagon, so on... I just skimmed and scanned and was too lazy to actually read because wherever I stop and try to actually read, it starts in a place where the side character shows up. This gives vibes of Western and Eastern novel mixed together, that it makes me irritated when I think the about the negative points of both types of novel in one novel. I would like to continue reading, but giving this review, it's time for me to move on and go to other novels. - Still rooting for improvement 😊 -
Hi! This is kerawood, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail. This contest is free entry
the book has a good plot, interesting and catchy lines and a smooth flow of the story. it kept me hooked and I read all the chapters at once, please do update soon.
Love it ... . . . . . . . .. . .. . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
To be honest i don’t read action novels, but when i read its first chap i like the plot and the way its writer explained the every single detail was very good 👍👍 A must read for Action lovers
Guys add it to your gallery if you are into reincarnation themed stories . If you are not into reincarnation , read it once . it's one hell of a story! major recommended 🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡
This Book is very attractive. Fascinating from thoughts, extreme pickups of words that even surprised me. It's too good that I hate to take a break. it is a masterpiece of writing. Excellent work author. Way to Goooooo!!! This MC has a good fitting in the book and strong desire. I like this kind. Awesome selection. Keep going author. Write out stuff that blows our minds! I recommend to all this book. It's too great. Hot while reading. Burning while thinking! Excellent art piece Go author GO
This author basically plagiarized “The king of the Battlefield”. Changed a few but alot of it are the same word per word