Through the Multiverse

interesing history. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

LV 3

marianela_arebalo_7450

Just one tip: you could make a chapter at the beginning, where you would put the worlds you visit, the girls, what you will do, so that what comes next is not lost, several readers always get lost when names appear or forget it, it would be better for him reader and for you put the names of important people and their girls.

LV 14

Kw0z

One of the worst fanfics I’ve read. The grammar is terrible, the MC is annoying, and the author’s humor is terrible. I hope he doesn’t make these jokes in real life so that people don’t need to force themselves to give some pity-laughs.

LV 5

dimas115

the authors use trash talking too much, although sometime it will be funny but if you use too much it will become digusting. the background setting none, author didnt tell us about the world he is in,i know it is fanfiction but sometime people who hasnt read or watching it o it is better to tell us in broef about the world. character development 0,

LV 4

Saintbarbido

The grammar could use a little work. That said, the book stands out as compared to others of the same Trope in this site. The mc is interesting in the earlier chapters and I'm curious to see his character development.

LV 5

jeanpierregerardo

more chapter autor please. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

LV 2

Daoistx465Sm

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LV 4

MelisitaPtlv

Your story seems interesting, if you want it to be more striking, I would recommend that you put a more striking image and some labels, with a more detailed synopsis.

LV 11

shiro_43

get a couple chapters in and you'll see how ridiculous this story is its dumb Because if i had to go through the pain of reading it so will you. I had a little hope this would be good i was wrong very wrong. some people might like it but its not for me.some people might like it but its not for me.Some people might might like it but its just not for me.

LV 3

GawkGawk

The author isnt really good at writing stories as a whole. But more of rushing the details and just explaining what he does and not how or why he does it.

LV 4

J3ffinh000

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LV 3

michael_cerna

Author, if you have time, find an image of how your protagonist would be and put some girls from the worlds you will visit, or a girl as a photo cover, to make it attractive.

LV 3

MrsSoledad

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LV 5

jeanpierregerardo

more chapter please xD. *************************************************************************************************************************************************************

more chapter please autor. *********************************************************************************************************************************************************************

LV 2

Daoistx465Sm

good and interesing . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

LV 5

jeanpierregerardo

interesing history. - more chapter please. ******************************************************************************************************************************************************************************

LV 3

jtf_jtf

story idea is interesting but character seems to jump around. there is very little character growth other then 'LETS GRAB IT ALL AND TAKE THE WOMAN TOO.'

LV 4

Cody_Mohr

entertaining read hope to see where it goes

LV 4

mikepeterjack

ok so it was great at first then it got better then i got caught up because i couldn't stop reading sad but great story .....................