Another Tale: Osborn

LV 4

amaturewriter

Very dope. Norman SI? never read one before. The powers could be improved upon. interested to see what happens and how he'd use em to rival the top tier. Norman was smart, or at least cunning and a planner [ minus the insanity ], would like to see this. His plans, the progress of it and the execution rather than just mentioning it in one para and moving on, like most ff;s. And would prefer a non heroic MC or chaotic neutral MC or even a villain. cause for obvious reasons. But if heroic dont make him the midoriya type. Any relationships, try to build over a period of time instead of rushing it in weeks/days. And show the progress instead of rushing it overall really like the idea, its dope. suggestions: magic. make him a speedster or atleast some power of that type. suits his theme, and power and skill. GL

LV 4

Kurosis

What the hell man this is amazing I expected it to be good but not this good. The pace is really good. I have a feeling MC will have two wives lucky harry, he won't complain having 2 mothers haha. Would be a shame if author drops this.

LV 4

Lethal_Drinker

Great idea and I liked the novel. Writing Quality is very good. Story development is a little shaky in my opinion but it's still going well so far. The Character design however is bad, the author specifically stated that the mc has emotions of the original Norman but I see no shred of resemblances of the original Norman Osborn neither the comics(616 or any other) nor the cartoons or movie versions for that matter. On top of that it's a harem novel so I didn't hold out much hope for the novel, come on a harem in a modern United States and the person in question is famous buisness man, even with all the weird shit that happens in Marvel this is just stupid. Updating stability is good. World background is ok.

LV 3

Assm_Otaku

Harem suggestion Natasha Romanoff Captain Marvel Felicia hardy blackcat Gwen Stacy Mary Jane Watson Gamora (Thanos adapted daughter) Instead of Pokémon harem with forced plot I hope for more romantic developments and slowly building up relationships base on trust and slowly development With every girl to the point that all girl won't give up on mc for any other one Even accepted harem thing instead of losing Mc.... Also Mc should be cool enough to attract all those women to him I hope he keep his silent behavior with very little words... Actions speak lauder than any words I hope Mc take the theam of acting like John wick very silent very deadly john wick the boogeyman

LV 3

J_Gemini

great novel I say it is at a similar level of the novel procrastinator in MCU too bad it's been dropped on webnovel and I can't seem to find it online .honestly love this new favourite list .love the idea wonder .whose gonna be in the harem pretty sure Mary Jane gonna be in the harem looking forward to future power ups

LV 13

Shahn12

When I started to read this fanfiction I was kind of bummed how the author realized conversation flow and how he marked it but later in the story, he changed and improved it (it's still not perfect and lots of times there is too much of she said he said or equivalent, so my tip is to just start a conversation with she said to know who starts it between them and then just write he shouted or so when necessary ). The story is good and even if I think there is a lot of potential still there, I need to remember that it's only the beginning. The author still deserves a 5-star review. So in short in my opinion if the conversation flow is improved one of the biggest mistakes that in my opinion turns a lot of new readers away is fixed and I would love if you (the author) would go back to earlier chapters and overwork the old conversation flow to make make it easier for new readers to join and enjoy your work.

LV 1

Dragonian_fighter

Very good fiction I hope you won't stop it I hope Mc keep his cold a calm and very silent behavior and this cool personality He just keep his emotions inside His actions explain his real Nobel inside No hero route nor a evildoer But something like a anti-hero act like a godfather or something like that If there is harem I suggest Natasha Romanoff Mary Gwen Stacy Felicia hardy Captain Marvel If possible Gamora (Thanos daughter) Please focus more on romantic plot in building this harem I hate Pokémon harem that all about forced plot

LV 5

Kongarthur

I haven't read it yet but just from the fact that the mc isn't a total psychopath it's already above 99,99% of the fic on this website keep doing that. I really hate webnovels culture where every mc has to be a violent psycopath who can't be nice or help somebody without being called a beta while all the comments when a female character is introduced is to type R*pe her

LV 2

Kazuto_Kirigaya_9360

OK,So..... I'm just gonna give this 3.8stars cuz the author was kind enough to explain a bit 'bout this fanfiction in the"Read it" chapter (NOW IF U R WONDERING WHAT I MEAN BY "Read it" CHAPTER , ITS THE CHAPTER BEFORE THE FIRST CHAPTER STARTS) And m gonna be honest i dont like these kind of plots. NOW IF U R WONDERING WHAT I MEAN BY"these kind of plots", The protagonist is already a DAD!!*take a deep breath* *take a deep breath* *calm down* (dude m still 17!!,well i just like to fantasize myself as the protagonist so yeah it just scares me to fantasise that i already have a kid <its scary, believe me>)and there are a bunch of seals on your "OP POWERS"(yeah ,M BEING SARCASTIC,FIGHT ME!) (i hope you guys don't get offended and even if u do m gonna say it anyways THIS IS SIMPLY DOGSH*T!!!) ],so.... yeah m sorry but m not daring enough to read this one I HOPE U GUYS FIND URSELF A GF SOON SO THAT U DONT HAVE ENOUGH TIME TO WASTE SO MUCH TIME ON A SH*TTY COMMENT LIKE THIS ONE PEACE!

LV 2

Nafsu_geass28

is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?

LV 14

GAMING_IS_MUST

Man its a great fic, though Mr.author you haven't written for about a month I hope this review can ignite your writing spirit a bit[img=update][img=update]

LV 4

Eclairs

Well the story is progressing well. Cant see any major plotholes that have already not be mentioned . i look forward to see how the world presents to us by the author eyes

LV 3

Johnathon_Magus

I have finished the story now on to the review. The story itself had a ton of potential. A lot of of avenue’e the author could have explored were either unfufilled or alluded to. The pacing my gosh the pacing! Welp I am for slow paced stories done right this is not the case. Too many filler moment’s and charcter interaction’s that should have progressed the story, which unfortuantly did not. I believe reasearch moment’s could have been glossed over. The focus on charcter interaction’s particular the girl’s felt dare I say felt forced and not as organic as the author thought it was. The will they or won’t they scenario get’s old fast. I do not like a rushed story mind you. However prolonging or expounding on interaction’s, which are either trivial or don’t play a larger role later leave’s much to be desired. The only charcter which I appreciated the most was Benard out of all people. Him being the voice of reason yet is ingnored either by the MC or the author. The irony is the author write’s his charcter knowing the romance is being dragged through the mud. The Mc being dense like a rock or willfully ingnorant of girl’s potential feeling’s. Did I mention that he is a practically a 40 year old man giving Norman and the transmigrator’s age put together. Giving the impression of middle aged man vibes. Though I wish their was no harem it seem redudant and forced. The MC was a robot his emotion’s either being mute or talking when needed. Like the Mc is huh I’ll guess I’ll talk to remind people I have emotion’s and win the audience by my “fathering” of Harry. Another complaint is the underutilzation of the Spider man spider’s which are available day one though MC never approach’s them till 80+ chaps though that never get’s anywhere. The simplest power up squandered giving vauge reason’s of the web of destiny which may or may not exist. Even if it did may not have been detrimental. Overall the abysmal pacing, the forced non-existant harem. Indecisive and ignorant on love MC with robot like emotion’s. Squandered opportunities. With the Deus ex machina Lux the entity that preserves the MC even though he should have die. MC having a random pure soul that is never elaborated on making Lady Death obessed. Meaning he’s alway’s protected. Faces minimal challenges or struggles if at all. Author can’t make up his mind where he want’s to go with his story. Alright that is all hoped this helped anyone that is all peace.

LV 14

Kabuk5

I liked this very much at the beginning, but now I'm bored. There's world and character development for everyone except the SI. He remains apathetic and resists changing.

LV 14

AinzO0alGown

American "I heard your child was born? Congratulations! Bro!" British "Oy mate I herd yo'r childe Os'born,innit? You feackin stupid mate! Srupid I tell ya!"

LV 4

godie

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LV 1

Exar_Daniels

Criticism based on my observations (objectivity first and foremost). This story so far exudes presumption - and in spades! I mean, the play is well written. Fantastically well, in fact. Commendable. But as alternative as "this" MCU of yours is, dear author. Mixing DC mobs characters ( the Ducard that one) in the MCU is too risky. And when you add the mystery of each chapter ending to the mix. Well, this gets messy. It's as if the MC's life (character the reader identifies with) is out of his hands. Man, that borders on sadism, truth be told. Or the thing about wishes and gods watching during the prologue. All as a casual office roll. That was the funniest joke of the day, honestly. The only salvageable thing about this whole mess called fanfiction, aside from good writing, are the excellent portrayals of MJ, the Osborn kid and finally Bernard. Nothing else to say. Anyone who seeks to contradict this is only fooling themselves or is a masochist like the MC. One of two. Hahaha.

LV 10

Akira_Costa_0011

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