The Fall of Olympus

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mssuigeneris

Hello, author. First of all, I really like this work. Its got a vibe that I live for so much. But, I got a few issues. First, I got confused by the sudden changes in POV. You might like to proofread this a bit, coz the transition of 'I' to 'Sven' (first person to third person) is really confusing. Also, I noticed this. Your title says Fall of Olympus. But since that chap when a mage killed the villagers, you mentioned he used runes to cast his spell. RUNES. And I thought, 'hey, I don't remember any association of runes with GREEK mythology nor Olympus.' I know this since I'm a sucker for mythologies around the world and I write a mythology novel myself. So I really value accuracies. This is where I realized another inconsistency about your work. As I continue to read, I finally concluded that your work isn't GREEK, its NORSE. Norse Mythology uses runic symbols, like the Fehu rune for Frey. Even your characters have Nordic names inspired from the Vikings. I would love to continue reading this but I needed a break with all this confusion and inconsistency. Don't take it the wrong way, I SERIOUSLY LOVE YOUR STORYLINE. But I needed to make sure that I'm getting to the right track and I'm not misled by the myth references. Maybe I'm wrong, but maybe I'm right too. Anyway, I'll get back to this once I have a clearer head. Thank you for reading this semi-rant. Please continue writing. The quality of the story is really promising. Just get your references correctly, and this'll be perfect.