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Lots of potential, and it's even better because the author is a new writer. This means he will take our advice into consideration and improve.
Writing Quality 4/5 : The Idea is pretty good for me and I alway feel very pleased with the way the mc thinks and acts towards this new world(Ps: I really don't check on grammar because I am a pretty fast reader, so I am not gonna add that to my review). He pointed out factors to which every mc should take into account: Wealth, Status and Strength. He is building his strength by hiring competent teachers to achieve his goals, this shows hard work of mc's part and wise decision, even though he got the wishes he doesn't neglect training. Also, I must say that the tournament was very good, keep it up ! Status: Of course, being one of the young master of a large family it already gives him status, but he truly doesn't control anything in his family yet due to his rivalry with his brother, I like how he plots against his brother to get the upper hand on the run to the patriarch seat. Meanwhile, he is always building healthy relationships to help him throughout his path. Wealth: he already has good wealth from the previous reason, but is not enough to keep up with monsters like nie li, so the idea of creating a business is pretty good. Stability of Updates 3/5: I must say... I wished I had more of this because is hard to find a good novel like yours, if you could improve more on the updates it will be amazing. Story Development 4/5: Well, I am not quite sure of the mc's goals, but there are quite a lot of obstacles regardless, since nie li will be marking the mc and his family to destroy them. Though cannon hasn't started, this is your mc's story, never forget that. Political affair and challenges mc needs to face in order to get power in the family is pretty good plot, though I can't see the big picture of mc's future or what will he do after he obtains the patriarch seat. Character Design 3/5: I mean... Is just the original's character design so... I don't have any real comments or complaints here. World Background 3/5: same reason for character design ... All in all this novel has a promising story to which I fully believe in the authors ability, If you could improve the updates it would be great, like I said, I don't care about the wishes or whatever, but I certainly do care on how he will use them. Always plan wisely each chapter and look in the future of your novel. Final Note to the author: Always give plausible reasons to the plot or supposed "mistakes" the mc makes, because that makes the story more healthy for readers. Thank you.
I have to say that I really loved the premise of this story but it is somewhat disappointing to me. Not only is it extremely boring with internal politics of the Sacred Family (which were extremely dumbed down to be easier to understand) but the entire story seems to revolve around pre-canon events. I couldn't finish it due to it being too boring, so maybe it FINALLY reaches canon timeline but it sure takes its sweet time to get there. Writing quality is pretty good, not the best but at least there weren't many glaring errors. One of the major issues with writing quality is how the author uses quotation marks for thoughts AND dialogue. This makes it very confusing when reading since you won't know if it is thought or speech until you take in all the context clues. As for story development, well as I said ealier it is SLOW and boring (in my opinion. I actually dropped it just before the 'teacher tournament or whatever). Character design is 'meh' as well. There just isn't anything really special about the MC and he seems to be irrationally afraid that someone will find out that he merged souls with Shen Yue for some reason. Also, author has gone out of his way to portray the entire Sacred Family (up to where I stopped reading at least) as being illogically evil with no real reason behind it. World background is also 'meh'. From what I can tell, it seems to be pretty accurate though, other than portraying the Sacred Family as a 'new' major family for some reason. Either way, the story just turned out rather bland for me. It was too boring to continue after I read the chapter list and found out that it doesn't even seem to go INTO canon timeline (of course I could be misinterpreting the chapter names but it seems that way to me).
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I love it .....................................................................................................................................
demasiado lento en las actulizaciones, la historia no va a ningun lado, juntando estas dos cosas es suficiente para a que cuando leas un capitulo ya te olvides de lo que estaba pasando, em fin, no muy recomendado
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Interesante, aunque esta parte del torneo fue un poco larga y al no haber capítulos seguidos rápido decidí esperar que se amontonan capítulos. Me tienes con la tía, es una perra, pero es lo que se espera de una familia así.
The only five star is world background. I actually feel confused in some part like what the hell did Ki appear in soul power based world??!!! From finding teacher to teach martial art into tournament and everyone fight using Ki instead of Soul energy based technique and their beast soul spirit... Man, it's all over the place.. And the twist in family meeting kind of forced, but meh..
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Por como va la historia todo bien pero un poco lento y como se desarrollan los personajes bien pero me confunde mucho shen es pero que ponga -algún signo o algo que diferencia al protagonista como -
A good novel with a smart mc. Just make sure to make mc calm and calculative. And more chapters and you have a top knotch novel.. Good Luck!!
This Novel Leaves A Bitter Taste In My Mouth For Now. I'll Update My Opinion In The Comment If It Becomes Better Or Worse. MC in this novel seems like he will go through a lot of struggle far worse than nie li but advance only a little as in the early chapter, author mention that he will learn alchemy from the local alchemy master or learn inscription from the local and incomplete inscription master. He will learn battling also progressing from a complete noob. Every single thought of noob or side character would be written that makes a plot far far more longer than original that makes me doubt author would not drop it. It's like I'm 90% sure mc will not reach draconic realm/above realm. And why i said it leaves a bitter taste because shen xiu is potrayed as a complete bit*h and gold digger from her nephews that she suck di*k of both shen fei and shen yue(MC)
I just arrived and I don't want to leave here, This story has a lot of potential. And I like the mc 😃 Please let yan xi be with the mc 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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BlackKingJade: Just a shameless author doing something extremely shameless to his audience. I await to see the reviews here but fearful at the same time.
Just a shameless author doing something extremely shameless to his audience. I await to see the reviews here but fearful at the same time.
Another guy has been mad at Mad Snail pace. Nice. ........................................................................................................
Lots of potential, and it's even better because the author is a new writer. This means he will take our advice into consideration and improve.
Writing Quality 4/5 : The Idea is pretty good for me and I alway feel very pleased with the way the mc thinks and acts towards this new world(Ps: I really don't check on grammar because I am a pretty fast reader, so I am not gonna add that to my review). He pointed out factors to which every mc should take into account: Wealth, Status and Strength. He is building his strength by hiring competent teachers to achieve his goals, this shows hard work of mc's part and wise decision, even though he got the wishes he doesn't neglect training. Also, I must say that the tournament was very good, keep it up ! Status: Of course, being one of the young master of a large family it already gives him status, but he truly doesn't control anything in his family yet due to his rivalry with his brother, I like how he plots against his brother to get the upper hand on the run to the patriarch seat. Meanwhile, he is always building healthy relationships to help him throughout his path. Wealth: he already has good wealth from the previous reason, but is not enough to keep up with monsters like nie li, so the idea of creating a business is pretty good. Stability of Updates 3/5: I must say... I wished I had more of this because is hard to find a good novel like yours, if you could improve more on the updates it will be amazing. Story Development 4/5: Well, I am not quite sure of the mc's goals, but there are quite a lot of obstacles regardless, since nie li will be marking the mc and his family to destroy them. Though cannon hasn't started, this is your mc's story, never forget that. Political affair and challenges mc needs to face in order to get power in the family is pretty good plot, though I can't see the big picture of mc's future or what will he do after he obtains the patriarch seat. Character Design 3/5: I mean... Is just the original's character design so... I don't have any real comments or complaints here. World Background 3/5: same reason for character design ... All in all this novel has a promising story to which I fully believe in the authors ability, If you could improve the updates it would be great, like I said, I don't care about the wishes or whatever, but I certainly do care on how he will use them. Always plan wisely each chapter and look in the future of your novel. Final Note to the author: Always give plausible reasons to the plot or supposed "mistakes" the mc makes, because that makes the story more healthy for readers. Thank you.
I have to say that I really loved the premise of this story but it is somewhat disappointing to me. Not only is it extremely boring with internal politics of the Sacred Family (which were extremely dumbed down to be easier to understand) but the entire story seems to revolve around pre-canon events. I couldn't finish it due to it being too boring, so maybe it FINALLY reaches canon timeline but it sure takes its sweet time to get there. Writing quality is pretty good, not the best but at least there weren't many glaring errors. One of the major issues with writing quality is how the author uses quotation marks for thoughts AND dialogue. This makes it very confusing when reading since you won't know if it is thought or speech until you take in all the context clues. As for story development, well as I said ealier it is SLOW and boring (in my opinion. I actually dropped it just before the 'teacher tournament or whatever). Character design is 'meh' as well. There just isn't anything really special about the MC and he seems to be irrationally afraid that someone will find out that he merged souls with Shen Yue for some reason. Also, author has gone out of his way to portray the entire Sacred Family (up to where I stopped reading at least) as being illogically evil with no real reason behind it. World background is also 'meh'. From what I can tell, it seems to be pretty accurate though, other than portraying the Sacred Family as a 'new' major family for some reason. Either way, the story just turned out rather bland for me. It was too boring to continue after I read the chapter list and found out that it doesn't even seem to go INTO canon timeline (of course I could be misinterpreting the chapter names but it seems that way to me).
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demasiado lento en las actulizaciones, la historia no va a ningun lado, juntando estas dos cosas es suficiente para a que cuando leas un capitulo ya te olvides de lo que estaba pasando, em fin, no muy recomendado
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Interesante, aunque esta parte del torneo fue un poco larga y al no haber capítulos seguidos rápido decidí esperar que se amontonan capítulos. Me tienes con la tía, es una perra, pero es lo que se espera de una familia así.
The only five star is world background. I actually feel confused in some part like what the hell did Ki appear in soul power based world??!!! From finding teacher to teach martial art into tournament and everyone fight using Ki instead of Soul energy based technique and their beast soul spirit... Man, it's all over the place.. And the twist in family meeting kind of forced, but meh..
Reveal Spoiler Por como va la historia todo bien pero un poco lento y como se desarrollan los personajes bien pero me confunde mucho shen es pero que ponga -algún signo o algo que diferencia al protagonista como -
A good novel with a smart mc. Just make sure to make mc calm and calculative. And more chapters and you have a top knotch novel.. Good Luck!!
This Novel Leaves A Bitter Taste In My Mouth For Now. I'll Update My Opinion In The Comment If It Becomes Better Or Worse. MC in this novel seems like he will go through a lot of struggle far worse than nie li but advance only a little as in the early chapter, author mention that he will learn alchemy from the local alchemy master or learn inscription from the local and incomplete inscription master. He will learn battling also progressing from a complete noob. Every single thought of noob or side character would be written that makes a plot far far more longer than original that makes me doubt author would not drop it. It's like I'm 90% sure mc will not reach draconic realm/above realm. And why i said it leaves a bitter taste because shen xiu is potrayed as a complete bit*h and gold digger from her nephews that she suck di*k of both shen fei and shen yue(MC)
I just arrived and I don't want to leave here, This story has a lot of potential. And I like the mc 😃 Please let yan xi be with the mc 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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BlackKingJade: Just a shameless author doing something extremely shameless to his audience. I await to see the reviews here but fearful at the same time.
Just a shameless author doing something extremely shameless to his audience. I await to see the reviews here but fearful at the same time.
Another guy has been mad at Mad Snail pace. Nice. ........................................................................................................